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Review of Cupid Outbid  
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Rated: 13+ | (1.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest February Cupid Slam contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Acrostic poetry slamming Cupid. I found that an interesting poetry form for this prompt.

Further Thoughts:


You followed the rules and prompt handily.
Line count included.
Give Cupid a slam -- he certainly got a slamming here. *Ha*
But was it baaaaad enough? *Thought2*


Favorite "bad" lines:

"Damn - what I don't give, darling" *Shock2*

"U don't mean a thing to I" *RollEyes*

Those lines gave me a chuckle. *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:


Unique poem and presentation for a slam
Thank you for entering the contest. *Writer*

Until next time--slam on! *Smirk*

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WebWitch *Witch*



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102
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Espero
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering February's Cupid Slam Poetry. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Clever use of the prompt adding a bit of "terror." I love a Cupid horror story poem. *Devilish*

Further Thoughts:

Rules and prompt were followed. *CheckP*

You showed a despicable character to slam in the Vesper character toward Cupid.

Is it bad? Yup, this is wrought with rot against Cupid being a sappy arrow slinger. It's filled with love gone awry thus sadness, bitterness and anger are woven within the poem since Cupid stole his lover away. Vesper is the anti-love non-Cupid out for revenge.


Parting Thoughts:


I found it amusing that Cupid has Vesper craving his blood as revenge for being the annoying February love and life and relationship messer-upper!

Conclusion:

Fun read! *Ha*

Thanks again for entering the contest. *Bigsmile*

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WebWitch *Witch*




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103
Review of Slamming Cupid  
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Hello there, Dan I Am

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Cupid Slam contest in February. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:


Good rhythm woven through the lines with humor and a bit of rhyme.

Further Thoughts:

Followed all Rules, slam Cupid, line count given.
Is this the kind of "bad" that really slams Cupid?
I'd say it's pretty bad. Will bad be good enough? The best of the worse is what we search for. Believe me, it's difficult judging Cupid Slam because there are so many poems to pore through to find just the perfect amount of bad! *Ha*

Parting Thoughts:

You did make Cupid look pretty bad. Alien, pervert, not Santa of course. *Smirk*

Bonus Fact:

You didn't use the overused words common in previous years' Slam ... "Stupid Cupid" I like that. *Angelic*

*StarR* Content Rating:

I needed to change your rating because some of the words chosen imply a violent act by that bothersome creature. No violence allowed in any E content or very mild in ASR.

"just go the hell away." (Not E-rated and also Removes this from ASR)

No cursing of any kind in either. "Heck" would have worked in ASR but the violent content with the gun use to "pop" him would not be fit for either E or ASR.


*Down*

"grab a gun and pop him." (Brings this up to 13+)

Otherwise, this was so bad, it was good! And let's face it, that's the point of slamming Cupid! *Bigsmile*

Until next time--Slam on! *Shock2*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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104
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there JCosmos
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our January Prompt, "Plot it Yourself!" *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

This is what the reader trips over at the start of the story:

" their car is stuck in the snow and it is freezing outside. They are just outside the town of Eagle Creek where they were going to visit Jason’s uncle who lived there just outside of Medford along a country road." Repeated use of the word "outside" within the several sentences."

I address the wordiness of this under Observations. You really want to hook your reader right from the opening paragraph to make them look forward to what happens next.


Further Impressions:

Interesting Sci-Fi story with aliens invading. The Washington state backdrop makes it even more vivid as a the plot works around invasions and heavy snow making traveling next to impossible.

The family did hook up with five others who know of the aliens and suggest they would do well to stick together and fight the good fight.

Observations:

They took what they could and found Hunter’s(hunters' it's plural)Trucks and they took off.


This opening is a bit wordy, and doesn't show the reader the peril they are in. It's told to us, but there's no urgency, no hook in the beginning to pull us into the plot.

*Down*

"Jason Lee, his wife, Maria Kim, and their two children ages 8 and 10 are driving late on a winter’s day when they encounter a huge snowstorm their car is stuck in the snow and it is freezing outside."


