|Sort of reminds me of one of the X-Files episodes ... a writer that writes about some murder; he writes with so much passion, the murder becomes real.
Well this was a bit shocking at the end, but not because of the fantasy part, where writing becomes reality. It's because of the cannibal attitude towards the off-spring. As shocking as it was, it was also one of the things i might've read too often and repetition does decrease the appeal of the story for me at least. (sure there are some subjects i might never get bored of, but not this one)
The start was a bit slow. It felt sort of dull. Who cares the girl is sick lying in bed? The text doesn't really involve me to sympathize with the characters.
And when i compare this to what it reminds me most of (that X-files episode i just mentioned earlier) i sort of feel your story is somewhat dull and pales in comparison. Sure it may seem a bit unfair to compare the two, but i think you can still achieve better, everyone has what it takes, they just need to try harder.
It would be best to make it something less related to zombie/vampire/ghoul drama. It might make it more interesting, because those things are too often repeated.
I think there are different topics through which you could touch this "aspect" of turning writing to reality.
Well check the episode if you like. Maybe it inspires you:
series : X-Files
episode title : Milagro
Most of all the ending of that episode was thought inspiring.
The rating is just my personal opinion about your story. I'm sorry, but it didn't live up to my expectations and it's not really my cup of tea ...
But i still think you might got what it takes, if you know what i mean.