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Rated: E | (5.0)
You and your words are cheering readers on to positive thoughts and situations which I like very much. I'm glad you wrote from your heart and from your experiences because it is real and shows people that what you write isn't fiction. Too often there is doubt. You tossed doubt away because you showed through your life experiences that what a person thinks has a direct effect on their future.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Time's Dark Edge  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Opening paragraph
What other body language would show Julia's frustration, facial expression, other actions of her extremities, and perhaps inner thoughts?

Her inner thoughts could show The kisses and gropes of the drunken. What did she think about Jeff?

Paragraph 4
How did Jeff approach the door? Did he tip-toe, stomp his feet, what? Was he gritting his teeth while muttering? Did Julia cross her arms while her back was turned? How did she feel inside? When she heard the door slam did she jump, did her heart jump or race? Did anger cause her face to turn red? Did she start to sob uncontrollably? Did she clench her fists in anger? Did she slump to the floor?

Fuming? What does this look like? Was she flaring her nostrils? Was her heart racing and nerves tingling? Did she stomp her feet or hit something or throw something? Did she feel like she was floating, drugged/drunk, ready to fight with everything she could muster? Showing emotions is a great way to bring characters to life. Makin every word count is a challenge.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.





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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nagging coffee pot, you ask a good question, and apparently got your answer. Master turned you on to brew the fifth cup. Well, perhaps a smaller cup or a smaller carafe might help, but the coffee appetite is what it is or is not. My thoughts were well entertained, thanks.

I could imagine and believe your poetry story.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
That is a good chuckle and then some. I like the flow of the conversation because it's like watching and listening or reading about a family feud or conflict. There certainly is enough conflict that works well and keeps the story moving. I could imagine the scene and relate to your story.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Forest Comforts  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can picture you surrounded by green forests with shadows dancing in the sunbeams that peek through the branches and leaves. You give me the feeling of peace and joy through your words. I also enjoy the trees.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an awesome tribute to WDC. The scenes are well presented through your words. I enjoyed the happy and bouncy rhythms as I toured your vision and enjoyment of WDC and many members. I could easily follow your story and picture the characters and activities.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Twenty Two  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The flow and rhythm of your poem to me are happy and joyful bring me along with word pictures of how you feel about and enjoy WDC. I was hooked immediately and had to enjoy the full journey through your experiences and word pictures. You showed me rather than telling me.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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for entry "Autumn In Bloom
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Your poem kinda fits the prompt. I suspect you may have been comparing WDC to the autumn weather, but it wasn't evident. I was able to picture the scenes through your words.

Making reference to writing about autumn as a WDC activity would have helped.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The rhythm carried me along your poetic words as I saw your story in my mind. Your word pictures about the merit badges you earned in your early years and the ones earned in your older years on WDC made a nice contrast. I could feel the joy and warmth of having these badges. I could see you writing and gathering MBs on WDC.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Lost now Found  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The rhythm, word choices, and word placement work well to show your relationship and experience with WDC. I like your desire to share and teach as members did to help you. I'm glad you are doing better and enjoying your time on WDC. Showing your emotions gives me and readers insight into knowing you.

The rhythm changes when you wrote about [reading other's work] and the other three lines. This interrupted my reading because I had to reread it to understand its meaning and also to figure out how to read it.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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for entry "The Goblins of Gab
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
You have created an interesting story and characters with words that show me all the details I need to view the adventures on WDC. it makes me want to join in, which I did years ago. The rhythm is smooth and helps move the story forward while keeping me interested in reading. I could relate to a lot of what you wrote.

What I had trouble reading was the italic portion of the poem.

Thank you for writing, and sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of RUSTY REMEMBERS  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing Rusty with me. I got to know Him and Miss Fanny well. Telling your story is like having you sitting with me and sharing their antics.

I wonder how Fanny felt when she first saw Rusty? I'm interested in her body language. Did her mouth drop open, or she take in a huge breath, or did she shiver with emotions when she realized Rusty's tail was so damaged or did she tremble when she saw the condition of his fur? When he finally came into the kitchen did she feel tingling or some adrenalin rush? Did her hands cover her mouth or did her knees feel weak?