Example:

Darkness fell as Jason and his wife and two young children were making the trip to visit his uncle. Suddenly, a blizzard hit disabling their car from further travel. There was no road visible, only huge snowdrifts encompassing the vehicle at a rapid rate.

The family walked the short distance to a cabin they just passed and sought shelter.
(Just an example of bringing the action on and not wasting words about names of and ages of children who never interact in the story.)

Parting Thoughts:

This is quite the interesting plot with lots of potential. It is unique and can be expanded on, as well as reducing some repetitive words and fillers, as well as leaving out descriptions of characters who never get involved in the story line after the introduction. If the children were more active in the story, then descriptions of them would be necessary. Also, we're left wondering about the current situation of the uncle. *Sob*


Conclusion:

You followed the rules as per the Bard's Hall guidelines. You took the leap and created an interesting story which begs to be developed more.Just think of the possibilities once they reach their destination! *Bigsmile*

Thanks again for entering the contest. *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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105
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our January prompt, "Plot it Yourself!"

Initial Thoughts:

The car is stuck, the phone dies in mid conversation, there's no battery charger. I would have liked a bit more snow drama leading up to the scene of the stuck vehicle so the reader knows right off the bat that it's snowing and it may have been the cause of the car being stuck? Of course that image becomes clearer as the character approaches the cabin.


Further Thoughts:

I liked that you selected an animal to be stuck in the cabin with after the car got stuck in the snow. That was a unique use of the prompt it yourself. There was dialogue, yes, dialogue with the dog. *Bigsmile*

Parting Thoughts/Suggestions:

This story had a workable plot. It weaves in the fantasy element of a talking dog. I liked how the dog barking on the road brought the attention of a wrecker to help the stranded woman.

My suggestion is that you had much more word count left to develop the story a little more. It seemed to be all wrapped up a little too neatly at the end.


*QuestionGr* What further dialogue could have helped the reader know the breed of the dog for instance?
*QuestionY* Why was the dog there alone? Does it belong to the person who owns the cabin?

Questions such as these need answering to really flesh out the plot.


Conclusion:

You followed the rules within word count, and Plotted it yourself! *Bigsmile* You took a unique character to be stranded for the night during the storm. *ThumbsUpR*

I saw no errors in grammar and spelling. The suggestion above would have added so much more to the story.

Thanks again for entering the contest! *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*












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106
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello there Graywriter
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our January Contest, "Plot it Yourself!"

First Impressions:

I loved the strong beginning. A hard landing causing the neck to thrust forward, the inability to move the vehicle and unable to find a phone to seek help.

Further Impressions:

You add a bit of creepiness and mystery as you described the cabin's occupant. I was thinking if a professor who had retired was rumored to be dead, perhaps he was? Perhaps they both were! *Shock2*


Observations & Suggestions:


Not too likely on this country lane;

I stumbled up the front steps onto the veranda of thea [the] rustic cottage and banged breathlessly on the door.

*pointr*This story just begs for more fleshing out, so to speak. I imagined so many scenarios. It seemed as if it ended abruptly.


There was plenty more word count usage available, as well. More development of the story, adding some more horror, humor, something that takes the reader on the ride and wondering at how it will all end.

The set up leaves a reader to believe (at least this one) that the professor might be a ghost and the driver dies in the accident ans is one as well. That would have brought the thrills and chills to the story.

Parting Thoughts:


If I remember Spam well, it doesn't take a a "wicked" looking knife to cut through it. *Laugh*

Conclusion:

You did follow the prompt and the rules. You plotted it yourself! *Bigsmile*

Thanks again for entering!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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Review of Mort  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello Sumojo I am reviewing your story as a judge for
 
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Thank you for entering December's What A Character Contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

This character is quite the hero! I like how Mort keeps on working through the drought and missing his wife and spending time helping his neighbor.

Further Thoughts:

Mort has a big and charitable heart but has forgotten to hold close those he loves most. He seems to have wrapped himself in sadness over the farm his father had run before his death. Mort didn't want to let his dad's land to be lost. Unfortunately, his wife could not bear living with Mort and his pity and left to stay with her daughter in the city.

