Hi Sophy I am here to give you my thoughts on "On The Clock" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I really enjoyed this article and I think it makes some very valid points. Time is relative and this moment in time should be enjoyed and lived to the fullest because we will never get it back, no matter how hard we try sometimes.

IMAGERY:

Not really applicable here, but the visuals you used were quite powerful and gave a clear picture to the reader of what you were talking about.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note, however, there was a lot of repetition and I am not sure if that was done intentionally to get the point across, though it did work out well that way.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed this article and the examples you used were well thought out and realistic.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

Hi Shaara I am here to give you my thoughts on "Solving the Rubik's Cube" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I really enjoyed this story. Sometimes, we need other people to show us what is really important in life, even if it's a stranger only there to listen to our problems. Just the act of connecting to another human being can make things so clear.

IMAGERY:

I enjoyed the imagery. You paint a very vivid picture of the scenery. I really liked how you described the outdoors and the sky.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The story had a nice flow to it and was structured well.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is an enjoyable little story with a very good message.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

Hi Paul F Clayton I am here to give you my thoughts on "Final moments" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I liked the gloomy feel of this poem. The comparison of the scenery to the end, works well and adds to the overall feel.

IMAGERY:

I really enjoyed your imagery. Your description really pulled the poem together, giving the reader a dank, vivid picture.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The poem's flow was smooth and consistent.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem and thought it was well-written. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Aaron M. Peska I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Washed Up Poet" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

Even though you speak of poets, this is definitely a poem for all writers in general. You capture the feeling of block very well and the way you described the scenes around you is exactly what a writer, of any sorts, uses as inspiration.

IMAGERY:

I enjoyed your imagery. You paint a very vivid picture of the scenes for your reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The poem had a smooth and consistent flow.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I truly enjoyed reading this poem. I liked the descriptions and the rhythm and of course, I liked the meaning behind the words.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi ophelia I am here to give you my thoughts on "Graham" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This is a thought-provoking piece about a man remembering his childhood and reflecting on how things come full circle. This piece doesn't seemed finished, though. Something is missing for me and I'm not quite sure what it is.

IMAGERY:

You did a good job with the imagery. You descriptions paint a very vivid picture for the reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

The only thing I noticed is that the word "come" should be capitalized.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I think this could make a very interesting short story once finished.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Samantha Jane I am here to give you my thoughts on "Making It To The Ball" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

The first thing I need to say is that with a poem of this length you really need to add some punctuation and separate it into stanzas. Each of those suggestions would make it more eye appealing and make it easier for the reader to read it. The punctuation would also offer a pause to let the reader reflect on the poem.

With that said, the poem tells a great story from beginning to end.

IMAGERY:

You did a good job with the imagery. Your descriptions are done well, painting a vivid picture for the reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

Besides what is mentioned in the first section, I would suggest using an even syllabic count for your lines. This would give the poem a more smooth and consistent flow.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a good poem with a good story that i enjoyed reading.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Evan I am here to give you my thoughts on "True Nature" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I think there is quite a bit of truth in this short poem. Mankind leaves a legacy that is not the one we should leave, albeit one that really shouldn't be remembered.

IMAGERY:

You paint a good emotional picture for the reader, leaving them thinking, and that's what a good poem should do.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. This short poem flows smoothly and consistently even without a rhyme scheme.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

A very short, yet thought-provoking poem about what we really want to be remembered for, or what we don't.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Moarzjasac I am here to give you my thoughts on ""Prologue"" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This reads more like an explanation than a prologue, and that's okay. It's your fictional 'world' and that's all that matters. Your world is interesting, and I think it would make a good basis for a novel.

IMAGERY:

I liked the imagery. You did a good job with the descriptions and explanations.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The piece is structured well and flows smoothly.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I think this would be a good and interesting base to a story.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Lainey I am here to give you my thoughts on "Strength Within" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This poem has a very important message of taking back control of ones own life. Giving up the control can be easy, but taking it back takes strength of will and a lot of perseverance.

IMAGERY:

The picture you paint is very clear, though I did feel a little let down by the actual emotion. The words are there, but I miss the power behind them.

TECHNICALITIES:

Some of the rhymes are a little forced or not there at all. Also, the syllabic count varies, which does hinder the flow a bit.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a very powerful poem with a powerful message.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Nikki14u I am here to give you my thoughts on "Homeless" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I found this to be a very heartfelt piece. The truth and emotion behind this really hits home. It's a shame that most people associate where a person lives, or don't live, to who they are. Buildings and houses don't make a person, what's inside does. It really isn't fair that in this day and age people still have to live on the streets. It's a crying shame that we let our fellow human beings live without a house and food.

IMAGERY:

You paint a very bleak, yet vivid picture. We are defined by our belongings, with everyone trying to 'keep up with the Jones', we forget that we are all the same on the inside.

TECHNICALITIES:

The only thing I noticed is that in the third line to the end, I would change "lonly" to "loneliness".

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

A very thought-provoking piece that brings to head a reality most would rather shove under the carpet.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Sssssh! I'm not really here. I am here to give you my thoughts on "Fear of the Hunt Ed " , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This poem made me smile, and that's always a good thing. The ending was just perfect, as I would have never have guessed,but should have.

IMAGERY:

I loved the imagery of the beast. You not only have a very visual poem, but one that tells a very umm... interesting story.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found this poem to have great rhythm. It moved smoothly from one line to another, keeping the reader right in the poem where they belong.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a great poem, perfect for the contest you entered it in. I enjoyed reading it very much.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

Hi Ostuna 1 I am here to give you my thoughts on "Snow Angels" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

With a little too much partying, the main character wakes up in a place she does not know, with a man she does not know. After some inner dialogue, she gets up and finally sees outside, and it's covered in snow.

