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Title:
Ode To A Nymph poetry and a nymph may be interesting
Description:
{i]An ode praising the nymph, a mythological spirit of nature imagined as a beautiful maiden.[/i} Imagination and mythology make for interesting characters.
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Your word art contains vivid descriptive words which show the uniqueness of the nymph.

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         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
Mythological beings are new to me, so I will do my best to show what works and does not work for me. Attack me a little while to get the rhythm of your poem, however once I got this figured it was easier to focus on the descriptiveness of the poem. I like the idea of the nymph being viewed as something which is beautiful and important. The scene of this being beaming with joy and the idea of love intertwined as she afghans like a white dove works well for me to envision these events.

The fiery brew, I'm not certain how that fits in with the rest of this stanza, but than, I do not know much about nymph, at least not yet. This is intriguing and interesting to me, so I suspect I will delve into nymphs a bit more in the future. These words have invoked my curiosity.

This last part seems to be about the freedom to worship which I believe is a good thing to have religious freedom.

plot:
The story of the nymph is interesting and something which your poem explains in vivid word choices and with interesting meter and endings which I feel adds to the plot.

Theme:underlying meaning/message
For me this was my first introduction to the nymph.

Rhythm/pace:
Now that I am accustom to the rhythm and pace of your word art this poem flowers nicely for me and I enjoyed reading through it as I learned about the nymph.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*
Writer's Purpose
To share a nicely written poem and explain about the nymph and the environment in which this creature lives.

feelings
I feel more enlightened about the nymph and the environment, however I also believe that I have much to learn.

Conflict:more/less
I'm not sure about the conflict because this is new territory for me. It does seem that there could be conflict concerning the worshiping of the nymph.

CHARACTERS
The characters and environment worked well together and they were believable as presented.

Believability
I could believe this as it was presented and should after educating myself more about this genera see it as more believable

         *Question* QUESTION(S) *Question*
Are nymphs she's all the time or does this depend on the writer?

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I appreciate being able to read and review for you. Your word art about the nymph gave me clues about this being and the environment in which she lives.
Safe travels and many blessings.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Title:
Ode To A Nymph poetry and a nymph may be interesting
Description:
{i]An ode praising the nymph, a mythological spirit of nature imagined as a beautiful maiden.[/i} Imagination and mythology make for interesting characters.
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Your word art contains vivid descriptive words which show the uniqueness of the nymph.

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What and why:
Mythological beings are new to me, so I will do my best to show what works and does not work for me. Attack me a little while to get the rhythm of your poem, however once I got this figured it was easier to focus on the descriptiveness of the poem. I like the idea of the nymph being viewed as something which is beautiful and important. The scene of this being beaming with joy and the idea of love intertwined as she afghans like a white dove works well for me to envision these events.

The fiery brew, I'm not certain how that fits in with the rest of this stanza, but than, I do not know much about nymph, at least not yet. This is intriguing and interesting to me, so I suspect I will delve into nymphs a bit more in the future. These words have invoked my curiosity.

This last part seems to be about the freedom to worship which I believe is a good thing to have religious freedom.

plot:
The story of the nymph is interesting and something which your poem explains in vivid word choices and with interesting meter and endings which I feel adds to the plot.

Theme:underlying meaning/message
For me this was my first introduction to the nymph.

Rhythm/pace:
Now that I am accustom to the rhythm and pace of your word art this poem flowers nicely for me and I enjoyed reading through it as I learned about the nymph.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*
Writer's Purpose
To share a nicely written poem and explain about the nymph and the environment in which this creature lives.

feelings
I feel more enlightened about the nymph and the environment, however I also believe that I have much to learn.

Conflict:more/less
I'm not sure about the conflict because this is new territory for me. It does seem that there could be conflict concerning the worshiping of the nymph.

CHARACTERS
The characters and environment worked well together and they were believable as presented.

Believability
I could believe this as it was presented and should after educating myself more about this genera see it as more believable

         *Question* QUESTION(S) *Question*
Are nymphs she's all the time or does this depend on the writer?

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I appreciate being able to read and review for you. Your word art about the nymph gave me clues about this being and the environment in which she lives.
Safe travels and many blessings.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Title:
ruth is writing in 2018~Spring Is In The Air because spring is showing promise of becoming a reality, I thought I'd investigate this story. Also you requested reviews so, here am I to review for you.
Description:
{i]I will be adding stories, poems & reflections as the year marches on. Take a gander today![/i} I'm wandering today at your story to ferret out the details.
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Your word art presented a vivid picture of your experience with Spring detailing the meaning of "spring has sprung" and your reflections and interpretation of this saying.

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What and why:
The history of your experience with "spring is in the air" was interesting and also had personal aspects to make this your unique story. As you describe the events they worked will with the phrase and followed in order which made it easy to grasp the impact and time line of events. You put personal feelings and reactions in to this word art which gave it life and allowed me to get to know you better.

plot:
Spring in the air and the events surrounding this statement bring forth much information about your life experiences and the events before and after your move.

Theme:underlying meaning/message
Spring in younger years is different from spring after changing locations. Spring is important and something to be enjoyed.

Rhythm/pace:
Reading your word art was like watching a movie presented with vivid characters and imegry. I had no trouble following the scenes or reading your word art.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*
Writer's Purpose
To share the beauty of spring and how it affected the writer.

feelings
One feeling which stuck out to me was the feeling of missing the scent of spring.

