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Review of lead  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hi prescious I am here to give you my thoughts on "lead " , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.


OVERALL:

I really like the idea behind this poem.

WHAT I LIKED:

The message behind the poem.

SUGGESTIONS:

I think this would be better if it was broken up into stanzas. It would give it more eye appeal and let the reader know when the breaks should be.

Also, the word gape isn't quite right. Maybe gait.

I would also pay attention to your rhymes, as some lines do and some don't and there isn't any continuity.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. Structure suggestions are noted above.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of 10:45  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Beaureguard Schmeltzer I am here to give you my thoughts on "10:45" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.


OVERALL:

This is a sweet little poem about remembering a loved one.

WHAT I LIKED:

I liked the imagery of the poem, I could actually see them on the phone.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. Rhyme scheme and flow were both done well.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Legerdemain I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Last Snowflake" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I found this poem to be truly inspiring. You language gave the perfect atmosphere and set a wonderful mood.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the imagery. You painted a beautiful picture.

SUGGESTIONS:

The only suggestion I would have, and this is just a personal opinion, is the lines could use a little more continuity.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~Vikki~
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Review of My Dearest Son  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi JACE - House Targaryen ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "My Dearest Son" .

This is review 2 of 2 from the Holiday Package gifted to you by ~A.J. Lyle~ from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

This is a beautiful story. It has such emotion put into every word. Well done. The way to story came full circle really pulled it all together.

WHAT I LIKED:

I love the sentimental feel of the story. You really did create wonderful characters.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this story.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The structure was simple and easy to follow.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Child's Play  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi JACE - House Targaryen ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Child's Play" .

This is review 1 of 2 from the Holiday Package gifted to you by ~A.J. Lyle~ from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

This poem is very telling. Most people ignore or dismiss the elderly, or treat them like they don't matter. We must protect them, yet give them the dignity and respect they so very much deserve.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the idea of the 'circle of life'. It's very fitting.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. There wasn't really a form to this, and it really didn't read as a normal poem would, but its own structure fit it well.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Space Blunder  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Light ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Space Blunder" .

This is review 2 of 2 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by emerin-liseli from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

I really enjoyed this story. The plot kept my attention all the way through.

WHAT I LIKED:

You have good descriptions and good narrative.

SUGGESTIONS:

The only suggestions I would have is the dialogue tags. Most that you have are not needed and only slow down the story.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The structure is simple and easy to follow.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Light ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Through the Super Collider" .

This is review 1 of 2 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by emerin-liseli from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

I really enjoy sc-fi and this poem fit the genre well.

WHAT I LIKED:

The story behind the poem is what makes this a good read. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS:

I would suggest trying to keep your syllable even within each stanza. It would give the poem a better flow.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. Flow suggestions are mentioned above. Format fits the poem well.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Magdalen in Lent  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Raven ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Magdalen in Lent" .

This is review 2 of 2 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by emerin-liseli from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

I think this is a good poem speaking about the original sin.

WHAT I LIKED:

I liked how you told the story and kept to the original theme.

SUGGESTIONS:

The only suggestion I would have is to make the stanzas flow a little better.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. Flow was a little off as mentioned above.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Still Loving You  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi jaya I am here to give you my thoughts on "Still Loving You" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I think this is a beautiful poem full of wonder and emotion.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really enjoyed the descriptions and the soft voice.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The form was done well and the flow was smooth.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Imperfection  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Elisa the Bunny Stik I am here to give you my thoughts on "Imperfection" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I found this to be a very interesting letter. You did a good job of showing the reader what truly is important. Striving for perfection is a waste of time, as none of us would ever achieve it.

WHAT I LIKED:

The narrative is what I liked best. This letter has a great voice and a light tone (even though the subject can be serious).

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this letter.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The structure is simple and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Tennis  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi NanoWriMo2018 Into the Earth I am here to give you my thoughts on "Tennis" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

Overall, I found this to be a very telling poem about your love for the game and your pain.

WHAT I LIKED:

The mixture of emotions comes through very well. You love tennis, but hate the pain.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The flow was smooth and the form was easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of When  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi Song Bird ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "When" .

This is review 2 of 2 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by ember_rain from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

A sweet poem about love and how it makes us feel.

WHAT I LIKED:

I like the soft quality of the poem and the descriptions you used.

SUGGESTIONS:

I would try to even out the stanzas and give the poem a smoother flow.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

It the second to the last line, form should be from.

Form and rhythm should be looked at to make it more appealing to the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Him  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Tigerlilystar ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Him" .