You really don't give the reader a sense of where you are going with this. You tell us it's a first chapter, and that's fine, but we need some lead toward what will happen next.

IMAGERY:

The imagery is done well. Everything is described enough so the reader can get a good picture of where she is at, inside and out.

TECHNICALITIES:

This reads as a statement of fact more than an actual story. I would have liked to see a lot more emotion. If she is somewhere she don't know, with someone she don't know, I would expect her to be scared or at the very least concerned, (unless this is a regular thing for her, but you don't mention that either) but neither one comes across here.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

With a few changes and more added emotion, this could be an interesting beginning.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Erin Bryson I am here to give you my thoughts on "Embryo" 

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I am a fan of this genre, and genetic engineering is a favorite sub of mine. I find what science can do is amazing and the stories behind it always hold some sort of truth.

This story, however, seems to be a lot like a movie I watched recently (which I am not saying is a bad thing). There are differences, of course, but the premise is the same.

With that said, your story, while not completely original, is interesting and entertaining. This is only the first part, so we are introduced to the characters and the main plot point.

IMAGERY:

I would have liked to see a little more description. I had a hard time visualizing the scene.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no real technical errors to note. The story was structured well and was easy to read.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, not a completely original story so far, but it's interesting and kept my attention. Which is a plus.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Brittany! ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Behind the Glow of the Instruments" 

This is review 2 of 2 from the Holiday Package gifted to you by InRain from Just Because I Want To.

Hi Orphan I am here to give you my thoughts on "Awake" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I'm a sci-fi junkie, so I really like the premise behind this, but it doesn't read as a story as of yet. This is more of a scene out of a bigger piece. I didn't connect with the characters much because we have no idea of who they are. Giving them names and actions would help with this. Also, there is limited description here, it's basically just inner dialogue.

IMAGERY:

The imagery here is lacking. There is no real setting for the reader to visualize. We need you to set the scene and and paint us a picture.

TECHNICALITIES:

You don't need to use both "we"and "you and I" either one will work, but both are redundant.

Format and pacing are good, as is the structure.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a good start, and I know it was for a contest, but I would really like to see it become a complete story.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

Hi Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "What Do You See?" .

This is review 2 of 2 from the Loyalty Package gifted to you by emerin-liseli from Just Because I Want To.

Hi Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Fairies And Dreams" .

This is review 1 of 2 from the Loyalty Package gifted to you by emerin-liseli from Just Because I Want To.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

What a beautiful poem full of inspiration. I loved the message and the tone. Giving thanks is something we all should do, and don't do enough.

IMAGERY:

I love the imagery of this poem! Your descriptions really capture natures splendor and paint a very vivid picture for the reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. The poem has a smooth and consistent flow, even without a rhyme scheme.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

A beautiful poem wrought with superb imagery and a meaningful message.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

What an inspirational poem! I loved the upbeat tone of it and the message is one we all need to hear.

IMAGERY:

The emotional imagery is wonderful. I could easily visualized the angels coming down to help humanity.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. The poem's flow was smooth and consistent and the rhyme scheme felt natural.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, a very upbeat and inspirational poem with a wonderful message.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I found this to be a very touching and telling poem about how, while we don't like to grieve, it is cleansing and helps us move on.

IMAGERY:

I really liked the images of the angels sitting on the tombstones. It was very fitting.

TECHNICALITIES:

I fond no technical errors to note. The poem, while not having a discernible rhyme scheme, flowed nicely.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, a moving poem about how we move on after a loved ones death.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

Oh, what a hot little poem! I love the fact that you leave most of it up to the reader's imagination, that isn't done a lot anymore.

IMAGERY:

Well, what can I say. This poem had wonderful imagery and the descriptions were tantalizing.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. Everything flowed consistently and and smoothly from one line to the next.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, a very enjoyable, steamy poem.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

Writer's block. Something most authors deal with at least once. Your main character, Aaron, finds things to fill his writing time, other than writing. The Gray House symbolizes, at least to me, the emptiness a writer feels during a block.

The second half of the story deals with more of the story creation than the block.

IMAGERY:

The imagery on the drive to the woods was fantastic. Your descriptions really brought the reader into the story,

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical errors to note. There were no obvious spelling or grammar mistakes and the structure of the story was simple and easy to read.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, this is a very interesting, well-written story.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I really loved this poem. The story behind it is so sweet and inspirational. I loved the voices you gave to the little girl.

IMAGERY:

The imagery was beautiful. Your descriptions painted a magical picture for the reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

There were no technical errors to note. The poem's flow was smooth and consistent and the rhyme scheme felt natural.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, a really beautifully written poem that tells an amazing story.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This didn't quite feel finished to me. It reads as one scene out of a longer work. The flashback was a little jarring in such a short piece.

IMAGERY:

You did a pretty good job with the imagery. The descriptions give the reader a decent picture of the scene.

TECHNICALITIES:

The first line reads a little awkward. Maybe "The Sound of the dove felt surreal to his ears."

The second line should be "regains" not "gains".

There are more errors like those above, which can be fixed with a quick edit.

Another thing is that thoughts should be italicized.

Formatting this differently would also give it a more aesthetic appeal.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

Overall, I like where you are going with this, it just needs some work and some expanding to make it read as a full story.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~