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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your slam of Cupid as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the annual February, Cupid Slam Poetry contest that gives all of us who are sick and tired of sickly sweet Cupid mishaps a chance slam that pesky creature but good! *CupidArrowL*

Initial Thoughts:

You went after Cupid with all the mismatching he has done causing more grief than fun! *RollEyes*

*CupidArrowR* SLAM! *CupidArrowL*
Your aim is so terrible, it's a cosmic disgrace,
You're not a love guru, just a cheesy, fading dream.
But love built on your schemes soon turns frosty and cold.
chubby cherubs and their childish wiles.

*DartR* Plus, Cupid is told to take a hike due to all his love matching being less than desirable in results.


Further Thoughts:

You make a fine plea for Cupid to just go away. So much messing up and hard feelings and broken hearts and a girl and a pizza delivery man ... That didn't end well! *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

You followed the rules with a Slam poem directed at Cupid. It's getting the sought after 1-*Star*

You bashed him but good! But, was it good enough at being BAD enough? We shall see *DartR*

Conclusion:

Good work and good luck! *GoLucky*

Until next time--write on!



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Review of Dear me  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello there! drainfall

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



Initial Thoughts:

You have listed several goals you'd like to complete for the year.

Goals to complete these tasks by a certain date:

*BulletBr* complete "Across America" by the first of March.

*BulletV* spend quality time with friends at least five times by the twenty-third of February. (Friends are so important. I love that you included making them part of your over all goals.)

*BulletB* commit to forgetting someone who has caused me pain, symbolically on the twenty-eighth of January, my birthday. ( Very good goal. Forgiveness only makes us stronger.)

*BulletO* bring joy to my family, particularly my coffee-loving mother, I aim to master the art of making the best coffee in our household. (Family is very important.)

These goals are reasonable and I believe attainable. *ThumbsUpL*


Observation:

All paragraphs start with Dear Me. This tends to be monotonous. You really want to pull your reader into the goals planned for the year. Show the excitement of these goals for 2024.


Conclusion:

I see this as a good start. The letter to oneself just seems more of a short list with not much confidence shown by the lack of enthusiastic description of goals and how to attain them.

However, the rules were followed, and the letter started off with "Dear Me" as required.


Good luck with all your goals for 2024! *Fire*




Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there! TheactualTreasure

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



First Impressions:

I love how your opening is filled with crackle and sparkle of fireworks. It's a positive way to propel yourself into managing your goals.

Further Thoughts:

Adventures, Kindness & Creativity:

These are lovely personal goals It not only boosts your spirits but also passes on the spirit of your passion to others. Writing goals and other creative outlets are there, as well as good cheer, spreading a smile, cherishing the simple joys with loved ones. These are goals that not only benefit yourself but others around you.


Suggestion:

You might have wanted to add a bit of color, to make the goals stand out. Not required, but goes a long way to attract attention. Just my humble opinion. *Wink*

Parting Thoughts:

You have all the goals set out. They all seem manageable--not too much expected beyond time and ability to complete. Some things are just a natural such as sharing joy and smiles with loved ones. It returns exponentially. And face it, what goes around comes around to boost your confidence as you reach for your goals.


Conclusion:

It's a very straightforward list of goals. All seem doable and thus could be accomplished this year.

Good job--Good luck! *Tackb*


Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of Dear Me 2024  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there! Sorji

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



You have a great recipe for achieving the goals you have set forth.

*PaintG* Finishing books and ready for publishing

*PaintO* Adding audio, a tedious job to say the least.
Getting finances in order

*PaintP* Eating healthier with focus on health rather than fast results
more reading and artistic work.

*PaintY* Enjoying a favorite pastime of your love for gaming.

Keeping it real and manageable.

These are the things that jumped out at me. *Dolphin*


Observations:

It's time to list of this year's goals. It's time to list this year's goals.

Conclusion:

Nicely laid out outline for a successful year of accomplishing goals you have set.

