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Review of A Dozen Roses  
Review by Oddman
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi,
Your thought is visible and the overall mood the poem came up well. Excellent continuity is essential for a poem, and you made it well. Only suggestions that I have for you is, make your writing still simpler without using some long words. Not everyone can get the meaning.
Keep doing your good work!


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Review by Oddman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Clap to you!
This gives a nostalgic feel. After reading this, no one would move away without a good feel. You made it through your writing. It fits apts to current situation.... Bring back the writer you had hidden within you and let your reviewer, inside you, takes some rest.
Have a happy writing for our happy reading!


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Review by Oddman
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Rakitan,
I went through your writing. Firstly, let me share the positives I felt in your story.
A clap for taking this bold content and your way of making the readers visualize with your words is notable. I could run those scenes in my mind when I was reading, and that happened effortlessly.
The phrase, "Exchanged nods with her" is still in my mind, and that stylish thought impacts me well. This story of yours inspires and helps me to develop a skill of lively writing, writing that brings scenes alive.
And regarding the corrections and improvements, I would suggest the following:
1. I think that You are trying to use all the complex English words you know, into your story. Few might have misguided you like that. Simple words are fair enough and let Non-English readers feel the taste of your writings. If not this Kaiba's story, your upcoming papers should be celebrated by kids also all over the world and so I would suggest you use more straightforward diction.
2. In a few places, I noticed some tense mistakes and punctuations. After writing a section, if you read yours, you can rectify some errors. Even I am bad in that. Writers usually don't revise their works. But we have to. :)

Keep proceeding! My support will be there in your long journey!

Stay healthy!


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Review of Springtime  
Review by Oddman
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
These six lines seem fresh to me, Congrats for that!
A story fetched in ten words neatly. I would suggest you to check the punctuation and capitalization. For example, the words "Thriving" and "surviving" are placed as pair but with different capitalization. whatever, your work deserves claps. Keep writing!


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