Conflict:more/less
Conflict was the change of spring after moving.

CHARACTERS

Believability
Spring and human relationships are believable because they are shown in a realistic manner as humans reacted to spring.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
I enjoyed reading your word art and reviewing for you. Thank you for sharing this writing with me, readers, and reviewers.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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Review of Caverns  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Caverns The title caught my attention because this word was at the top of each page.
Description:
The richest veins always run deeperNow, this description did catch my attention because I wanted to know what was in and about the deep richest veins.

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         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
The rhythm of this work was steady and constant. Describing the veins brought a visual of being able to venture into this special environment.

plot:
The richest veins running deeper and having unique and interesting characteristics made this poem interesting and kept my attention.

Rhythm:
I had no trouble finding the rhythm of this work and was able to follow it through out the poem.

Reading
For me reading this word art was challenging because the blue font against the while background was difficult to see and read. I considered how I might be able to change this however, as far as I know there are no options with in WDC to change the font for easier readability.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*

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Font color was a challenge for me to read.

*Thought* CONCLUSION(S) *Thought*


My thoughts and Impressions:
Thank you for sharing this poem and allowing me to review for you. It was well written and vivid.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN CATS AND DOGS The cats/dogs in the title grabbed me and drug me into your article willingly, much thanks. *Smile*
Description:
Why cats never have a milk mustache. I hadn't thought about this, yet now that this description posed the question, I was interested in finding out the answer.

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         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
I found this information enlightening and of interest because I have several cats and dogs.
Staying your resource is nice because it shows that you didn't create something out of imagination. Also, knowing about this publication is something new to me, much thanks.

The detailed description gave me the visual I needed to follow the progression of how a cat drinks.


plot:
The difference between cats and dogs drinking for me is interesting because I like animals and have cared for many species especially canids and felids, cats and dogs.

Rhythm:
Your word moved forward nicely and brought to my minds eye a cat drinking which kept my interest in the information which was explained in great detail.

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...tongue back, the milk rises neatly out of the bowl holding it. (holding it) The bowl holding it? The tongue holding it? or is (holding it) necessary to forward this article story forward? Did you mean, The tongue dips into the milk which is held by the bowl and then quickly retracts as the milk clings to the tongue? If so, one element was left out of this explanation. A cats tongue is rough which may explain why and how the milk or water or whatever else the cat may be drinking is able to cling to the tongue long enough for the cat to quickly retract it's tongue and swallow the liquid.

*Thought* CONCLUSION(S) *Thought*


My thoughts and Impressions:
The detailed description give me an up close view of how a cat drinks liquids without making a mess and being able to keep their whiskers dry. the information showed me how cats were created to do this task in a neat way compared to the way dogs drink.

Thank you for sharing this interesting and informative information with me, readers, reviewers, and allowing me to review for you.
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Review of The Guide  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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The Guide This title didn't reveal much about what was to come, however I noticed it enough to wonder about this title. Then I investigated the description which convinced me to read your word art.
Description:
One man's life guided so many others. How did this happen so naturally? My first thought was who was this and what natural event happened? This was enough for me to decide to read your writing.
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         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
The pastor seemed to be a nice and willing person to lead his flock, however it seems that there was something lacking until he realized the importance of people being together, helping each other, and giving support.
The best part of this story is when the pastor decided to spend time with nature and as he was accompanied by the church congregation, he spent time with them offering friendship and whatever help would be to their benefit.

plot:
The person who show the way toward fellowship and helping each other sparked a movement of the pastor and congregation to join together in nature and help each other. This is a great way to encourage people to share activities and life together as they go through their days and nights. Spending time in and with nature can be a flaming and relaxing activity and a good way to reach out to each other. This story clearly shows how one person can make a very huge beneficial difference in peoples lives.

Rhythm:
Reading your word art was easy, smooth, and brought me into the events and lives of the characters. I felt neither rushed nor restrained. The story moved along at a nice pace keeping me involved with the characters and actions.

Character(s)
All of the characters were believable and seemed to be people I could relate to and understand. For me it would have been nice to know more about the guide who was well missed and so well respected.

Structure
Peoples reactions to their loss was interesting because of all the messages being word for word the same. The preacher although a kind and caring person seemed to be doing all he could, yet there seemed to be something missing. This peaked my curiosity. The guide who was dead seemed to be in a way a bit of a mystery. The congregation seemed to be going through the motions of church going, yet this one man had touched their lives in a special and unique way bringing them closely together at the funeral. After the speech by the creature everyone had a greater understanding of friendship, togetherness, and helping and sharing each others burdens and successes. These scenes kept me interested and inside the story. The scenes worked well and were in order. The build up to the end was well executed.

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The GuideThis story is for me of great importance. I would strongly recommend that more be added to this title so that your story is not over looked. Nature and one mans life guiding many others made me want to know more. The wanting to know more is why readers investigate/read word art.
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My thoughts and Impressions:
For me this story showed how one person can make a difference and how if we stick together and work together there is great success and happiness abounding in our midst. The results of these events show that because of one person many lives were changed for the better. Changing lives for the better is a wonderful message presented through your word art. Much thanks for taking the time to write and share this story with me, readers, reviewers, and perhaps a publisher.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Our World the title must be about our world so why not see what view is with in these words.
Description:
The earth really is our only home This is true from the physical point of view.