Showing a character's reactions is better than telling about them because it brings the reader into the story. Telling the story keeps the reader outside of the story looking in instead of them experiencing the story.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
You showed me a detailed picture of you and Bacon. It would have been nice if you two could have had a very long close relationship. I'm glad Bacon did not end up on the supper table. You had a very good friend. I'm glad to have read about Bacon.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC menbers.


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Review of HE STOOD  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! I really appreciate the way you wrote your poem because it focuses on the person and his action of standing for a reason. Honor and love are evident in your words. I could picture him standing before all he hoped for and believed and loved.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Excerpt  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A school adventure awaits but the student does not appreciate this opportunity for what reason? Did Pandora not understand the need for education for those who would be in public power as leaders? Why?

Babe is this Pandora's father or another family member? Annee knows what about this and feels how about this?

You have a good start for a story that can show interesting characters, scenes, and body language to show emotions. For example did Pandora frown, stomp her foot, clench her teeth, or fists because she was pouting and angry? Did she cross her arms and push out her lips snugly pressed together? How did she button her coat? Was she clumsy, rough, or something else? What was she thinking?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.



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Review of The Holy War  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My first thought "This is ominous." Your poetic story seems to be a war or challenge between lesser gods and God. It reminds me of the books of the bible and the stories of wars and challenges. Your words worked well together and showed your story so I could see it in my imagination. I liked the rhyming and line length because I was able to relax and enjoy reading your poem.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word with me and WDC members.


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Review of AN ODE TO GANDHI  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
When I first read your poem I thought some of the lines did not rhyme, but after taking a closer look I can see how they fit. It is a bit of a stretch to find how they rhyme at first. Your poem shows the history of Gandhi and the fight for independence.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The flow and rhythm of your words worked well together in this poetic form. This is the first time I read this poetic format. I didn't know it existed until now. The second lines in each stanza to me seemed to keep the rhythm moving along and helped connect everything.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like your ideas and the words you chose for your poem. They tell a story that is so true and that I can imagine changing for the better which you propose in your story. I can feel the sadness and hopefulness, and see the vision for a better way of life for mankind. Your words flow smoothly and work well together making a colorful picture of your subject.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Mirror, Mirror  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the rhyming words you used to show the kitty looking at its reflection in the mirror. I wonder if the kitten tried to play with its reflection. If so did the mirror fall off of the stand?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Maysie  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh No! Dogs are scavengers even when they are well fed by humans, it's their nature. I liked the way you gave human-like thoughts to Maysie. She is believable and so are her thoughts and actions. I could imagine her every move and see her gobbling the nasty stuff on both occasions. What really got my attention was that after the upset tummy she gobbled up more nasty stuff. This makes your story true to the fact that dogs can not connect eating something with their upset tummies and that they also follow their nose and nature.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of Crash Course  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I always wanted to do this but never had the opportunity. Thank you Mike for taking me along for the ride. I could see, feel, and imagine driving the course. I also was able to see this from the viewpoint of someone watching from the outside looking in.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of The Game of Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Life to me is a very precious gift from God. I agree it isn't easy, but I see it as a challenge. I haven't been a board game or online gamer, but I remember the board games. Your poem elicited these thoughts as I read your words. Reading your poem was a reminder of the past. It reminds me of the gift of life and the breath to enjoy it.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh My! I was doing the same thing! Thank you very, very, very for reminding me about this. It is priceless and means a lot to me. Have you noticed it is simple, yet we still mess up? I enjoyed reading this and am glad you wrote it.

Thank you very much for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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Review of DRESS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like grandma helping by repurposing the old dress. An old dress brought to life again for her grandaughter shows that although old, the dress still has a purpose. The idea about keeping something that maybe should have been thrown away or given away and yet still hangs in the closet was that sometimes when you have the feeling you should keep something it is a good idea to follow the spirit.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.


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