FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This poem speaks of internalizing emotions and how that can make us who we are. We tend to forgive those that we claim to love, not realizing what it does to ourselves.

IMAGERY:

You did a great job with the emotional imagery in this poem. The pain and torment is felt with every line.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. The poem's short, direct lines made it flow well and gave it a nice rhythm.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this poem spoke to me and that it truly rare in poetry. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I found this to be a very inspirational poem. It is one of survival and one of rising above and starting anew.

IMAGERY:

The emotional imagery in this poem is felt deeply. Each line shows a deeper need to move on and try to find one's own happiness.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors noticed. I found this poem to flow smoothly and have a nice rhythm to it.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I thought this poem was well written and very inspirational.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I'm not so sure what is written here would fit under the horror/scary genre, but, as you stated, this is only a section so the piece as a whole might.

IMAGERY:

You did a pretty good job with the imagery, though I think this story would benefit from more description of the scenery and characters so the reader could get a better mental picture.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were quite a few spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. Also, I noticed some incomplete sentences and strange sentence structure. Some of the spelling mistakes could be caught by spell check, but others, those that are spelled right but the wrong word such as "the" when you mean "their" need to be caught during editing.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I think this story definitely has potential, but it does need a lot of work and a lot of editing.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I actually found this to be a cute little story about a natural act.

IMAGERY:

You used enough description to let the reader know what was going on without going into detail. Well done.

TECHNICALITIES:

I did notice some grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors, though they can be easily fixed with a quick edit.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this was a good story that made me smile.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I really enjoyed this poem. Having young children myself, I can easily understand and relate to it. You did a good job of describing your daughter and her actions.

IMAGERY:

I loved the picture you painted for the reader. It's very sweet.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. The lines were short and flowed very well.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this was a very sweet poem and the love you have for your daughter really shines through.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I think this is a great little poem! I like that it is in acrostic style, as that form seems to give an added element to the poem.

IMAGERY:

Very emotional and inspirational. You cheer others on while also cheering yourself on.

TECHNICALITIES:

While there was no specific rhyme scheme or meter, this poem says a lot in a few words. It is so important to encourage others as well as get encouragement from others.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I think this is a great little poem that would make a beautiful c-Note.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I really liked this poem. It started off so nice and soft and the end just made me laugh. I have had a lot of days like this.

IMAGERY:

The imagery was done very well. Each line was easily visualized and painted a great picture.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. Even with no discernible rhyme scheme, the poem had a good structure and flow.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for sharing your work.

Overall, this was a great little poem with a nice ending.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This reads to me like more of a beginning, or an ending, of a story. You could go a lot of different directions with this, which makes it a very unique piece. I would like to see it more complete and more of a solid story.

I really didn't get to know the characters very well, and I think that would help the reader connect more to the story. As it is, it's just a faceless character with no personality or struggles.

IMAGERY:

The imagery here is purely emotional. It's hard to change direction and go where you haven't before.

TECHNICALITIES:

The only technical error to note was that you are missing a period in the very last line.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this reads as only a piece of a story and I think it would be great to see it after completion.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

What a poignant little story! I like how you didn't give anything away until the ending. This story shows how we see ourselves, or how we wish to see ourselves. You did a good job portraying the emotions and longing in this piece.

IMAGERY:

I enjoyed your imagery a lot. Each detail proved vital to the story and captured my attention.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note in this story. Punctuation, grammar, and spelling were well done.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I think this story has a great message and one a lot of people can, or will, relate to. Your attention to detail really brought it all together.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This is a good flash story, though I would have liked to see the couple's reaction after seeing the headline of the newspaper at the end of the story. I know this had a word count, but I believe that leaving out a few of the descriptions at the beginning and adding the emotion at the end would have really made this great.

Another point would be showing some emotion to not being able to see from the blizzard. Most people have quite a reaction to this.

IMAGERY:

You did a good job with the imagery for such a short piece. I could see and 'feel' the snow and cold.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. No punctuation, grammar, or spelling mistakes were found and the story was structure well.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, for the restraints of a contests, this was done very well and I enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

A poem that I assume would be about nature turned out to be much, much more. I am a country girl and seeing all that concrete and steel of the city sends chills down my spine. How much was destroyed so that it could be built?

IMAGERY:

You did a wonderful job with the imagery! I loved each scene and you did a great with the description.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The poem flowed well and had a great rhythm.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I enjoyed this poem a lot, and even though it was a prompt, you did a great job of making it your own.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This poem speaks of a mother who only wants what is best for her child and that is for the child to find the light of God and not the darkness of being alone.

I really liked how you began the poem. It set a great tone for the rest of it.

IMAGERY:

I can easily see the desperation in your words, which gives all readers great imagery.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note, however, I will say again that the formatting would look and read better if it was single spaced.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a good poem with a great message.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~