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What and why:
The idea of defending the earth and showing all the destruction we humans bring to bare on the earth is a subject which more people should be aware of and want to change for the better.

plot:
The earth truly is the only place where we can live that I'm aware of without any artificial helps, and live in the normal way we are accustomed to enjoying. At the panel of the earth then why would we humans be so destructive? We ravage this earth and expect to have a healthy long life with freedoms and adventures, while this earth is beaten and abused. Your word evoked these ideas as I read your words.

Rhythm:
The sentences and stanzas flowed nicely and I had no trouble understanding and visualizing the word pictures you were presenting.

Character(s)
The humans versus the earth are believable because of the ability of humans to ravage, pilute, and destroy our earth. The earth is to a great extent at our mercy.

Conflict
Human kind is ruthless against nature and earth while the earth and nature are trying to survive.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
Thank you for sharing your word art with me and allowing me to review for you. The challenging issues of humans versus nature and earth are vast. I appreciate your word art showing some of this in your word art.

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Kipuka Interesting title which focused me onto the description.
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Just imagine crossing miles of lava fields to reach a green oasis on the slopes of Hawaii I tried imagining this before reading your poem and didn't quite get it so took on the challenge of reading and understanding your word art.
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What and why:
Now that I've been able to grasp the view and beauty of the environment and how it relates to the animals and plants, I can visualize a beautiful area. I like the idea of birds flying, trees thriving, and this area being challenging to access so that all of the wonders of nature are minimally disturbed.

plot:
The story of this magnificent area which is distinctly a Hawaiian scene and environment with nature relatively protected from human disturbances is something to cherish and share in word art form.

Rhythm:
The words work well together and the stanzas are in order bringing the reader through a wonderful world. I had a challenging time getting the flow correct partly because of the different words used and the definitions located at the bottom of the poem. For me it would have worked much better to have the definitions close to the areas defined.

Challenge
After reading your poem several times, and then having to refer to the explanation of some of the terms you used, It took some of the flow from the beauty of the word art. I then read your work several times and was able to gain a picture of what you shared with readers about the beauty within the lava.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
I enjoyed learning about this area. Thank you for sharing the beauty and uniqueness of this natural and magnificent place.
I appreciate being able to read and review for you, thank you for sharing your word art.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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Though None Go With Him After reading the description, I understood the title. The title got enough of my attention for me to explore further, then decide to read your word art.
Description:
One of the poems I wrote after I became a Christian This definite got me interested in reading your poem.
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What and why:
The part about Jesus being available and wanting to help compared to their reactions gives a good picture of where the human race is in the relationship with God, Jesus, and Holy Ghost. For me this is sad and heartbreaking, however beyond this is hope because Jesus is still around and waiting for people to accept Him. The ending where there is still hope makes me feel like even with all the rejection and sadness there is the gift of eternal help awaiting the grasp of the hand into His and a relationship which is well worth getting to know Him.

plot:
The hope of a wonderful relationship between humans and Jesus if only we would take the time and effort to reach out and accept this awesome gift. Having the opportunity to be uplifted and enjoy a relationship with Jesus for me is the best gift ever. I'm glad you wrote this poem and shared it with me.

Rhythm:
Reading your word art was uplifting and enjoyable. I had no trouble understanding your words. It took a little concentration to be able to read it so the flow was smooth and the words and stanza's worked together.

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Through out your poem you change from present tense to past tense. I can understand your meaning, however for proper structure it would be better if it all was past tense or all present tense. This of course is what I felt when reading, however you may have a reason for presenting this word in this manner. If there is a reason, I am interested in knowing what it is because this may help me write something in the future nd I also like learning about techniques which would help imporve my writing.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
Thank you for sharing this word with me, readers, and reviewers. This is a very good message for people to know about and to understand.
May your walk with Him be close every day.
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Review of Shadow Prints  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Shadow Prints The title caused me to think dog, so of course anything dog is a must read for me.
Description:
This poem is about my little girl, Shadow. You have a little girl dog in poetry who I would like to meet, so decided to read your story written in poem form.

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What and why:
The way your love for Shadow shows through your poem.
She is always close to me
She knows what to do
Shadow seems to be an intelligent and devoted friend.
This for me is the best possible friendship situation because dogs do not judge. My service dog, Bella has been diagnosed with lymphoma so this word art is a mixture of happiness for you and Shadow and sadness for me because Bells has this medical issue, is an older dog, and I'm not sure how much longer we will be together.

A furry nudge is a familiar touchthis reminds me of Bella waking me in the morning. I think this dog behavior is part of natures way for mother dogs to stir their pups to be awake and active in their environment.

plot:
The relationship between a loved dog and human is for always a great story, no matter the form.

Rhythm:
Reading your poem for me brought to life the friendship you two have and reminded me of Bella and our friendship. I had no trouble understanding the information presented and could visualize the actions written about in vivid color. The stanzas worked well together and reading your word art was a smooth and enjoyable experience.


Character
Shadow seems to be a devoted and in turn with you canine companion/fury friend and family member.

Picture
You painter a wonderful picture through your word art of a fantastic relationship between you and your dog. A good addition to this poem would be to have a picture uploader to this poem.