Good luck with your 2024 goals! *Boat*

Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of Dearest Me  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



First Impressions:

The layout is very attractive to the eyes. It pulled me right into your goals for this year.

Further Impressions:

Your well-thought out goals include being kinder to yourself as well as others. Also being forgiving, showing more care and love to family, and learning how to say "no" when it's necessary.

I like the way the goals a re broken down. They have clarity and are concise. Nothing added that appears to be far out as far as reaching those goals.

Parting Thoughts:

You did a wonderful job giving yourself goals that are definable, can be adjusted when needed but not completely tossed out of consideration. Your goals touch upon a faith you have in your abilities that just need a little nudge and a bit of dedication.

Conclusion:

You tackled this Dear Me prompt with a true passion! Good luck with all of your goals for 2024! *Karate2*



Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there! SherritheWriter

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



Initial Thoughts:

You have decided to to rise above all the obstacles that plagued you in the previous year. I see someone ready to reach their goals and make choices that help achieve those goals in 2024.

Further Thoughts:

Better healthy choices to help mind, body and spirit. That's always a great place to start. We mustn't forget to nurture ourselves. Meditation is helpful to ease the anxiety.

Be an Amazon Best Seller: If you can dream it, plan it, work diligently on the novels, you can achieve your goals, or at least make headway and keep chipping away.

Finances:Getting control of debt and trying to grow finances is a good way to move forward with your goals.

Parting Thoughts:

I find someone who's on the road to success through dedication and hard work to achieve her goals for 2024.

Conclusion:

Good luck with your plans and goals for this year. *DartBl*


Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! StephBee - House Targaryen

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!




First Impression:

On first gaze, I love the eye appeal of the layout. The image is beautiful with the birds in the nest hiding in the bush. The breakdown of the goals is clear and well presented.

Further Thoughts:

The Dragons and Dust Bunnies and jungle are a creative edition. It made it a fun read.

The diary of goals set in 2023 and how they rated to be used as a comparison to 2024 when the years is up is an excellent approach.

Parting Thoughts:

You've listed reading and writing goals. Editing a book for release on Amazon, working on a new novel, and investing the needed time for marketing shows a clear path to success in publishing. Lots of work!

Conclusion:

It's wonderful to see your The Bee Hive activities come to life.

Great job! Good luck with your 2024 goals!



Regards,
Web~Witch



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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there! Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



Initial Thoughts:

I really enjoyed the unique presentation! It was fun to read and I enjoyed the added humor. I know, you don't believe you are humorous, but you certainly can be as I've seen in a couple reviews I've done for you in the past.

Further Thoughts:

You're keeping it real!

You choose five goals for 2024. That is the first step to success. Don't stack too many plans all together and expect that time will wait for you to finish them. There's always unplanned circumstances in life that tend to throw a monkey wrench right smack into our best laid plans.

Taking care of yourself is part of it. Taking care of physical and emotional roadblocks by being more proactive about it.

Trying not to stress out id another key to your reaching your goals. Keeping it real and not being too hard on yourself. That always leads to negative results.

Positive Changes are part of the plan.

Write/blog more.

Stay away from bad habits and use the tools available to keep the good attitude going each day.

Parting Thoughts:


Now, I have to go back to #1 Talk about starting the letter with shock treatment...this was brilliant!

I like the refrain of going back to #1 each time you'd find an excuse not to do something working toward healthier goals. This added humor to the shock the reader got on first glimpse!

Conclusion:

You've got this! Good luck with your 2024 goals. *TeaR*




Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of DEAR ME!  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there! JACE - House Targaryen

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



Initial Thoughts:

Oh my gosh! Two muses pestering you?!!! *Laugh*

I guess three minds are better than two when you have goals to complete.

Further Thoughts:

I like the layout of your letter to self. I also like the humor threaded into it.

