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this story is completely absorbing.
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Relationships prove dangerous if one jumps to it blindly. I think it is also a matter of luck to get the right kind of partner.
The details are quite visually shown and graphically described. First person point of view and the narrative style draw me well into the story.
The fact that women are quite vulnerable to the charming men, who in reality are villains comes through clearly.
The tension she suffered from is conveyed in a convincing manner.
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I like this poem because it raises debate.
It is believed that what we sincerely work for is ours and that none can snatch it away from us.
Yet, it is known that what is yours is stolen in a skillful manner and that there is nothing you can do about it except shedding helpless tears.
It is also said that what you think yours is not really yours. This point shreds the fact of attachment to anything. In my culture it is discouraged to think that we have a right on anything materially gained.
Irrespective of the above arguments, the point in the poem is justified.
I enjoyed the poem because it gives me food for thought.
I wouldn’t miss this chance to review this touching poem. I adore my father too.
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The child, that’s you, felt happy at the simple way in which your Dad turned a ‘garden cane’ into a magic wand required urgently. Quite resourceful and ready to oblige the little girl.
That’s just about gives me a fair enough glance into the gentleman’s nature.
I can actually hear the proud moment you shared with friends.
This is exactly the kind of love and support that daughters need from parents.
breathing is indeed basic to life. You found a way to define life as a circle, circle of inhaling and exhaling.
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I notice that the poem is shaped in a certain way, which to me appears to show the process of breathing.
Nice attempt!
Breathing takes place inadvertently.
But to be able to do it with attention can cure ailments of body and mind. This is called Pranayama, an important step in breathing.
Your poem is food for thought giving rise to a number of possibilities around breathing.
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I enjoyed this satirical short on fireworks on the 4th of July. You kept reality intact.
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Noise and crowds are the salient features of any community celebration. The problem is that they last for an unending number of hours.
It is the same common thing during celebrations of any kind in almost all countries.
Unless a legislation is in place, families and pets go on being miserable during such events as the 4th of July.
The quiet couple made the right decision. I hope the concerned authorities take note of it.
Details regarding caring for the pets show that it is no easy matter.
Thoughtless crowds and silent residents are well reflected in this story.
this is an impressive account of a Celtic harvest and the celebrations thereof. I enjoyed reading this story cum facts knit around the festival.
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Each culture has its own unique features and it is a pleasure reading about them.
This village festival is evidently a community affair where men and women mingle. This gives rise to romantic thoughts in them. I find this quite a common point in all cultures.
Falling in love with a preferred partner and later getting married to him is a fine way of leading life.
Both spiritual and mundane points are shown clearly. Blessings and prayer of gratitude take place side by side with the romantic forays made by young couples.
It is written in a pretty visual way. I am able to see the view unfolding before my mind's eye.
Great job!
Unique style and smooth transformations too!
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I am jaya and I am glad I came across this chilling short.
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Horror is effectively personified.
“…the sight of a slowly opening door”.
I felt the “cold breath” as well and I shuddered.
With consistently constructed beginning, middle and end I am convinced that here lies some rare writing.
You are right. I felt the same way when I first stumbled on this beautiful site. It gives me freedom to write, to compete and review whatever I like.
The best thing that happened with me is the reviews given to my static items. They helped grow as a writer.
I am also delighted that we can practice writing in a number of janres as well.
I am getting more in tune with myself as a writer, thinker and reviewer.
Here is wishing you the best writing experience at this place.
A wonderful poem that makes me aware of the kind of tears every time I shed.
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Deep emotions seem to be the driving force behind our tears. No one can escape them. Deep-rooted relationships cause us to shed tears.
Insult and injury, love and affection, praise and derision touch us so when we can’t check tears.
I admire those, who never tear. They, sage-like, are above attachments, the cause behind sorrow.
your story has rightly shown the effects being rash in jumping to unfair conclusions.
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I can see that space for doubt is created when there is lack of trust between husband and wife. So the first thing for a married couple to learn is to cultivate trust in one another.
Jealousy and doubt, the two most dangerous vices are beautifully dramatized in Othello by William Shakespeare.
Death and tragedy are the result of that drama just as it is in your story.
A beautiful telling poem on the fading embers of love!
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What impresses me most about this poem is, first, expression of heartfelt thoughts and second, imagery.
Words like sunset, hushed, dying rays, lulling, buried, whispered and gentle ending indicate that this is the swan-song, or the last farewell. (Do tell me if I went wrong in understanding the content)
The end of good things makes us emotional. Love is such an emotional thing!
This story tells that courage comes from within instead of from outside.
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The girl in the story is an example of many such in societies all over the world.
The heady stage of youth could land them in troublesome situations and then, before they knew things go out of control. A frightening time in life arrives sooner than expected.
The process of working through this grim stage is mirrored in detail in the story.
What happens after a fierce storm? We gather back things we need and restart living again.
That’s what we see the character doing here.