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My thoughts and Impressions:
Thank you for sharing about your fury family member. I enjoyed getting to know both of you through this poem.
Reading and reviewing your word was for me like finding a new friend and getting to know them. Much thanks for writing this story and sharing it with me, readers, and reviewers.
Safe travels and many blessing.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Speak, Lili, Speak! I had to find out what Lili had to say. I've been around canids since I was an infant, they are wonderful animals, so this I could not resist.
Description:
I had a conversation with my dog and this is what she had to say ... Did you know that dogs converse quietly using body language which afoot humans are not aware of, so when something startling happened like a fight the people can not understand how this happened so quickly, Reality is that the fight got started a while ago through simple and subtle body language such as a very, very slight curl of the lip or twitch of an ear or some other body movement which unless your are aware and looking for it you would most likely not see anything happening. So I wonder what in your conversation with Lili you may have missed?

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What and why:
I got a hearty laugh out of:
And, when you see us lick "down there?"
Enough! – The jokes have all been said.
It's just our nature, so why care?
We don't make fun of you ... in bed."
Wow, the way you presented this information worked well and actually I couldn't help chuckling. It seems to me that it would be exactly the Lili would have approached this subject.

The entire poem works well for me and kept me interested and enjoying every word. Lili seems to have her head on straight and the ability to express from dogs point of view things which humans need to know.

But, since you want to have this talk
there are a few things you should know.
You need to take us for a walk;
it limits times you'll say 'Oh, no!"
I had to chuckle over this part of your word art also. The walk is important for more than getting relief. It is natural for dogs to walk to check out their territory, find food and water, read the news paper (smells and finding out who is in the area), sniffing each other to know who they are, health, and other important knowledge about the canine individual.

plot:
Having a talking dog telling about the things people need to know works well as presented in this poem because much truth is presented in a jovial and funny/fun way which should help people to remember special things about dogs.

Rhythm:
The friendly approach of the bouncy rhythm and fun filled arrangement and choice of words worked well to bring to life and nice and informative conversation with Lili. It was for me as if she was talking directly to me, so reading this story in poetry was very enjoyable. I felt at ease and calm during this reading experience, not rushed along nor held back.


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Please continue to write these lively and informative stories in poetry form or any form, much thanks.
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My thoughts and Impressions:
Your conversation with Lili is memorable because of the funny parts, the joyful and bouncy tone of the poetry, the unique voice you used to convey what Lili had to share with readers, and the varied subject matter.

Much thanks for sharing your word art with me and any readers and reviewers who are dog enthusiasts as well as anyone who would read this wonderful poem.
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Review of Ghost Dog  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Ghost Dog Did you write "DOG!" I've got to review this!
Description:
His loving spirit still haunts me. A Pet News Contest Entry Spirit This tells me it's about a dog who is no longer on this earth. *Sad*
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What and why:
The way the words and structure create a bouncy reading experience kept me interested in reading. Love and respect for the dog from you and for you from the dog seem to be underlying in this poem. Scooter seemed to be a very nice dog who had a lot of energy and a sense of adventure.

plot:
Scooter and you together sharing life doing dog and people things makes for a nice story in poetry form.

Rhythm:
The rhythm was for me a jolly, happy, and bouncy which seemed to match well the personality and energy of Scooter.

Character(s)
The relationship between you and Scoter and scooters personality in the ix made this scene of the two of you going through life together believable and realistic. You and Scooter seemed to be a good match for each other.

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          This poem brought great sadness to me because just recently my Dog Ammo who just turned a year old 4/7/19 disappeared 4/5/19 and I have had no news about him since his disappearance.

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Thank you for sharing your word art with me, readers,, and reviewers. Much thanks for the opportunity to review for you.
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Review of Blood Bath  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Blood Bath This title seems to be indicating ominous events. Although I would rather not engage in violence, I decided to read your story.
Description:
Not everyone is lucky in crime scenes but also not everyone is lucky behind closed doors. This is true. Why did you choose this description? The curiosity for me is what could have happened.
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What and why:
The mystery of who the character may be and who the victims may be plus what they had in common or why they were killed? The beginning which matched the ending made for a curious story concept and configuration, what is it about the window in the beginning and the window and bathroom at the ending? I guess if were to kill people the bathroom would at least be the easiest place to clean and get rid of any evidence.

plot:
The killings seemed to be ruthless, unprovoked, and something for lust. This works well for this kind of story, however, I feel that it is possible for more life and interest can be brought forth to create a much more interesting and emotional charged story. There is a lot of room for developing more substance in characters, environment, possible twist or perhaps something sinister behind the murders to distract from what is really happening. More character development will help bring the reader into the story because knowing the characters make for feeling like the reader has something invested into them like friends for example. The plot is a good start to a fantastic murder mystery. The environment could have something hidden such as a valuable weapon, treasure, or map or conspiracy written for the purpose of power and might to control people or situations.

Rhythm:
Your word art moved along well and kept me interested. I enjoyed allowing my imagination to run wild while reading.There is great potential for expanding this plot and creating a story which could fit into several different genres.


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A figure disappearing out the new window. The second thing he saw brought pools of tears to his storm colored eyes.
New window? What about the new window why is it significant?
the tears,tears to his storm colored eyes, Is (storm) a typo or is there a specific meaning/reason for using the word storm? Tears in his, is this what you mean?
...throat.Blood, everywhere. There should be a double space between the period and the capital letter to make this easier to read. Also, the next statement is an incomplete sentence. You could add there is or there was depending on weather it is the present or the past.
The pale cream of the walls now bathed in rivers of rusty blood. The floor that was at one point pure white

such as snow but now showed dark shades of pink and red.