Goals:

Writing Goals

Stories and essays: "I Write in 2024"
Write and collate my memoires [memoirs]for family members: "Roots & Wings Contest"
Publish a Noticing Newbies newsletter every four weeks.

Reviewing Goals: 50 quality reviews each month.

Anniversary-Reviews
Super Tower Review Room
& Angel Army (*Smile*)

WDC Support:

Maintain a daily presence on both the Newsfeed and Help forums.
Operate my contest: "WDC L'il Helper Contest"
Continually update and organize How To references: "The File Cabinet"

Parting Thoughts:

Yes, it is an ambitious list of goals you have set for yourself and the other two muses, but I believe you've got this! Your plans will become goals completed in 2024.

Conclusion:

I wish you all the best of luck in your endeavors.




Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there! Elisa the Bunny Stik

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  (E)
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
#597313 by Writing.Com Support


Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!



Initial Thoughts:

You want to go back to your roots, focus on the skills and traits that are foundational to you. Refocus on your career and have time for the thing you love, photography.

Further Thoughts:

How to accomplish the goals you want for 2024:

Civic Involvement

Reductions to your civic commitments to free up space to complete your other goals.

Focus on your subcommittee chair responsibilities and discussing your jargon-related concerns in counseling.

Photography:

Enhance your photography interests with the space you free up from civic involvement.

Job:

Finding a job in cybersecurity, IT and troubleshooting skills.

Emotional Health:

Don't get caught up in all the stresses going on these days. Focus on the things that allow your mind to settle down for a little while.

Getting out of your comfort zone is your key to success for 2024.

Conclusion:

I think your goals are well set, doable and incorporate love of photography as well as your preparedness for a career as mentioned above will bring you close to what you need and beyond, in 2024.

I wish you the very best of luck in your endeavors.






Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of Dear Me.  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello there! PureSciFi

I am WebWitch and I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
 
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Thank you for entering January's Dear Me Contest!




Initial Thoughts:

You have many accomplishments having to do with your love for Sci-Fi. It's a very industrious workload you have, indeed. Script writing and a novel or two will definitely keep you busy this year.

Further Thoughts:

One thing that made me pause. I found it difficult to get through all the back story in the beginning of the letter which reads more like a short story before goals are listed. It was a bit confusing.

The Goals Stated:

"Once I finish transcribing these scripts, I will start working on my Outlines"
This is expected be a reached goal by the middle of the year. *Thumbsup*

Also, additional scripts: Starting SpaceHorrors scriptwriting project.

-Start writing short stories about DeathBringers.

- A novel introduction to my SpaceHorrors television series.

I believe those are the goals set for 2024. I may have missed something but it happens when there's not a clear list for the reader to see right away. Which is why it's a good idea to simplify the layout of your current year's goals rather than losing them in the past history. It's very clear that you have a love for Sci-Fi. I think more time could have been spent clarifying your current goals.

Conclusion:

These are all industrious goals. I wish you all the best in your endeavors and successes for 2024. *Wand*



Regards,
Web~Witch



Angel&Witch


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Review of " CLAP HANDS "  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello Netty

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random, Read & Review. *Smile*

My Thoughts:

This is a beautiful expression of faith. I love how the images of people clapping their hands to give glory to the Lord come into my mind.

It's quite lyrical and I wondered if it were meant to be a singing prayer. I could imagine little children singing this with their sweet, enthusiastic voices along with their parents. *HeartT*

If indeed these words are song lyrics perhaps add lyrics along Spiritual with the Genres.

Parting Thoughts:

The words flowed smoothly. They wove in the spiritual richness of faith. It's a prayer for each reader who comes across this.

I found no errors that took away from this simple expression of love and praise of Our Lord. *Pray*

Great job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Kathleen Cochran
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I found your item on the "Review a Newbie" page. Welcome to WDC! *Rose*

Initial Thoughts:

I like the Title and Brief Description. A reader knows it is aimed at living a healthy life over 50.