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True that woman needs to be treated cherished, loved and cared for.
Above all she needs to be understood, her sense and sensibility need to be recognized. Only then, she opens up completely and their life of togetherness comes to fruition.
“Whatever she’s become lies within him”
Cannot agree more.
Structure-
I find it a novel way to have two opinions, two voices I.e. one objective and another subjective fused agreeably.
The tranquil moon shines through the night providing immense pleasure to the lucky viewer.
Hi, I am Jaya reviewing this nice poem with a rhyme and rhythm.
The night is visually evoked with a peacefully sailing silver moon with streaks of crimson.
Crimson streaks do not necessarily stand for an impending storm.
The sky is clear, the moon shines bright, shedding delight.
The poem ends on a note of the divine, where all good things begin and end.
Finding strength you lost is painted in an appealing poem.
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The title is apt, for it suits the content you dealt with.
The joy of being back to yourself comes through quite transparently.
I could visualize the tremendous support and sympathy you were lucky enough to receive from your family and friends.
Both fate and providence seem to have offered a helping hand.
Anything is possible if you have a strong will power besides all the above.
It flows well with vivid imagery and fine word choices.
these verses flow like an immortal river of peace and wisdom. I love the evocative imagery representing “forever”.
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Events connected to the mundane world mentioned in the first part of the poem are harmoniously in balance with those of the sublime.
That, I find is truly amazing.
This life which is a gift of God is fulfilled with life after death.
Thus there is equal importance given to the material life and that of the sublime.
Excellent feelings and thoughts are wrapped in touching metaphors and sensitive expression.
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this a heartening story.
This revolves around a real life situation.
A baseless allegation or a misunderstanding leads a person to be judgmental. But this is a common error albeit serious.
I see the reason behind the title. Thoughts of inconsiderate nature often cause shame.
The story progresses well with a proper beginning. The middle part shows the benign effects of music and its delineation by the artist on a tired soul.
Yet, it has’t taken a moment to replace the good feeling with doubt and dismay. Mind is such thing of contradictions.
The story resolves on a note of probable regret and repentance.
nice to review a story containing warm feelings surrounding a family.
I am glad I found it in your nice portfolio for my reading and reviewing pleasure.
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The elderly lady’s thoughts mirror situations in life. Her fears and pleasures gravitate around her near and dear.
Mike and his family, despite the big storm brewing could make it to reach back to Kate’s house instead of venturing further into the big storm. Looks like the right thing to do with Christmas around the corner.
Characters including Mr. Jenkins have their appeal. Cold winter makes me feel its chill.
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this is a great take on WDC. It has a useful story, aptly expressed in a dialogue.
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This highlights the various aspects and activities that make WDC special and appealing.
I have come across several members for whom WDC is a second home.
No wonder.
There’s tremendous scope for aspiring writers to become full time successful writers. Examples are many.
Everything you said is true because I have been through the experience for years and still there’s room to find more.
Hi,
Nice to read your reflections on meditation. There’s also prayer as a precursor to meditation.
Your thoughts on God are relatable.
He is an integral part of life of a believer, much like mine.
What is significant as far as I could contemplate is that meditation and prayer are parts of a whole.
It is said that while meditating you need to focus on something lovable, like a place, person or God. So, if I visualize and focus on a symbol that represents the sublime to which I supplicate and appeal, it becomes prayer.
You are right about effects of meditation. It certainly helps me to shed burdens on my mind and makes me feel free and relaxed.
Hi Anita,
I can the pain and anguish that rent the soul asunder. I can also visualize ithat you too become a part of this undesirable milieu, like slow poison that absorbs, unless you wake up and realize what’s best for you.
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You wrote a deeply felt poem reflecting reality both from the outside and inside.
Man falls or rises by his own will.
The best thing is you are empowered to choose your own path.
Sometimes it’s unexpectedly good to choose the road less traveled.
the first stanza explains what a love letter is and then you proceed to write one.
“This is a love letter to you”
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You are trying your level best to encourage and inspire the lover, who seems at a low point right now.
You are right. Love is full of feelings, both good and bad.
Hope is the thing that comes with love.
It’s great to hang on to it.
There’s amazing enthusiasm for life in spring in this free style poem.
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Features of both spring and winter are shown in respective images.
For the winter stricken people and places, the sun and winter of March are a welcome change.
“Spring has brought my laughter back”
The sober, solemn and the drab winter undergoes a mercurial change with the onset of spring and summer.
Warm days with cool winds, and overflowing exuberance find a spontaneous expression in this beautiful poem.
Wonderful story on the bonding between the brothers.
Simon is both caring and sensible. His sense of humor stands out. Jamie is quite successfully diverted from being a frightened boy to one who enjoys being a part of his brother’s swashbuckling pirate story. His imagination lights up too.
“I want one with pirates….A dragon!…or may be ….”
An inspiring story for brothers!
Language, style, character and dialogue are excellent.
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