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Review of The Ocean  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Joy ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Ocean. Please remember that this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

This is review 3 of 3 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by ~WhoMe???~ associated with the One Week Raffle. from:"JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM CLOSED 4NOW

As a person who lives by and loves the ocean, I found this to be a very magical poem. You descriptions are amazing and I really liked the fact you added a few pictures to truly put the imagery over the top.

Even without a notable rhyme scheme or pattern, this poem flows very smoothly and takes the reader on a nice dream-filled ride to the ocean.

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Vikki
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Joy ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Real Perpetrators. Please remember that this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

This is review 1 of 3 from the Read All About It Package gifted to you by ~WhoMe???~ associated with the One Week Raffle. from:"JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM CLOSED 4NOW

I am a big fan of mystery stories, so, of course, this is the first folder I went to.

The story, The Real Perpetrators, has everything a mystery should have; intriguing, cheating, disappearances, and mistaken identity.

I really enjoyed the ending. It actually made me smile at the cavalier attitude she had. She wasn't worried about what was happening, only that she got the wrong couple.

The imagery was good throughout, though I did wonder a bit about the blood in the dressing room and why she didn't know if it was the man's or woman's fitting room. Wouldn't it have signs?

There were no noticeable grammar or spelling mistakes.

Overall, a nice little mystery.

Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Vikki
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi aralls I am here to give you my thoughts on "Looking Back - Day One, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I found this first chapter very intriguing. You give the reader just enough information to get them hooked and make them want to read more about Alex. I found myself wondering what could be so horrible a mother could have these thoughts, though the last line really does sum it up. It will be interesting to see how this one turns out.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. Well done.

OVERALL

A very good first chapter that does what it should; bring the reader into the story.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Losten Lyrix I am here to give you my thoughts on "Love, Then and Now, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

I think both of these poems truly show how much your wife means to you. You did a great job in conveying the emotion of both meetings and how they effected you.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed, and I kind of like how the second one is a stream of consciousness. It adds to the almost rushed type feeling of the day.

OVERALL

A lovely way to show your love to your wife.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Faded Fears  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi Jade Peterson I am here to give you my thoughts on "Faded Fears, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

I really like any dark writing and this has the potential to become something good. As it is, it lacks characters and plot. I would work on these to make a complete story.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

A few things I noticed.

I would get rid of the commas in the first sentence and use periods.

My freinds is hidden in the trees pleeding for my help.
My friends are hidden in the trees, pleading for my help.

I can't go, I'm too afraid.
Change comma to a period.

I do it any way.
I do it anyway.

In the first sentence of the second paragraph I would change the comma to a semicolon.

I wake up a blast of light to my eyes.
I wake up to a blast of light shining in my eyes.

OVERALL

I think this could be an interesting piece to a story. I would suggest cleaning it up a bit and adding some characters.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Circle of Life  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ♥Hooves♥ I am here to give you my thoughts on "Circle of Life, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This is such a beautiful poem. I love the vivid images and the feeling of nostalgic sadness that runs through it. You lines run smooth and each stanza gives the reader a new and wonderful view of the world. It's amazing what sheer words can do and you paint a wonderful picture.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes and your easy rhyme makes this poem enjoyable to read.

OVERALL

A fantastic poem that any mother would hold dear. The love that you feel flows through each word. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Lawrence I am here to give you my thoughts on "Returning to Writing.com, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

I think it is very important in life to evaluate where we are and what we are doing from time to time. The most important thing is to be healthy and happy with what you are doing. I am glad you decided to come back, as I know there were a lot of people missing you. I hope you find what you are looking for on your new path.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

OVERALL

A well written, heartfelt piece about your decisions and your life.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Cappucine I am here to give you my thoughts on "Pearl of Wisdom - a Collage Poem, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

You did a really good job with this poem. I have never thought of doing it with phrases from a magazine. Each line flowed smoothly and you painted a beautiful picture.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. The rhythm of the poem worked well, moving it along nicely.

OVERALL

A wonderful poem done, at least in my opinion, very originally.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of The Beast  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Write-fully Loti I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Beast, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I've done a few of these dialogue only stories and I know how difficult it can be. I think you've done a great job here. The story is told well and the dialogue comes across smooth and quite natural.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I found no spelling or grammar mistakes.