Further Thoughts:

Your list is clear and states reasons why there are so many obstacles to finding that healthy lifestyle. Sometimes we tend to forget ourselves when so busy taking care of others. One must always allow time to relax eat well and properly, exercise and know your body's warning bells that something may not be exactly right. *Strong*

Parting Thoughts:

I think most of us know the recipe for maintaining health. It's living a common sense lifestyle. A body can only take so much "abuse" before it winds down and hits a high level of fatigue. *Yawn*

I agree with the change which hand you use to brush your teeth. I have heard that changing up the dominant hand for the non-dominant can increase brain function because it exercises the brain as well. It could also help if ever a stroke happens for the brain to learn to reroute information where there has been damage from the stroke. As I said, I heard it or read it somewhere and it always stuck in my mind. *Brain2*

Conclusion:

Very useful and sensible advice! Good job. *StarfishY*

I had to change the content rating on this article because "have sex" is non-E. nor ASR. 13+ is the rating that fits this item. "There are absolutely no references to sex (other than gender)" in an E or ASR content rating.

Again, welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy all the features on the site. If you have questions about navigating the site, you can check out "Writing.Com 101" .

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch




Hello, there ridinghhood-p.boutilier
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review!

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review.

First Thoughts:

The title and brief description gave me a glimpse into the tone of the poem. Reaching the age of 50 and finding strength and confidence in a half century of life and going forward is a beautiful thing. *Rose*

Further Thoughts:

The poem was quite expressive as the confident woman breaks through the follies of youth and games played and all those things women feel are their lot in life. No longer dancing through hoops trying to please others is what I gleaned from this poem. *Vine1*

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the flow and the emotions evoked from reading this poem. The lines spoke a clarity to me along with the folksy tone. It was appreciated the definition of "caul" and the Bread of shame from ingratitude given to God. Interesting!

Conclusion:

The lines flowed easily one line after another. It made images form in my mind that last long after reading this poem.

I found nothing that looks out of place ...Perfection! *TeaV*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Last Few Moments  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen
This is a
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

A man contemplates through his thoughts what the end of his life will be like.

Further Thoughts:

He shares his thoughts of earlier days with his daughter when she was young and playing with her friends. So much joy in his memories. He decides to write a letter to her since he knew he was dying. *Hourglass*

Observations:

Contest rules followed?

Internal Dialogue -- Yes this was written as the character's inner thoughts.

Was the dialogue based on the picture prompt? ...No, there is no tie-in to the picture prompt of a man sitting on a bench on a cold January day.

Word count is given. *CheckG*


Parting Thoughts:

This was a beautiful read about a lifetime of memories. I love how he gets to hold his daughter's hand at the end.

Conclusion:

Great dialogue, but missing the prompt. *Sob*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Cold  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, KnightScribe
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering January's picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

The Brief Description states, "A man searches for a lost ring as his thoughts rage." The reader expects to find out what kind of ring it is and what's causing his distress.

Further Thoughts:

A man sits on a park bench trying to figure out if his girlfriend took something from his drawer when he stepped away from the room. He started blaming her through his internal dialogue because he couldn't find the missing item/s anywhere and she was the last to be close by his drawer. *Gavel*


Observations:

Yes, the brief description states it was a lost ring. However, nowhere in the body of the entry does mention it's a ring missing.

Also, ring or rings? "...the last place I saw them was the nook in my nightstand." Them implies more than one. A little confusing, here.

Parting Thoughts:

I did like the ending when after bashing her for the theft, and humming a tune with lyrics convincing to leave her, he states: "Best get going. I don't want her to worry. *Laugh* I guess he got all that other crap off his chest and was ready to go see her. Ain't love strange?!! *Rolling*

Conclusion:

Prompt was followed, internal dialogue, and the word count given. *CheckO*

Just a little clarification needed of the above mentioned observations about the article/s missing.

