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Review by Victor Storm
Rated: E | (3.5)
The theme was quite interesting, and so was the way you made it evolve - I really enjoyed "Lady Luck". It is a current discussion, you did well on treating the vices of it. The poem was fluent, fun-to-read, and portrayed a quite dark theme - although you managed to revolve it in "lightness". The thing is: those last three lines (mainly the last one) were quite a break in the rhythm and flow of the overall piece of art. It would be of real importance to change those.
Great poem, mate. Sorry if I made some grammar mistakes - I am not a native speaker.
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