OVERALL

A nice little story about pranks on Halloween. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review of I've Been  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Sarah I am here to give you my thoughts on "I've Been, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I think this poem has a very good message. God does things in His way and in His time and His plan for our lives are not necessarily the same as our own.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. I really enjoyed the rhythm of this poem and how it was formatting. It worked very well here to accentuate your message.

OVERALL

A well written poem that shows us not everything is in our control.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Ariadne  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Legerdemain I am here to give you my thoughts on "Ariadne, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This reads to me as a very sweet love poem about one who is scared to take a chance on another. Will they be left alone or be taken in by love?

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. You descriptions were amazing, bringing the reader right into the heart of the poem.

OVERALL

A wonderful poem about the fear of giving ourself to another.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of The Teddy Bear  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Jewel Busy Busy Busy! I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Teddy Bear, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This is a very sweet, very sad story. You can definitely feel the character's pain. I do think that this could really be expanded so that the reader can get to know the character better and tell the 'rest' of her story.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. There is a melancholy feel that sets the scene nicely.

OVERALL

A good beginning, I just wish that it was a little longer.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Flight of Freedom  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi NickiD89 ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Flight of Freedom. Please remember that this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

This is review 2 of 2 from the Birthday Package gifted to you by staiNe from:"JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM CLOSED 4NOW

I found this to be a truly beautiful story. You did a wonderful job describing everything and the imagery was just wonderful.

I think it's amazing the way you played out the story and gave this person a chance to fly. The ending was superb.

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Vikki
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi NickiD89 ! I am here to give you my thoughts on "Don't Make Me Go Back There. Please remember that this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

This is review 1 of 2 from the Birthday Package gifted to you by staiNe from:"JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM CLOSED 4NOW

Well, since I live in Florida, this story caught my attention immediately. I think you managed to capture the 'beach' pretty well as I have seen it happen many times before. I really liked how you managed to get all the anxious emotions of getting ready in such a short piece.

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed and this short story had a very good flow. The flashback worked well well, giving the reader a lot of information in a short space.

I really enjoyed this story and thought you did a great job.

Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Vikki
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi irishlass I am here to give you my thoughts on "Lament of the Wolf, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

This is a beautifully written poem with great imagery and flow. I love the descriptions and the overall feel of the poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed.

OVERALL

A wonderful poem that truly portrays the sense of the wolf. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of into the unknown  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi amberX I am here to give you my thoughts on "into the unknown, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

This has a slight demented quality that I really like. The blurry line between fantasy and reality is crossed, and fantasy become reality. I really think this can be expanded more so you can fully flesh out your characters.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

OVERALL

Even though this is short, I really enjoyed the little trip into your character's mind. The writing style is good and it has quite a smooth voice.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
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Hi pynkidynki I am here to give you my thoughts on "death at a writers tip, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

While I think this has a great premise, there seems to be a lot missing from it. You might want to flesh out the characters more so that the reader can get to know them and care about what is happening to them. Also, this story is being told to the reader. Try showing the emotion and the fear that is going through her mind. The biggest question that needs to be answered is "why".

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

The biggest thing I noticed is that you need to capitalize the word "I". Another thing is that some of the sentences don't quite make sense. I would suggest re-reading it, maybe out loud, to see how it sounds to you.

OVERALL

Betrayal is always a good story and I think once you think about this one more and work on it, it could turn out well.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Mental Circus  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi ~WhoMe???~ I am here to give you my thoughts on "Mental Circus, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I really liked the chaotic feel of this poem. It definitely went with the title and it all came together nicely.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. The lack of rhyme or a certain rhythm fit well and actually added to the substance of the poem.

OVERALL

I enjoyed this little tidbit about how are minds are always working and jumping from one thing to another.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi SHERRI GIBSON I am here to give you my thoughts on "A SPECIAL KIND OF LOVE, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This is very beautifully written. The emotions pour through every line and stanza. I could definitely feel the love and heartfelt feeling put into the poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. I enjoyed the very simple rhyme pattern as it offered a smooth rhythm to the poem.

OVERALL

A well written, truly loving poem.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi MandiK~ : p I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Rescue- Part 1, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This is such a sweet story and a nice lesson for the children. Animals of all kinds deserve the same kindness and gentleness that people deserve.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.