Observations:

They would they would have to wait before it would be safe to open the door. repeated "they would." Also see the suggestion below for the line following this one. Formatting could use a little more spacing. Here's one example, but there are a few that need that extra "enter" click.

"They would have to wait before it would be safe to open the door.(click a couple times on the enter bar, here.)

"Conditions in the shipping container were almost unbearable."

Parting Thoughts:

This was quite a heart wrenching story of the dreadful drought in Australia and the plight of the farmers there. It also shows the determination and sheer fortitude of Mort and his good deeds trying to help his neighbor's pregnant wife with many of her farm duties while her husband was working away.

Mort also was an experienced volunteer firefighter and knew what needed to be done to save himself and his neighbor along with the dogs in the kennel.


Conclusion:


The ending was action-filled and then the calmness after the fires and his wife returning home because Mort realized the importance of family and loved ones in his life. Keeping those priorities first and everything else will work itself out with his wife by his side.

Beautiful use of the prompt!

Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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108
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Graywriter

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
 
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#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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Thank you for entering December's What A Character Contest! *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:


A responsible twelve year old girl goes on an errand for her mom. Her young brother wanted to tag along.

Further Thoughts:

This was sweet story of a couple precocious kids who knew how to handle themselves at a butcher shop with a nasty, rude customer stepping ahead in line.

Dickie? Well he was quite the character!

What Amused me:

The whole chicken feed talk was hilarious! The young brother, Dickie, certainly knew about farming chickens and told that lady why they aren't just "grass fed." free range. It was quite an education, actually to anyone thinking chickens are completely vegetarian as they run around those ranges. Bugs and other small critters add to their diet. *Ha*


Another Amusing Moment, if only it were true these days!

"... pick up some steaks at the butcher? Dad's bringing some friends over for supper tonight and I phoned the order in. Here's a twenty, that should cover it. Bring back the change."

I need to know where this mom shops for steaks for that low price. *Laugh*


Conclusion:


Well done, fast-paced and infused with a quirkiness and humor that painted images in my mind's eye of the children and the now probably vegetarian rude lady. *Laugh*

That'll teach her to take her proper place in line. I doubt she'll enjoy another bite of chicken again. *Chicken*


Good job!


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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109
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello LightinMind
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Initial Thoughts:

I knew this would be a fight to the finish. I was ready to watch David beat Goliath in court.

Further Thoughts:

David is a well organized reasonable thinker looking for the truth rather than accepting policy based science that the university pushes. I applaud his character for choosing to publish his book questioning their "science" even though his job at the university was at stake.

Kudos to his lawyer wife for stepping up to help out with the lawsuit against the university.

Observation:

The prosecutor concluded his statement to the jury and sat down. John had expected the case to focus on university policy regarding conclusions, but instead, the prosecution built its case around an ad hominem attack on his personal competence and intellectual honesty.
I believe this would constitute a civil lawsuit not a criminal one, thus, there would be no prosecutor involved but Plaintiff's Lawyer or Defendant's lawyer.



Parting Thoughts:

Good use of the prompt. This was truly a David and Goliath story where the little guy wins over the giant corporation's threats to ruin him while taking away his job. So happy he got to face that "EB" and tell her what she can do with her job. Of course selling a million books did help him leave all that nasty stuff behind!

Conclusion:

Well done! *Scale1*

Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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Review of David's Obsession  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Damon Nomad

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
 
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Thank you for entering the January What A Character contest! *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description are fine hooks to pull in the reader.I believe sometimes obsession is a perfect forewarning of things we can't quite put our finger on, yet it nags until we sort it out. So, yeah, I was curious to find out more about David.


Further Thoughts:

I like the character. David is a self-made man. He studied on his own when he couldn't fir college into his life with the great responsibilities he had taking care of his mother and earning a living for her and his own family.

Observation:


"He could not find an error or mistake"
Both words mean the same thing, thus one should be eliminated so as not to be redundant.


Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed this story. You covered the whole person in this character. He's a man who has integrity and goes above and beyond in his work ethic. He found a huge problem that could contaminate the drinking water system affecting health and lives of those in the community. He fought the issue regardless of the warnings received from his bosses. He's unselfish and proved himself quite savvy when push came to shove.