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Thank you for sharing this story with me, readers, reviewers, and for allowing me to review for you, my pleasure. I look forward to learning about any changes or expansions you make to your word art.
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Review of The wind goes by  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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The Wind Goes By I was wondering what the wind goes by so decided to read about this.
Description:
A wind goes by and surprise everyone, the wind is strong so don't be a fool to be in there Your description made me consider what the trouble may be with the wind. Also, to smooth out this description you should add an (s) to surprise and
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What and why:
The wind acting as a person is an interesting twist for this story. The unknown person has the potential for more character building which could bring to life some interesting situations which would add suspense and interest to your story. The evil within the wind could possibly be from some source trying to do something awful to someone of thing or perhaps unlawful act which would hurt the general population. The man who interrupts this evil scheme and causes the demise of the wind could be a citizen, a law enforcement officer,military or alien (outer space or foreigner). The wind could be a weapon or natural man make distraction while something =else is happening or it could be a creation of an enemy trying to take over whatever your imagination can create. These possibilities because of this great beginning in your story have given me the fun and enjoyment of thinking about the possibilities, much thanks.

plot:
The idea of evil verses good is a good story line which can be expanded to create a very interesting short story, novelette, or novel and possibly a screen play. The wind could be evil, however it also could be a weapon or distraction which makes the twist and turn of this story an adventure depending on how it is presented. The other characters in the story have huge potential for extensive development and inter twining them into a situation which could be horror, fantasy, sic-fi, or even comedy but for me something which relates to what we know being made into a conflict of evil verses good works well.

Rhythm:
With the smoother sentences which result in a better reading experience this story is a must read and I enjoyed a pleasure and pleasurable reading experience.

Characters
Allow your imagination to go wild and enjoy the process of creation.

environment While reading your word art I was wondering what the environment was like, such as weather, location, planet, surrounding, the things people experience and know about. This can be changed to whatever your imagination creates or be realistic.

challenge of good verses evil
Why would whoever want to do the evil and why would the good want to stop the evil? How would these challengers interact with each other and what are the results? Is there an underlying reason(s) for what they do> Can they be doing this for the right or wrong reason(s)?

What else
What in this world is important? Who did what, when, where, why, and how? When you answer these questions you will find great treasure for your story and threader which readers will want to know about.

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A wind wanted to get passpast this person, but the person won't let her through. The wind started to cry and and start to howl. Making a few changes will smooth out these sentences for me/readers.
The person finally the wind go, let or let the wind pass, or allowed the wind to go past, or any other words which would forward this story.
The evil wind have has this smile that everyone sees and get haunted. Which haunts them or you could rearrange this idea: The evil wind's evil smily seen by everyone haunts them. Seeing the winds evil smile haunts everyone. or whatever works for your writing voice.
...the man won't look at her ... wouldn't or would not

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My thoughts and Impressions:
Your ideas in your story are exciting and well worth reading about. My imagination enjoyed the adventure of roaming through your story and creating possibilities.

Thank you for taking the time and effort to write your word art and for sharing it with me, readers, reviewers, and for allowing me to review for you. Please let me know how I can help as needed. I will be interested to read about what you create for this story and am willing to change the rating.
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Review of My Mind  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My Mind This must be some insight about you so I decided to get to know you through your word art.
Description:
Life as I once knew it and life as I now know it This is an interesting comparison which I want to read about.
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What and why:
After reading this I realized I would need to read it again and focus on figuring out what was happening, when, where, why, how, with whom and what was transpiring. It seemed to be a story about you, someone else, maybe mother, and events which were in the beginning based on relationship of a friendly nature and later based on a distant friendship or no friendship. Then other things become apparent to me which were showing that this may be battle within the thought process. The challenge of figuring out the plot is intriguing. I'm beginning to realize there is much more to this writing than was apparent in my first reading of your work.

plot:
When I first read your word art, I was not certain about the conflict, characters, and the other elements of your writing. In the first stanza you refer to listening to the music. This for me could be what worked well in your mental activity. Then in the last two lines, you refer to back ground noise in a grocery store and the unspoken conversation in an elevator. This to me appears to some of the other thought processes which are not working for you. The first part of your writing sets the tone of what I believe is the explanation of the conflict between thoughts and events remembered. Also it creates the possibility for sharing your struggles with these conflicts.

Rhythm:
Reading your writing was not a rushed or held back experience because it felt as if the pace was up to me. The challenging part was understanding the meaning of the words and sentences, ferreting out the tangled scenes as they were presented, and making sense of it all so that I could explain better to you what was happening as I was reading.

conflict
It appears to me that there is the conflict of being lost in the store and not finding who you were looking for and when you did find that person another person was there also. The other part of this is there seems to be the need for this person and yet there is a pushing away from the knowledge that there are two people together. Another way to see this is if all the examples were just for the purpose of explaining the events and actually all of this is produced in the mind. Therefore there is a huge ammonite of conflict with in the mind causing great distress and anxiety. being tired of being trapped is something which can cause a great deal of conflict because of trying to figure out how to get out of this situation. The mind can go anywhere even when it feels trapped so the conflict is not feeling like it is possible to have a change of mind and escape from being trapped.