OVERALL

A very moving story with a great moral. You cared for the injured baby rabbit and showed your children the true meaning of selflessness.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
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Hi W.S. Ohm I am here to give you my thoughts on "Vampire Chronicle - The Awakening, which was listed in "Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers. Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

MY PERSONAL VIEWS

This could actually be a very interesting beginning to a story. It's a good hook that gives the reader just enough details to make them want to read more.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

There were a few things I noticed, especially in the last two sentences.

Not It wasn't the cold of the rain or the freezing wind that scared this 19 year old boy, but it was something very strange and powerful.

Something he could never imagine it do exists would exist in this world.

OVERALL

If you spend more time working on this, please let me know and I will be glad to read it again. *Smile*

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~
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Review of Pink Applesauce  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Keridwen This review is for your story "Pink Applesauce, which you entered in "Invalid Item I am reviewing is using the criteria and rating system I outlined in contest. Each category received a score of 1 to 3, one being the lowest, three being the highest.

Creation Date:7-1-09
Posting date: 7-16-09 at 9:31am
Total score: 23.5

Plot - Was it interesting? Did it keep my attention?
Score 2 I found this to be a sweet tale of time with grandmother. I enjoy the nostalgic feel of the piece, though in parts, I will have to admit, I did skim over because they were a tad slow for me.

Characters - Were they well-rounded? Did they feel real?
Score 2 I enjoyed your characters. They really came to life and had a great feel about them. Their personalities were very distinctive and we learned a lot about them.

Dialogue - Was it natural? Did it move the story along or hinder
it?

Score 2 Your dialogue for the most part flowed well, though there were parts that I felt were a little long winded. I would suggest reading it out loud and finding the natural pauses.

Description - Could I see each scene? Was there too much, too little?Score 3 I enjoyed your descriptions and could easily visualize each scene as it fit in the story.

Flow - Was the pacing too fast? Too slow?
Score 1.5 I found the flow to be a little slow for my personal taste. Certain descriptions and events didn't seem necessary for the story as a whole.

Hook - Did the beginning make me want to read more?
Score 2 The beginning definitely gave the reader a hint as to what the story was about, though I am not sure if it actually 'hooked' me. I'm not sure if I would have continued reading if not for the contest.

Ending - Was it appropriate for the story?
Score 3 The ending was very appropriate for the story and tied everything together nicely.

Format/Presentation - Was it pleasant to view and read?
Score 3 Well presented and easy to read.

Grammar/Spelling - Were there a lot of mistakes?
Score 3 There were no obvious spelling or grammar mistakes.

Overall - How did the story make me feel?
Score 2 Overall, I did enjoy this story. It was great look into love and something that was really important to the characters.

Were all rules followed?
Word count:Yes
Creation date:Yes
Rating:Yes
Editing after posting: Story was not edited.

Thank you so much for your entry. I plan on having all the stories read and reviewed within two weeks.*Smile*

Vikki
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Review of Dear God  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Wyn - missing III I am here to give you my thoughts on "Dear God, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I found this poem to be very interesting as it asks questions most people want the answers to. Is God listening, and if so, can we have some sort of sign. I think this is where faith comes in. Faith requires belief without signs, something that may not be easy for some.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

The only thing I noticed was in the very fist line. There shouldn't be a comma between Dear and God.

OVERALL

A beautiful, inspirational poem about seeking answers and faith.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi JudyB I am here to give you my thoughts on "A letter from my Mind to my Soul, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

This is a very introspective, self-aware piece that shows you have taken the time to get to know yourself and are able to deal with all aspects of 'you'. You did a great job of separating mind from soul and giving them both their own voice.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I found no grammar or spelling mistakes.

OVERALL

A well-written look inside of you and your faith.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Review by ~Vikki~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Harry I am here to give you my thoughts on "Pigeon Parade, which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.

PERSONAL VIEWS

I think the last line summed this poem up nicely. You have created a parallel between man and bird and showed how life would be easier if we could always see what may be best for us.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I enjoyed the free verse style of this poem. It read more of a prose than an actual poem, telling us a wonderful story.

I found no grammar or spelling errors.

OVERALL

This was a great piece of writing that I really enjoyed reading.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~




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