Good man, great character!You hit this prompt's nail right on the head. *ThumbsUpGreen*

Conclusion:


You did a wonderful job with this character. *BeakerB*


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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111
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello PureSciFi

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
 
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Thank you for entering December's What A Character contest! *Bigsmile*



Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description caught my curiosity. There's to be a challenge both mentally and physically.
Good hook!

Further Thoughts:

The story involves a giant, Yanaka who appears every few hundred years to challenge one of the Kovinans, who were not in the same league of her giant height and girth.

You follow the David and Goliath prompt for What A Character.

You chose the Sci-Fi genre which is the genre you favor most. *Smile*

The story's plot built up as the challenge rules were battled out before the actually acceptance of the rules.

A female youngster who is Kovinan put forward the challenge and had to argue she was deserving of its acceptance even though Yanaka never accepts a challenge from a youth or a women.


Observations:


"She sat forward in the gigantic floating stone seat with armrests. she was sitting on."
No need to add those extra words since it's already clear that she was sitting when you stated "She sat forward."


“It is advancing, but that’s not what is [it's]doing here."

..."and we have given them the knowledge of the Giant Shooter. to them." No need to repeat "to them" since you say you've given them the knowledge at the start of the sentence.

"When their Watches [watchers] challenge them, they will use it to kill them too."

Parting Thoughts:

I liked the way the young girl, Thonia convinced the giant she would be facing a real challenge this time. She was quite the character!

Good for the Kovinans managing a couple hundred years of preparations to fight the giant out of the sight of the giant. Underground ... it's a good thing! *Bigsmile*

Conclusion:


Nice job! *Planet*


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch} *Witch*

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Review of Silver Bells  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Prosperous Snow Valentine
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering December's Acrostic Poetry Prompt. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

I loved the first glimpse of your poem where the acrostic prompt Silver Bells shows clearly through with bold text.

Further Impressions:

Each line builds the reader up to the excitement of the holiday season. Snow, Santa, reindeer and sparkle! 'Tis the season for all the sparkle! *Star*


Final Thoughts:

It's beautiful how your poem blends the start of Christmastime until the New Year. In between there are lovely words of hope, joy, music, love and peace. Beautiful, beautiful peace on Earth. *Peace*

Lovely!


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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113
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, JCosmos
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

The title "Bah Humbug" prepared me to read about all that isn't worth celebrating during this time of year.

Further Thoughts:

I was totally surprised! *Ha*

You took a common phrase that makes us think of Scrooge, and rather than becoming grumpy about it turned the poem into one of gratitude. Now that's a poem with good attitude!

You followed the rules using the acrostic form.

Final Thoughts:

It is indeed true. "Happiness comes from within."

Nicely done!

Until next time--write on!

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for entry "SILENT NIGHT
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Dave
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night as the prompt for your acrostic. I took a quick glance and noticed strong word use jumped out at me even before reading each line. Then I knew I was in for a treat upon full reading of the poem. As with poetry itself so much is left up to personal interpretation.

Further Thoughts:

Noticed the indigo shades of font for the description of the wintry weather outdoors, and the switch to black font for inside the home, where low lighting is obvious since windows are frost covered. Also, bringing nature inside the house such a holly, mistletoe perhaps a tree, cannot compete with nature's paintbrush of the colors outdoors.

Loved these lines:

Lacy frost adorns the window pane,
Endowing us with Yuletide joy,

Inspiring indoor escape,
Garnished with holly and mistletoe,


You bring the reader from the outdoors and the wintry display of nature to indoors in the warmth and comfort of the home. And, as is the season, part of the outdoors is brought into the home in some form for decoration and celebration of the season. *Holly2*

Parting Thoughts:

Lovely imagery! It starts with the enjoyment of nature's gorgeous display, perfectly crisp and icy. It ends with the celebration of nature's beauty being borrowed and moved inside surrounded by warmth.

Good job! *Snow4*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of Silent Night  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Odessa Molinari
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at the "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December.

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night as your prompt. The first line gave me images of falling snow and the pale teal first initial on each line gave the reader the feeling of its cool crispness and aqua hue so often seen with with the right lighting on a blanket of snow.