This is review 1 of 1from the Friendship Package gifted to you by PatrickB from Just Because I Want To.

OVERALL:

I think this is a good poem about wishing your partner could have met your father.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the emotion you put into the poem. The feelings come through nicely.

SUGGESTIONS:

The only suggestion I would have, and this is only a personal preference, is to give the poem a little form.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. There was good flow and a nice rhythm to it.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi janice48 Have a Nice Day!! I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Monster Inside Of Me" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

This is a very emotional poem. The reader can truly empathize and feel the pain.

WHAT I LIKED:

You paint a very sad and lonely picture, but you did it very well. The feeling you put into words comes across with every line.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. The rhyme scheme is done well and the flow is smooth.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Steve adding writing to ntbk. I am here to give you my thoughts on "Rhonda, a Christmas Collab/ Acrostic" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I really enjoyed this poem. It made me smile and kept me entertained.

WHAT I LIKED:

The flow was very good and I liked your word choices. It has lovely imagery and a sweet message.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The flow was easy and the form followed.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Robert Kahil I am here to give you my thoughts on "Serenity Through Hell" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I am a sucker for dark poetry, and this one was almost there for me, but not quite. There is good imagery and a good story, but the rhyme scheme and flow were a little off for me.

WHAT I LIKED:

Both, the imagery and the word choice, worked well for me.

SUGGESTIONS:

I would suggest smoothing out the flow a bit and have a more balanced rhyme scheme.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of I AM  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi tangerinedream I am here to give you my thoughts on "I AM" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

This is a very inspirational piece of prose. It really resonates with the idea of God being all and being nothing.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the imagery and the tone of the prose. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The structure was simple and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! I am here to give you my thoughts on "When the Boughs Break" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

This is a very somber essay retelling the story of how mother nature can concur even the strongest of us.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the imagery and the tone of the piece. Both were very fitting.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this essay.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. The structure was simple and easy to follow.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Through the Storm  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi intheventofire I am here to give you my thoughts on "Through the Storm" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

I'm going to be honest. I am not too fond of retelling of stories. I prefer more originality in the things I read. But, I think you did a good job of sticking to the theme, yet giving it your own twist.

WHAT I LIKED:

The narrative was done quite well. Your storytelling is captivating.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The format was simple and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Decaying Beauty  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Winnie Kay I am here to give you my thoughts on "Decaying Beauty" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader.

WHAT I LIKED:

The imagery was wonderful. You did a great job with the flow of the poem.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The form was done perfectly.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Thump Thump Beep  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Aila Jade I am here to give you my thoughts on "Thump Thump Beep" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.


OVERALL:

I really liked this piece. It's very untraditional in format and style, but I think that is what gives it such great impact.

WHAT I LIKED:

The format is appealing, as is the content.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no mistakes in grammar or spelling noticed. The structure and format is done well.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of help  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi swiftti24 I am here to give you my thoughts on "help" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.


OVERALL:

While I found the message to be clear, the rhythm was a little off for me.

WHAT I LIKED:

You paint a very somber and sorrowful picture that the reader can easily understand.

SUGGESTIONS:

The biggest suggestion I have is to fix the typo in the description.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. The format is okay, but the rhythm could use a little work.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi janice48 Have a Nice Day!! I am here to give you my thoughts on "A Tribute To My Sons!!" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

This is a very heartfelt poem about one's love for their children.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really enjoyed the feelings and emotions that come from every word. You truly can tell how much you love your children.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The structure is well done and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of I Miss Buttons  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi >>^..^<< Kat I am here to give you my thoughts on "I Miss Buttons" , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

Death is a hard thing for most people to handle, especially children. I think you did a good job of explaining this fact of life in a way that most children would understand.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the simple narrative and the interaction between parent and child.

SUGGESTIONS:

I don't have any suggestions for this story. I think it reads well as-is.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I found no mistakes in grammar or spelling and the format is done well and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Disease Spreads.  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi StaiNed-House Targaryen I am here to give you my thoughts on "Disease Spreads." , which was highlighted for review by Simply Positive.


OVERALL:

Well, my dear, Staine, this is dark and vivid as usually. *Smile* You did a good job of telling a story through your poem.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really enjoyed the imagery and the feeling of the poem. Your words paint a dark, interesting picture.

SUGGESTIONS:

The only suggestion I have, and this is purely aesthetics, is to even out the stanzas for a more appealing look.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I found no errors in grammar or spelling and my structure suggestion is mentioned above. *Smile*

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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