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Review of Clarion Cry  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, a weight landed on me as I read your words. The hurt and anguish along with other emotions are woven through your poem showing the trodden-down spirit left quivering after years of assault. I could imagine the words spewing out into the air and hitting you. You duck and yet they still hit their mark.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Time for a Change  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading your poem because it had a bouncy rhythm and also because of the ending. It resonated when you wrote about switching to a Mac. I could see the events and feel the frustrations. Life with computers is a challenge, but for me using a Mac works best.

Thank you for writing and sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Dear Me (2022)  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have great ideas for the coming 2023 year that people should consider adding to their list of things they want to change for the better. I agree with writing more. It is creativity that causes the brain to grow and be active. Creating word art is a fantastic way to show readers the stories that matter to you; from you.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Pride  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
At the beginning of your poem story, it seems that denial is what is foremost in the actions of the person experiencing these feelings.

Then, there seems to be a change in thought about this situation; as if this person clung to something to make a positive change, perhaps a life-changing change for the better.

But then it is back to the old ways of being.

Please consider adding [personal] possibly, {dramatic] because it has drama, [dark because it seems to be dark, [tragity] because of the tragic situation, or some other genre so that readers can find your word art easier.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the me, myself, and I approach. One thing to do when writing is to get the words written no matter how sloppy because then you have the ideas/the story. Later after the critic and editor come back from vacation you can edit. But getting the story written is important, especially for NaNo. I've participated in NaNo and understand the necessity for writing the story. NaNo is near so don't fear. In 2023 give it your best and see the words flow as the story grows.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of The Triangle  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You created an interesting but detectable twist to your story. I was wondering if the swindlers were going to be swindled. Your story is believable, the characters are memorable and believable, the twist will stick with me for a while, and the reading experience was very mice. My guess is that there is something special about this vault, the wall, and the bank entrance. There should be another access point within the bank, but it could be well hidden from the public. What drove the brothers to rob banks? Why did the bank employee decide to figure out how to outsmart the bank robbers? Why did the employee need the extra money, or was this pay in secret for an undercover job? Was everyone involved relieved it was over or do they want revenge? That silent alarm: I guess no matter how well you prepare for doing something you can't forse everything.

{c::grape}Did you use [crazy] twice in the same sentence for effect?

[more selective about their insideman} Did they find someone new, or did they very strongly impress upon their current insideman the need for special care in preparing for each bank robbery?

disposible phone = burner phone

As planned and exactly as planned takes me out of the story because of distraction. Your story would have a greater impact by omitting these words, or omitting these words and adding new ones.

...'t hold breath for the money. Is this for effect or did you leave out [your] accidently?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Drowning  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
As I read your last statement about not having a choice, I felt myself going down. It was a slipery slide to your dramatic ending about trying to save the one who would not be saved. Your poem reminder me of God and all He has done to save humanity. I could feel and see through your words the events you wrote of and expressed emotions you must have had. I do not know how you feel, but I can understand based on my experiences the helpless ness, desperation, and other emotions that stayed with you while doing everything you could for this person.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.

You could add personal, drama, or tragedy to the genres.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Frost, Jack Frost: wow, what a way to end this story. I chuckled. I was so into the story, I didn't see this ending coming. I should have picked up on the clues but didn't. Oh well! You wrote a very nice story.

There are several genre types you could add or change so that readers are able to find your story much easier. Action/Adventure could work because being trapped in Denny's could be quite an adventure especially when meeting strangers. Mystery would work because of not knowing the stranger and because of not knowing a budding romance may be in the making. Drama because being in a storm can bring drame to people who are frightened, have medical issues that require meds left at home, or because of being trapped with strangers. There probably are other genre that will go well with this story.

The storm looks like what? Show the storm by using descriptive words relating to wind, snow, ice, temperature, and people's reactions to this storm. What do the roads look like and what are the results from this storm? Are cars stranded for example?

By finding words to paint a picture you are showing the reader the story like showing a movie. Word pictures keep the reader interested.


Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
You created a nice visual with the words. I noticed that as the situation changed so did the configuration of the sentences.

The end of your story had a great impact on me because you mentioned tears of sadness and then you mentioned tears of gladness. I'm very glad your mom has family members she knows now. This is an uplifting story. It is sad at first but, the ending is fantastic. I could feel and visualize these events.

Would you please consider changing [contest entry] to a different genre so that potential readers can find your poem story more easily?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You retold the story of the prodigal son very well because of the elements included, the placement and choces of the words, and the rhythm. I enjoyed the repetitions because they brought forth the intensity of the hatrid which caused sadness within me. This sadness became gladness because I know the rest of the story.

Two genres that could work for your story are [cultural] because it is based on the biblical culture, and [dark} because hating one's brother is a kind of darkness. Some other genres might fit. Adding specific genres helps bring your stories to the attention of potential readers.


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Review of THE COUCH"  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I could feel the love and respect for He who makes these things in your poem possible. It is a positive story of grace and mercy which uplifts my heart. I'm glad I found your item because it made me feel happy. I can relate to your words as I also have sat still and pondered these special things.