Further Thoughts:

You did a lovely job of describing winter's birth.

Loved these lines:

"It lay upon the earth
Like a frosty blanket
Encasing winter's birth.


Beautifully descriptive metaphoric lines that fit different interpretations of that time of year.

Observation:

"Til the Spring" "spring" Seasons are not capitalized unless starting a sentence. They are general nouns not proper nouns.

Conclusion:

Beautiful poetry, followed the Acrostic style effortlessly.

Good job! *Snow3*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*







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116
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there Anna Marie Carlson
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review. *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush acrostic poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:


You chose Dashing Through The Snow, which is the longest prompt to chose, so kudos for taking the challenge! *ThumbsUpL*

Further Thoughts:


I loved how you wove into the poem the need for healing, forgiveness and love and family for the season. How beautiful a message to send with your poem.

Your Acrostic followed the form with ease. No glitches in the reading other than ...

Observation:

{/:center{December 25, 2022, Christmas Day,


You have an open ML at the start, so it doesn't read smoothly when looking for the "D" in the Acrostic. It is of course, an easy fix once the contest is judged. Not a huge deal.*Wink*


Parting Thoughts:


Your poem highlighted the goodness and kindness of the season. It's a beautiful message!

Well done!
*Dove*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*




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117
Review of SILENT NIGHT  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, JustMeJayE
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I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night for your acrostic poem. A quick glance showed me this would be a fast-paced poem highlighting the "Rush" part of Holiday Rush. I like that! *Cool*

Further Thoughts:

Using only a few words or less per line meant that the words chosen would have to capture the reader's attentions and hold it through to the end while filling the mind's eye with imagery.

I have to say, you did that job handily! *Delight*

I loved the compact way of bundling the season and filling it with joy. Sleigh rides, eggnog, laughter, glee trimming the tree ... hit the holiday nail right on the head. *Nail**Hammer*

Conclusion:

Loved the fast-paced yet meaningful words chosen to put together a wonderful acrostic of celebrating such a joyous time of the year. *XMasTree*

Well done!


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review of Candles of Eight  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there Angelica- Spring forwar school
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering The Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose the prompt "Candles of Eight."

I loved the story told through your poem of the celebration by sharing with the reader the that each day a candle is lit, a prayer is said. *Pray*

Further Impressions:

This line caught my interest:

"Elephant tusk decorate the table" I assume the gift of elephant tusks brings good luck to the home. What a beautiful picture of that came to my mind.

Rules Followed?


Yes. You chose from the list of prompt titles given, created an acrostic poem. You followed the acrostic form perfectly.

Other Observations:

"Over the walls and {xthrough{/x} to the ceiling" I assume you were describing the light from the candles and how they wash against the walls and hit the ceiling. I doubt if the light could go "through" the ceiling. That is how it appears to me when read.


Parting Thoughts:

I like how you took the prompt not mostly chosen on the list. You did a lovely job describing the need for prayers each day while lighting the candle.

I was amused by the ending with:
"Happy holidays full of cheer
Time to call it a long week"

A long week indeed. Holidays do take their toll on us no matter how we celebrate them. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Ring those Bells  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush Acrostic Poetry Prompt in December! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

*Right* Strong title.

It commands the bells be rung to alert all of the beginning of the season. I like the way it pulls the reader into the poem expecting the joyful sounds of the bells to be heard through your words.

Further Impressions:


Your Acrostic was based on the "Silver Bells" prompt. You did a magnificent job of blending the lines while painting a beautiful picture of jubilant believers in the celebration of the birth of Jesus Christ.

*PaintBrush* I like that the first letter of each line is placed in bold type and the words Silver Bells pops out clearly.

Your poem flows with ease like a sweet melody of the season.

Parting Thoughts:

I saw nothing out of place to disturb the read and imagery of the joyous bells ringing in praise.

Conclusion:

Good use of the prompt. Nicely crafted lines. *Bell*

Well done!

Until next time--write on! *Star*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Penelope Moonbeam
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Winter Wonderland as your prompt. My thoughts went to cool crisp, linen-like snow upon the ground. All things winter and stunningly beautiful.

