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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Near perfect! I love this. Your talent shines here, your questions and observations are universal and poignant. Keep writing. There is a difference in people who want to be a writer and the people that HAVE to write to stay sane. Read. Write. Then do it again. Best of luck to you and keep in touch,
W.D.
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Review of Being Myself  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Much better. I loved the last line. You still need help with your spelling...lol. I get the impression you just write off the cuff and really don't think these things all the way through. If you want to be noticed as a poet/writer, you've got to knock people out of their seats. You've got to catch them like a fish right from the beginning and then slowly reel them in.
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Review of More of the Same.  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Prophet,
Your spelling is terrible...lol. But aside from that, you show talent. Your questions are universal, your technique...unruly. May I suggest choosing your best lines and putting the whole thing into a poetry type format; correct your spelling; and if your serious about writing, give your reader something concrete to read. Readers are finicky animals, but without them, you're just spewing into the wind.
I hope that helps.
W.D.
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
I gotta give you a five just because of your imagination. That was a really different take on the prompt...lol. Thanks for coming back and linking it properly into the forum I appreciate that too. And best of luck to you,
W.D.
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Review of Share alike  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
LJB,
I really liked this story. And your format made it fun and easy to read. Sometimes doing that little extra is what will win in a close race...lol.
What I didn't like was your use of the jackass line. The fight scene was going along perfectly without it. You could have said, Aarrhh! or something like that. I know kids can have a foul mouth, but here is a story about kids--maybe kids would want to read it--my kids, or yours, understand?
Overall, I darn good story. I'll announce the winner this weekend.
W.D.
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Review of Money Gone  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Spence,
*Laugh*This was really good. Your dialogue was almost perfect. Your kidspeak was right on the mark without using foul language. I like that. It doesn't do any good to write a kid's story that kids can't read...lol. Your storyline was superb. It had me grinning all the way through. I'd recommend this story to everyone.
Thanks for entering my contest. Winner will be announced SAT. or SUN.
W.D.
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
Bravo! A brilliant and fun read. I will feature it in next week's Fantasy Newsletter, be sure you're signed up, and cingrats,
W.D.
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Review of Dragon Eyes  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A wonderful tale of dragon. I will feature it in next week's Fantasy Newsletter, be sure you're signed up, congrats,
W.D.
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a marvelous story. I will feature both parts in the next Fantasy Newsletter, be sure you're signed up to get it, congrats,
W.D.
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Review of Dawn Dragon  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful beginning! Bravo! I will feature this in next week's Fantasy Newsletter, congrats,
W.D.

I noticed a typo here: It takes practise to discipline your thoughts [practice]
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Review of The Jacket  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really liked your story. You have an easy reading style and kept your paragraphs short, allowing me to breeze right through the twisted tale to the very end. Your descriptions were excellent/ your dialogue believable. You have a talent that is plain to see.

There were a couple of things i noticed:
1) a sight that caused much anxiety
[what's another way to say this? A nice descriptive word...]

2) making his way
[you used this phrase twice in almost the the same sentence]

I will feature this story in the next Horror/Scary Newsletter. Be sure your signed up to receive it and congrats,
-W.D.-
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is fantastic! What an enhancement to the site. You are a mastermind at adding just what the community is looking for. Congrats,
W.D.
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Review of Night Terrors  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well, I think it was pretty darn good...lol. Sure it's got some rough spots, but nothing drastic. You have described a man's fear in a very chilling manner. This is what I would do with this middle part:

I shot up out of bed, my breathing going a mile a minute. Sweat flooded down my body, soaking my clothes and my sheets. My face was red, and my head was pounding. It was still dark though.[this last sentence doesn't fit this paragraph. Or you could make it the 2nd sentence in the paragraph. It would fit well there.]

I junped out of bed[you got out of bed again?] and turned on the lights, illuminating all of the dark corners. I assured myself it was all a dream, all just a bad dream. I sighed and looked at my digital clock flashing numbers: 1:37. I let out an exasperated breath and tried to go back to bed. It didn't work, so I got up [again you get up?]and went to the kitchen to get something to eat, or at least to do something.

Other than that it was very frightfully done. It's better writing than I see from most of the adults on this site...lol. Best wishes with this,
W.D.
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
I thought this was very touching and very well written. Do not be ashamed if you should lose this contest. Your story speaks more than any amount of GP's you could ever possibly win,
*Heart*W.D.
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Review of Deep Shade  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this. I thought the way you tied everything together was fabulous--very creative.
I would've mentioned seeing the wild life earlier in the piece, then the last paragraph would have had more impact. All and all, I see great potential here. Write On! And if no one has welcomed you yet to Writing.com, let me be the first to say, "WELCOME!" If there's anything you need help with or you have a question about how things work, just drop me a line. I'd be honored to give you a hand. Plus here's a 1,000 GP's to get you started...Merry Christmas! *Wink*,
W.D.
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Review of The Doctor  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Strange is a good word for this story...LOL. But I enjoyed your dialogue and humor very much. I thought a little more explanation could have been used here, but not really knowing what was going on made me want to continue reading until the end. I consider this a very humorous piece and it brings back my paranoia of the lurking thought police *Shock* that wait for us all. Who empowers these people anyway...LOL. Great job, my friend,
W.D.
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Review of Stingy Jack  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well that is quite a tale. Is it based in any fact or off the top of your head? LOL
I'll feature it in the next Horror Newsletter, CONGRATS!
W.D.
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Review of TELEPHONE  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very good story. Your dialogue was great. It was an easy fun read and kept be going from start to finish.
This line didn't look right to me: "Mary. Her voice," raced through Peter's head incoherently as his emotions collapsed.
I think you put the quotes in the wrong place. Still, it was cool, WRITE ON! I'll feature it in the next Horror Newsletter, CONGRATS!
W.D.
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Review of The Western Sky  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This flowed very well too. I didn't like the last line, I don't know why, but it seems to have to many beats. How about this= "another night passes by."
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ginger,
I thought this was pretty good. Your flow is excellent, and your last stanza is exceptional. Very good imagery, I could hear the night as well as see it. Congrats on a great poem,
W.D.
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Review of The Grim Weeper  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
What a strange little story. I loved it. It was just odd enough to keep me reading through 'til the end. I will feature this in the Horror Newsletter, congrats,
W.D.
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Review of Savanna storm  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
Bravo! Nicely done! I liked the line, "the bones sink deep". Keep it up *Wink*
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I remember this, but you definitly have filled it out some. Great character developement and ending. I liked how you showed a normal visit and then turned them all into the dysfuntional family of the year...LOL. Good write, my friend. You'll see this in the Horror/Scary Newsletter at the end of the month.
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Review of Iremyn  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good story, Steve. A creepy, fleshy, world of insane ramblings. I loved it. And you're one sick puppy...LOL.
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well done. I enjoyed the fast pace and hurrying fear of the characters. It made me feel their terror. An excellent write.
W.D.
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