Thanks again for entering! *PaintG*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, HollisFrances
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Picture Prompt Dialogue contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

The reader is introduce to this character's internal struggle especially with his faith. He works through his thoughts which are very negative in the beginning as he begins to blame God for all his losses. He feels spiritually abandoned. *Frown*

Further Thoughts:

Loneliness is prevalent as those closest to him who have known him all his life are no longer alive. Again, tremendous abandonment issues are plaguing his thoughts.

Parting Thoughts:

He finally faces his demons at the end and realizes that blaming God for all his problems is not what he knows is true deep down inside. He lightens his burden and sees the light of his spiritual existence and faith. It's a beautiful thing! *Bird*

Rules were all followed. Internal dialogue based on the picture prompt. Word count was included.

Conclusion:

Good job! *PaintO*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Dan I Am
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Picture Prompt dialogue contest.

First Thoughts:

A man is waiting on a bench for the bus to arrive. The bus is late and his thoughts seem to run amok on him. *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

This is one unlikable person. *Rolleyes* He is battling reasons why his girlfriend canceled there date at their favorite restaurant at the last minute to tend to a sick aunt. He has all the negative reasons aimed at her. Then the reader discovers that he's the jerk who has not treated her very well. He's super critical about her hair and eye color and other things he needs to make up in his mind as he continues thinking it's all her fault. But then, he faces the fact that it could possibly be him who has turned her away from their relationship. *Ha*


Observation:

This part caught my eye:
"Couldn't be just because I forgot her birthday once.Or twice. I apologized both times. What more did she want?" How did this guy fail to remember her birthday twice if they were a couple for six months? *EyesLeft*

Parting Thoughts:

You followed the rules using the picture prompt to write the man's internal dialogue. You gave the word count, however it was not within the entry it was on the post. I had to check back because I didn't see it. That's why we ask for word count with item, not with post. Easy to slip by us. *Wink*

Your story had a bit of tongue-in-cheek humor as the reader gets to this man's head as his thoughts unfold. Speaking of watch--did he seriously throw the watch she gave him as a gift, at the wall, breaking it?!!! *Rolling* Oh, yeah, mister, it's all her fault. I hope she runs as far and fast as she can out of his life. *Sneaker2*

Conclusion:

Nice job! *Vine2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Immortal  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Genipher
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" 

Thank you for entering January's picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

"Touch an ancient, shiny, artifact glowing with freaking magic and next thing you know you’re sucked into a painting of a barren landscape, sitting on your frozen ass for all eternity."

Need I say more? *Laugh* Talk about pulling the reader in. Great opening to pique that curiosity! *Cool*

Further Thoughts:

An artifact, a friend Jerry, who may be smarter than the poor wrong-wisher frozen into a painting, and no way out! Gramps' legacy fell into the wrong hands that's for sure.

Moral of his predicament? Think long and hard before making such grand wishes. You might get what you asked for but the results not as expected. Being stuck alone forever can't be any fun. Magic has a way of out foxing the fox sometimes. *Fox*

Parting Thoughts:

Prompt followed, internal dialogue, word count given, not modified after contest closed.

It was a fun and sadly-humorous story. But humor is humor.

Conclusion:

Interesting and unique use of the picture prompt. *DartB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Kåre Enga in Udon Thani
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January picture prompt dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

You move your reader from the comfort of home right onto that bench in the harsh cold of winter. The dialogue brought that picture to life.

Further Thoughts:

I see under Genre it includes Biographical. It describes a very sad, lonely and tough time after Frank passed away. All the comfort of a home and warmth and friendship --gone. Life of a homeless person started and winter bit through the body relentlessly. *Tempcold*

Parting Thoughts:

You used the picture prompt to show the truth behind having so much one day, and nothing the next--except of course Frank's coat. It may not have been warm enough on a frigid day, but it was a way to be wrapped up in memories and warmth from the past. *Vine1*

The rules were followed using the picture to apply internal thoughts/dialogue of the man sitting on a park bench. Word count was included.