Further Thoughts:

You did paint a magical picture of winter beauty with your poem.

Words I loved:

Radiant Glistening, Rolling hills, Laughing children ... This made it all come to life. Lovely! *Delight*

Observations:

"Deer will wonder (wander) about the field"

You need a space between Radiant, and glistening.


Conclusion:


You made winter beautiful with your poem!

Well done! *Snow3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Bah Humbug  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello there, THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December. *Delight*

First Impression:

Oh, my -- Bah Humbug was the prompt chosen. I was preparing for the humbug to shine through the lines with some Grinch-like sort of poetry. Boy was I wrong! *Shock2* So happy I was wrong. This was such a creative use of that prompt.


Further Impressions:


This acrostic was beautifully written. It was smooth and reverent. I loved how you wove in the true Christmas spirit with the title you chose. Not easy to pull that off!


Parting Thoughts:

Your poem was a joy to read, Very lyrical! It was a song within itself. Loved that, and the twist that turned Bah Humbug into Oh beautiful night of holy birth -- the miracle that is Christmas.

Conclusion:


Awesome use of the prompt! *Star*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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Review of Star of the Night  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, KnightScribe
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering Holiday Rush, December Acrostic poetry contest! *Bigsmile*

My Thoughts:

*StarB* Sweet as a whisper
*Star* Gentle as a spiritual breeze
*Angel*All the love could be felt through these lines.

My Surprise:


I loved how you took the song Silver Bells, a relatively benign carol heard throughout the season, yet this one brought the reader right into Bethlehem to see the babe in the manger and the glory that surrounded the birth.

You made it about the light and joy of Christmas.

Parting Thoughts:

The acrostic lines flowed like a melody. Perfect song to pen your acrostic. It really worked out well.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done. Each line told the story. And, it did so effortlessly. *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*













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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Steph!
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

My Thoughts:
This was a fun and relaxing word search. It took my mind away from other stuff that needed to be forgotten as Christmas approaches.

The Last hold out:

Santa Baby was the last song title on the list to be found.

The solve level:

It was not too difficult and it made me sing while solving! *Music1*

Thanks for the fun and festive distraction! *Ha*

Happy Holidays!
WebWitch *Witch*
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Review of Awaiting Sleep  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello there, Schnujo is in the Falklands
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#444444 by Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH
Review!

I came across this little delight while perusing your portfolio.

I notice the words in bold which must have been part of the contest prompt. You weave those word with purposeful fluidity. They fit within the lines without appearing forced. I hate when that happens! *Laugh*

I can relate to an overactive brain at night pushing away the Sandman. *Yawn*


I want to thank you for all your Public Reviews at The Witch's House recently. A little bonus is included since it's over two weeks.

Keep on writing from the heart as you've done with this poem. I loved it, and I can relate with the words used within the lines.

Good job! *ThumbsUpGreen*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Webbie


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello there The Puppet Master

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our October, Something Horror Quotation Prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Intriguing Title and brief description pull the reader into the story. *CheckGr*

The opening of the story solidifies that the character has a ghost living in his head.

Further Thoughts:

The character has a struggle with Bruno, the name he gave to the ghost living in his head.

You've chosen the prompt quote: "If a man harbors any sort of fear, it percolates through all his thinking, damages his personality, makes him landlord to a ghost."
- Lloyd C. Douglas

This story definitely meshes well with the quote. *CheckO*

There is real struggle of mind vs ghost in this story. The character is overrun with guilt that he will somehow kill people through illness, even though he tested negative. Bruno torments him that it's not good enough.

*Broom* I love the psychological struggle with the character. He has fallen through the holes from the fear he indeed harbors in mind and spirit. The ghost always wins in this struggle which makes him feel doomed against ridding himself of Bruno. Mentally disturbed beyond words, he tries and fails to knock out the unwanted, uninvited ghost of doom and gloom.

Observations:

I liked the story. It has that psychological thriller effect. However, I wish there were more about the character and what led to the Bruno in his brain. I want to know where he was at the time.

Conclusion:

Great use of the prompt. Rules followed, word count included. *ThumbsUpGreen*


Good job! *Web1**Web2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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