..spirit [dwells] would work better and be smoother to read.

when you use [gave] you are to my understanding saying He is no longer giving, right or do you mean [gives] as continually giving?

In your last line, you have a space between the word and the comma.

Also, In your last line; it would be easier to read by changing [desire] to [desires]

I'm not sure what you are writing in the last part of the sentence. Do you mean [praise] and [reverence] is what He asks from us?


Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of In My Lane  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really could relate to your story because with God all things are possible including staying you your/my designated lane. It's similar to the statement, "Don't get out of the boat." Yes, indeed I get it. My heart jumped for joy when I read your story, thank you. And, yup I'm crazy for my Lord Jesus. Praise and glory to God for my salvation. I appreciate every day He has made for everyone. I appreciate He inspired you to write this story.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Time  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading your poem because it is a new form to me. I also enjoyed the way the words played together. It is different from the usual rhyming of many poems I have read. I learned something today thanks to finding your poem through [read and review].

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of The Gen X Shuffle  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I'm with you on the Marley Bros music. I have a favorite concert video I listen to frequently via YouTube. I am also eclectic in my musical tastes, but rarely listen to rap or opera.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your musical interests, and word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of A Banana Split  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem got me excited. I love positivity even when things do not go the way I'd like. I figure there is a good reason that I do not know about. Even with the things that are downers included in your poem those words that should be pushed away, it had a bouncy rhythm. I guess it pushed the negative far from WdC and thee.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of This Pain  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your poem shows emotion very well. I could visualize a demon and a person fighting for supremacy. The person who wants to be free of the demon and the demon wanting to have control over the person. I hope the person wins this battle.

A demon that have to bid? I'm not sure is what you meant. Did you mean ?

To help readers find your poem you could add [emotional] because it does show emotions in your words and it also stirs emotions within the reader. [Tragedy] could work with this poem because it is tragic for someone to go through these challenging things.


Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is quite an adventure into the world of theater. I wonder what happened after Darlene was discovered by Dom Juan? Did he throw her out or get to know her?

Another genre that would fit this story would be thriller/suspense because the snooping around apparently alone could at any time become a discovery of the character who is snooping. The reaction of the person, who makes this discovery, could have varied emotions and reactions. This is great suspense.

Showing more emotions through the character's inward and outward reactions would help readers know more about them and care about them. Readers who have a vested interest in the characters most likely will continue reading the story.


Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very good explanation of how to use writingML because it is short and to the point. The value of this information can be used by beginners because it is easy to understand, and by seasoned users as a review or when a reminder of how to is needed.

Thank you for writing, providing this information, and sharing it with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
You certainly described summer in a sensory array of odors and visuals. I could imagine the scents and colorful view. I also could feel the joy of being alive to enjoy this season.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your summer word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of A Simple Touch  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed the rhythm of your words because although in a way your poem mentioned some sad situations, it also mentioned "touch" which can give hope and uplift the spirit. Your words as I read them were bouncy and uplifting.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Age of Dystopia  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
As I read your words I enjoyed a smooth reading experience. They worked well together. I don't remember the tune which should accompany your words, however, it did not distract me.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Review of Thunderstorms  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your vivid description of the thunderstorm brought me fully into your poem. I could see, hear, and feel the percussion of thunder, the flash of lightning, the pounding of the rain against the sidewalk and other surfaces. It was in my imagination as if I got wet and experienced the actions of the storm.

Changing the genres would help potential readers find your poem. [Experience] would cause me to wonder what experience and I would probably read your poem. Personal would work because this poem is about your experience with thunderstorms. Action/adventure is a possibility because the storm is action, and experiencing a thunderstorm can be an adventure.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art and the thunderstorm with me and WdC members.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, I enjoyed reading your story. The end was...priceless. I could see you searching, preparing the pizzas, and joyfully thinking how nice the party would be as well as the money you saved. The response of the guests as they discovered what you did was a belly laugh, thanks. They paid to go out for dinner. What a change for a birthday party. I wonder why you didn't think to do this sooner? I wonder what happened during dinner?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
As I read your poem I imagined the people praying, struggling to sing as loud as they can, and with expectations waiting for the rain. I could feel the dust as it floated in the air, the parched mouths, the anticipation and dread of the rain. Anticipation because of having water for all life and dread because of possible flooding.

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I know because of my experience the importance of keeping track of things in a very long piece of writing. The paragraphs before the calendar are good reminders of why planning or documenting as you write is helpful in preventing errors. The calendar is a very nice guide so that participants can follow each assignment and revisit it as needed. I yearn to participate, but life responsibilities and WdC stuff keep me too busy. Maybe I can visit this calendar another time a few months or so from now and use it to help me create a book of some Ideas I have. All-year availability of this calendar would be a priceless and precious gift.

Thank you for writing, for creating the NaNo Prep Challenge, and for sharing this word art with WdC members.


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