Conclusion:

Very gripping dialogue, indeed.

Good job! *DartG*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello there, J.R. PETE
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering January's Picture Prompt Dialogue contest. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

This guy had me going in many different directions. Poor guy! He had many fears and dislikes surrounding him.

Further Thoughts:

You followed the rules. It was his internal dialogue and word count was given.

He strikes me as a man who has no joy in his daily life. However, there was someone or more than one person he was supposed to meet at that spot on the bench in the park on Wednesday.

He internalized different concoctions of what to expect, good or bad and was quite disturbed by the terrible possibilities it could be about. He got to where he feared for his life.


Observation:

"looked like Trappist Monk." [Monks, plural].

Suggestion:

Unanswered questions: There were more words of the word count you could have added to bring more depth to the character. What was his job?
Why did he worry so much about who would show up after agreeing to the meeting?

Perhaps some hint of why he is waiting, what did he expect by agreeing to meet those strangers at the park. If he thought it could be a trap for him, I guess it was better he showed up at the wrong time. *Thought2*


Parting Thoughts:

I like the added humor about wondering which Wednesday in fact they meant for him to be there. The following day or the following week? Even the reader was wondering! *Laugh*


Conclusion:

I guess he can take all his allergies out of the park and head home and shut his blinds and find something else to worry or complain about. *Rolling*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Park Bench  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Picture prompt Dialogue, contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

I just pictured this man wrapped up in his thoughts and his sweet memories of his times with his family at the park. It was his deceased wife's favorite place, so he enjoys feeling close to Mary when he sits on the park bench and thinks about their wonderful years together. *Flowerw*

Further Thoughts:

I love how he notices children sledding and throwing snowballs and it reminds him of his child doing the same some 60 years ago. Very sweet addition having the background become"animated" by those scenes of a dad and his kids playing. *Vine2*

Observation:

A quick read is suggested for punctuation.


Parting Thoughts:

This was a heartwarming story to read. You followed the directions making it internal dialogue. Word count given. *Tackg*

Conclusion:

Good job with the picture prompt! *CupidArrowL*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there Tim Chiu
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

This was about to be a fun read about the certain charms of feminine wiles. And indeed it was that!

Further Thoughts:

Your descriptive verses with melodious rhyme was as well endowed as the woman's assets described. You painted vivid pictures. But not just that ... as a woman with my own assets, I could picture this from the point of view of the lady catching the glimpses of her male friends enjoyment of her company. *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

Good job with the rhythm and rhyme and the expertise of men's minds at work when a lady has got their attention in a most beguiling way.


Well done! *Heel*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of The King  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review, where you never know when what you have buried deep in your port will come back to haunt you. *Ghost*

Initial Thoughts:

Well, you wrote it so I was sure to get a giggle out of it. Yup --*Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

I guess this was a contest based on the music by The Verve and you had to write it in 100 words. It's not an easy task to do a story in 100 words. You handled this one well.

Parting Thoughts:

We have a king, we have a queen and a bottle of blue pills.

Now we get to the meat of the problem here that "The Drugs Don't Work."

Actually from the ending It stood to do a royal job indeed. *Rolling*

Conclusion:

100 words story witha humorous ending!

Good job! *Web2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Lambzilla  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Beholden
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review!

First Impressions:

Your item popped up on the Random Review click.

I knew I was about to read a clever take on Mary Had a Little Lamb. Now, I can't get that nursery rhyme out of my head. Oh, gee, thanks for that --I think! *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

This was crisp, humorous, well-rhymed and impeccable rhythm. That's a whole lot of good stuff rolled into that one statement! *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed the images that popped up in my mind as I read through the lines. I think I like your version over the original.

Conclusion:

Good job! I found nothing that distracted me from the flow. It was melodious as it should be.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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