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Has your situation changed for the better? I hope it did and you have found peace.

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Your word has been a challenge to understand because I can see several possibilities. For example the store can be where memories are stored, rather then an actual store. Another person can be an actual person or other thought or memory process.
The events can be as they are represented or used as a means to explain something which is more a mental memory or event which is causing challenges.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
I enjoyed reading you writing in general, however the more I explored it , the more there were possibilities. This was a challenge but not one which caused me stress or other unwanted reactions. Through your description of how things were, i could feel several emotions coming through your words:
despair, conflict, anxiety, anger perhaps, frustration, and other similar feelings related to things not going as well as they could or should.

Thank you very much for taking the time to write this word art, share it with me, readers, reviewers, and give me the opportunity to review for you.
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Review of carving  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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CarvungThe title reminded me of carving wood. Your writing has been interesting so I decided to carve some time to do another review for you.
Description:
just life as I know it just?, well this evokes a bit of "really "in me because for me just creates the idea that it is not very important. So now that you've written that this isn't really an important work of word art, what can be done for a change of mind and perhaps a change in your choice of words so that readers can't help themselves? The readers need to read what you've written!


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What and why:
After reading this word art twice I find it necessary to give this piece of writing time to incubate because it seems that there is much more to this. Also for some of the statements need to be considered from several possible points of view. There is a bit of confusion about the meaning of some of the words you have used and the way you've used them. This I will ponder and the return and finish this review for you.

On my third reading of this writing I am able to better understand from whence this has been and where it is going. I like the idea of how time and experience work together to bring about maturity and understanding. As the time, maturity and understanding process continues changes and focus on the carving change and eventually this becomes the process of trying to carve out just a little more time. It also appears to me that this does not entirely encompass time but also can and is workable for you in life with all that is presented to you and with all of your reactions to these events. The deepness of this writing as far as I can discern is able to be followed eventually very deep. I need time to digest all of this before I can comment further, hence perhaps I should stop here. The feeling of deepness and extensiveness has been a companion during this reading of your work.

plot:
For me I understand that "time" is the main character in this word art. Based on this, it seems to me that you are mostly carving away at time with the intent of having more time even if it is "just a little". The idea of carving out the time needed for living is foremost what many people do for various reasons. With this in mind the plot is strong and seems to continue in degrees as the aging process and experience grow. Now that I've had time to consider your words and their meaning, this story of life and experience is interesting, intriguing, and something I can relate to which reminds me of some of the things which directed my life experience. I got the feeling of desperation within the words expressed. This is not huge but it lingers.

Rhythm:
The progression of being young and not having a lot of experience work together to forward this writing. The next part about for the lack of any other words at the moment, middle age, brings the reader to the point where realizations over time have significantly changed the person and their outlook online and time. Then in the end it is more about realizing that much time has passed, the end is drawing near and also there is no need of having plenty. The focus is for finding and carving out a little more time. These processes for me moved this story along well. I was not feeling hurried nor held back but more like I was journeying with this story scenery.

Hope for a little more time may be because of the feeling that time is passing quicker than it did years earlier.


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         *Question* QUESTION(S) *Question*
Do you now feel as if time is passing more quickly? It feels like this to me.

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this odd light is filtered by some age.
perhaps it wasn't leather, wood, or even words,
my carving is just time alone.

let me just carve out a little bit.


This is the part of your story which marked the importance of time and the way having lived for many years and having had many experiences brought about the knowledge and growth which caused you to want to carve just a little bit, A little bit of t more time? More time this may be or may be not is a good or horrible thing depending on a persons situation. That is what came to my mind when I read this.

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My thoughts and Impressions:

Your story represented in poetry format has for me a lot of deepness and things to consider. I have reread this several times and each time something new pops up and gives this more fodder for thought and contemplation. I'm certain that if I read it more times there will be more added to my thoughts about this piece.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Like Clockwork After reading the title, then reading the story it seems the title fits for me because it tells a story of the passing of time as you/the character moves through time and experiences events which are life changing and also from which you learn to roll with the punches. The biggest connection to this title and a bit of the description is A Clockwork Orange.
Description:
Orange You Glad You Don't Teach? Interesting question, however in life every moment has the potential for a teaching opportunity.
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What and why:
I like all of this story because it is about the challenges of life and how as things do not turn out as expected the human/human spirit over comes adversity and turns it into triumph. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the part about the confrontation between student and professor because it is rare these days for someone to stand up for what they believe in by themselves and also to react in a way which is not harmful I.E. blowing up something or living beings.

plot:
I've as far back as I can remember liked and enjoyed reading stories based on true life events, so this story certainly fit my muse and kept me interested. As presented this story showed me how life twists and turns can take a person in a direction they may not have explored on their own, or even entertained such exploration. These two things with in the story made for a very nice plot and helped move the story along well.

Rhythm:
The rhythm for me was fine. I didn't feel like I wanted to get the reading over with nor did I feel like lingering. It was like a smooth transition from one part of the story to another. I enjoyed every bit of it and learned about a book I think now, I should investigate.

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         *Question* QUESTION(S) *Question*
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No major college wanted an 85 m.p.h. fastball from a guy without a nasty curve, I understand the meaning of this sentence because I know about baseball. However, I am not certain about someone who knows nothing about baseball.
It started when my parents put it in the "locked" case around about junior high. One way thread this is that it was put in a locked case at the junior high and the other way to read this is that your parents locked it up at home. I'm certain you were referring to your parents locking it in a case at home.
I'd discovered better ways in high school This sentence for me is a bit well, out of place, or disjointed within the paragraph. Did you mean something like discovering better ways to keep from being bord or asleep or perhaps referring to the professor which is mentioned a sentence or so below and not actually in my view connected, the professor -you found better ways to explain what he was teaching?
Our hitting coached laughed. coached[
...but could see how much you want to educate people to really do it. I know I've been blessed to have had many. These statements are a bit confusing for me. The way the last sentence is hanging out there there is no identity for what "had many" refers to and so my guess is you are referring to having had many what exactly? "you" in the first part is referring to whom? The "it" is referring to what? I've read this part of your story several times trying to ferret out the meaning. My guess is that you are referring to respect for teachers and that you've been blessed to have had many good teachers.


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My thoughts and Impressions:
I'm glad you shared this word art with me, readers and writers because within this story there is much treasure. This is a good example of a book which made a huge difference in a persons life and brought them to a different pathway which I expect would not have been followed if the sports had been successful. Although sports were in a way a success getting you to college the events which followed were instrumental in showing you aa different path to a different world. Changes like these and reactions like yours show how although dreams at times are changed humanity has the ability to adapt and come to peace with different circumstances. This for me is very up lifting. The way the events were shown made a life story truly like being in the midst of the events.

Thank you for writing, sharing, and allowing me to review for you.
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Review of Gutshot  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Gutshot Gut Shot got my attention because I know these kind of injuries according to what has been portrayed.written tells me they are very painful and also I was curious to find out who shot who and why.
Description:
Alone... all alone. wonder if the victim was aware that with God you are not alone?
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What and why:
The description of the events were enough for the reader to understand what was happening and draw them into the story, however along with this was allowed either intentionally or accidentally room for th reader to fill in more of the story.

plot:
This description of a hunter being shot is a type event in hunting which at times is lethal, however in this story although it is possible this hunter may or may not survive, depends on the interpretation of th reader.

Rhythm:
Some the rhythm was like snap shots being displayed a=repidly showing events clearly yet moving the story forward at a thinking pace after a major injury.

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He'd been watching he edges of the clearcut for deer for weeks. t the
He was struck and thrown backwards, a shot echoed. On his back and stared at the sky. Bleeding. as a he or possibly rearranging this completely it would read much more smoothly. throw backwards landing hard on his back
staring at the sky while the searing pain pulsed and he bleed profusely
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title:
One Rule for Vivid Writing[/i} I could not resist because I need to learn as much as possible about writing.
Description:
One rule will tell you what to put in ... and what to leave out.[/i} One rule is simple for this simple writer, works for me.
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You created a clear visual about what to pun into word art and what to leave out, much thanks.

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I enjoyed my visit and finding this treasure.

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What and why:
The simplicity of putting in or leaving out is very helpful, although for me I will need to read and consider this several times for it to sink in well enough to put it to practice reliably.

plot:
The idea of too much baggage in writing is a great story to tell along with the hot to part of this situation.

Theme:underlying meaning/message
Slim down the words in writing and make them count.

Rhythm/pace:
Reading this information was pleasurable. The story of how to slim down the word art effectively moved along well.

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Writer's Purpose
To share with readers, writers, and reviewers a good way to improve writing skills.

feelings
I felt like I had found hidden treasure and was glad for this information.

Conflict:more/less
Simple conflict between too many unneeded words and the writers need to write using words.

CHARACTERS
Words are tricky characters who demand attention.

Believability
Yes the quality of and truth of this subject matter is believable.

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Keep sharing this kind of information, thank you.

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Thank you very much for sharing this word art full of much treasure with readers and reviewers.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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Review of Earthquake  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title:
Earthquake
Description:
An earthquake destroys the happy home of Quest, Casa and their late mother and wife.
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What and why:
This story has some interesting characters papa bear and little bear who after an earthquake are separated from each other which make for interesting conflict because of the terrain Quest finds himself in and the devastation loss that Casa discovers when he finds Ossie dead.

plot:
The plot and plight for this story si a moving and intricate tail of danger and environmental challenges coupled with characters who although are animals/bears seem to think, act, and respond to situations similar to humans. These things kept me interested in this story.

Theme:underlying meaning/message
Where there is hope and determination, the are possibilities.

Rhythm/pace:
The story for me move along well at a pace which was neither slow nor fast.

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Writer's Purpose
To allow imagination to run free and to create word art to grab readers interest and keep them reading.

Conflict:more/less
There was a nice variety of conflict which worked well in this story. The mental conflict of working through the change of events as well as the physical conflict because of the devastating effects and changes brought to bare by the earthquake.

CHARACTERS

Believability
These characters were presented as humans would have been in this situation. They were believable.

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Thank you very much for sharing this story with readers and making it available for review. I enjoyed reading your word art and reviewing for you.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Title:
A Dream Deferred
Description:
In the blink of an eye, everything changed.
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What and why:
The ending seemed to have a bitter/sweet out come even though there was a huge loss. But the although fa=ragel human spirit may be faced with overwhelming obstacles there still is hope and the ability to conquer and thrive.

plot:
This is a complicated plot because of so many years involved and the changes in government policies as administrations change. The toll it takes on the people is also complicated because of the many different people involved in the immigration and deportation process. Another part of this is the individuals and their personal circumstances, yet all laws and all people must be treated the same. All of these factors and environmental factors make this an extremely detailed and interesting story.

Rhythm:
I very much enjoyed reading this story. The beginning seemed to drop right on me, which gave me an idea of the shock experienced when suddenly after many, many years of living in the United States, a person is doing what is required after leaving work and then finds themselves in prison awaiting deportation. The rest of the story had enough details and character interest to keep me reading. For me ti moved along at a nice pace.

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oid) – until 11:30 P.M. when it’s officially lunch time. Lunch at almost 12 midnight?
when you watch a lot of movies, television, documentaries, and ? books that detail read books not watch them, perhaps?
flu, the week before all went downhill it should been an ominous sign. have
felt like an enormous burden ? being placed on my shoulders. was
and I was brought right after high-school graduation to assist. Right after high-school graduation, I was brought to the United States to assist. Or ... to assist my sister. Ideas which for me smooth out the sentence and make things clear.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Title:
The Silent Poetry Collection
Description:
A poem that I wrote for a special person who's no longer with us in this life plus more.
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What and why:
As I read your poem I could feel the depth of your sprint quietly screaming with hope for this troubled world. This story of the plight of this world and the people left living in the streets is a sad reminder of humanities inhumanities to man. Although I can relate to all of this, I hold onto the hope that things can change for the better. You summed up some of the challenges of this world well.

plot:
The plight of this world and humanity with descriptive details of a girl who at 16 dies in the street is an example of how society has degraded and is a good story to tell in hopes of change for the better. It touched my heart. The character of the girl and humanity seemed to be alive as the events flashed in my mind.

Rhythm:
Reading your word art was a pleasurable experience. The story moved forward nicely and I felt at ease neither rushed nor straining to get to the next part of the story.

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My guess is that this story in poetry format is based on life experiences or at least things of life which you were familiar with through accounts shared by story telling or other resources. You chose your words very well and carefully. Nad, I suspect that this was created via spiritual impetus, true?

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What has happened to today's society is really quite sad, this can be quite a stumbling of the tongue sentence at least for me. For me it is easier to read if "today's" is left out, however This does slightly change the impact of this story. Yet, through out history these things in some form or other have continued to happen.

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I'm glad you shared this story in poetry form with readers and hove allowed me to review for you.
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Review of Joy and Laughter  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Joy And Laughter I'm usually ready for some laughter, so needed to investigate your word art.
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The effects of joy and laughter This should be very interesting, need to start reading.
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What and why:
This certainly is enough to put a smile on my face or any one else also.
The happy and hopeful tone of your poem is very up lifting. I enjoyed reading and liked the entire poem package.

plot:
We all have choices and this word art points this out very well. Laughter is more of a choice and something we should seek to find so our days on this earth are joyful and we have a light heart rather than giving into the opposite side of negative feelings and responses.

Rhythm:
I did not have any trouble reading most of your poem, however the second stanza for me seemed to not exactly follow the flow of the rest of the poem. The rhythm was smooth and enjoyable in most places.

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Laughter comes in so many forms
from a cackle to a guffaw.
It helps to warm the coldest heart
and causes thickest ice to thaw.
The coldest heart it warms

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What Will They See?
Description:
What will our legacy be? To my best ability I hope to leave legacy of value for coming everyone here and to come in the future. When I read the description I felt drawn to investigate your poem.

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What and why:
I like the idea of leaving a valuable legacy which is what seems to be the main subject of your word art. The questions asked are fuel for much pondering.
What we do now is the aroma that will be left. I like this part and must confess that I probably would not have thought of the situation as leaving an aroma. It does make sense and fits well.

plot:
The best part of this story in poem form is the idea of leaving a sweet smelling, honest, and valuable legacy. Asking the questions about this process causes me to think about what I can do to leave a legacy of value.

Rhythm:
Reading your poem was smooth except for one place which could have been my challenge rather than the poem.

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Or betrayal of our fellow person for sure? err? For me "sure" doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the written words.

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Thank you for writing about aND including questions about leaving a legacy of value. I appreciate having had this opportunity to read your word art and review for you.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Title:
Praised At Passover Definitely caught my attention because of what I suspected may be written.
Description:
(Based on the book of John, chapters eleven and twelve.) A for sure must read.
         *Bell* FIRST IMPRESSIONS *Bell*

         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
Telling this story in poetry form is wonderful. I like all of it from beginning to end and hope that more readers will find this and take it all into the depths of their soul and ponder and meditate upon these words.

plot:
The greatest plot of salvation ever written and now, rewritten in poetry form for many readers to to read and learn from is valuable and worth taking the time to review.

Rhythm:
This was very nicely written with apparently well chosen words to go along with this story as written in scripture. The words flowed smoothly and I was not distracted from the story.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*

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My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you:
         
At this time, the Passover festival was at hand, At this time, with Passover festival at hand, When I read this sentence it seemed to me to be a bit rough. Changing the wording so that it fits better with the rest of the poem should smooth the reading. My suggestion may fit ok however it is an idea for you to consider.

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My thoughts and Impressions:
Your poem put a joyful song in my heart. I really enjoyed the reading experience. Much thanks for sharing your word art with me.
Safe travels and many blessings.

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