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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Thank you for entering the June Quotation Inspiration Prompt! *Bigsmile*




Initial Impressions:

The title is strong and a good segue to weave the quotation prompt into the story.


Further Impressions:

My heart went out to this young girl having lost two years of her life in a coma.


Observations:


“Of course, he isn’t. I think you could simply say, "Of "No, he's not not" or "he isn't." I'm trying to imagine a 10-year old responding that way. with the "Of course" it just doesn't seem to fit a child's speech.


Further Observations:

I have to be honest, I found the layout of the story to be a bit disjointed. It seems as if she suffered a coma two times in her life, the way it's written.

First time is when she played ball with the kids on the beach and mentioned she wasn't new to the neighborhood but had been in a coma for a couple or so years, thus hadn't met the kids in the area, before this day.


Then, her father demands she return home and rest. She's mad of course, goes home, her mom speaks with her, although the reader really doesn't know if or how she wa able to reach her emotionally.

Next, we find out she collapses in her bedroom not long after her mother left the room. She was evidently on Face Time with a friend online who had no idea why the girl fell to the floor.

It is then we find out she is rushed to the hospital and placed into a medical coma because of a serious health issue, which the reader is never given the details of the illness.



Character Development:

Tina is more of a tell rather than show, person. She tells her friends about her coma,but no reason why the coma. She tells her father she hates him, yet we don't know what he's been through from her coma and why she's holding a grudge.


Tina's parents, especially her father to be kind of cool. Not the warm and loving type. Since the reader has no idea of what her illness is, yet she managed to go out on the beach to play -- it's baffling that if it were that dire, she wouldn't be allowed to leave the house. *Confused*

I found her father to be somewhat cold in his interactions with his daughter And her mother to be unemotional toward Tina's plight. She sort of talks at her rather than talking to her.


Parting Thoughts:


This story has fine potential, it just has to be unraveled and written a bit tighter while answering some of the above queries.


Perhaps a bit editing when the contest is done with judging would be beneficial, if not for unraveling this potentially good story, but as practice for contests that have a strict word count. You want to pull the readers into the story and keep them interested and focused until the conclusion.

This one needs a bit of work, but it does have potential.


What I liked:


I liked the caring characters who were dedicated to visiting her in the hospital. That show true camaraderie amongst friends. That was a wonderful part of the story. Hopefully, you will rework the story and give them more attention about being at her bedside during her coma.


Thanks again for entering the contest. *Cool*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Ghosts of Summer  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Graham Muad'dib

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Initial Impressions:


Your title is haunting to say the least. I was looking forward to reading this story. Good hook!

Further Impressions:


Your story is told in First Person narrative. The reader never knows her name, but she tells a story about her mother and her sister Lacie. It is a tragic story that tugs at the reader's heart.


Observations:


I'm at the hospice, watching my mother breath[e] through tubes.

Why doesn't me[she] look into my eyes, and smile, and laugh because she knows Lacie is filching her gladioli?

I would watch her splash into the water and see it turn her hair go from blonde to dark while she laughed.


Parting Thoughts:


Good use of the quotation prompt. *Check*

*Penw* You have a strong story about the life and times of the narrator. You do a good job wrapping up the story within the word count allowance. Some parts were a bit "tell" rather than setting up scenes to "show. However, it was not overrun with "I's" in the narration. That's difficult to do as you may well know.

Conclusion:

The ending was touching. Although I must admit I knew that after the first couple paragraphs. *Wink* I have an instinct about these thing. :laugh}

Could have used an extra read to catch those little grammatical errors, but all in all -- Good Job! *SuitDiamond*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Sommeren  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Thank you for entering the June Quotation Inspiration Prompt! *Bigsmile*



Initial Impressions:

Your brief description prepared me for a beautiful visit to Central Norway. I know you have traveled extensively from reading your blogs, so I was anxious to delve right into this story. I was not disappointed. *Smile*

Further Impressions:

I was there, right among the snowfields of Central Norway. Your descriptions were spot on for making your reader visualize the beauty, the scents and the majesty of the glacial melts merging into the waters tinting them with a touch of green. Simply gorgeous.

I saw the white moth orchid and gathered cloud berries., watched the birds capture the insects. You paint a beautiful scene.*Paintbrush*


Of course the story does not come with a deep sadness as anything indicating one's last time to celebrate a part of the year.

Observations:

The Quotation prompt definitely called to your muse in special way.

I found no grammar errors that jumped out at me.

The story is neat and crisp, as well as tightly written.

Conclusion:


The ending of course was bittersweet as it would be. Yet it is Sussan's attitude and love for living each day to the fullest that makes it more joyful at the end.

She planned it out and even though pressured to come home, stayed where her heart's most beautiful prayers were answered.

Good job! *Snow3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there, Anna Marie Carlson
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My Initial Impressions:

My curiosity is piqued from the title! *CheckY*


The Top Characters:


Donathan & Sweetie (plus interloper, Sheena)


What I liked:

*CheckO* Interesting names for the towns (quite unique)
*CheckGr* Lovable couple who followed their faith (strong character and united in a bond of faith)
*CheckP* Handled the problem with Sheena, and maintained a bond of trust.

Observations:

Sentence layout: grammar issues, could use a bit of editing. *Pencil*

Story's Flow: The story was wrapped-up too soon. The reader never knows what happened with Sheena that night and what the confrontation between Donathan and Sheena when he found her visiting his wife. *QuestionR*

*PointRight* This is a story that could use some tightening up on the top-heavy beginning and middle of the story which would loosen up some word count to make the ending flow more naturally. It seems to be wrapped-up in a hurry because you were running out of the word count allowance. Many parts not necessary to the relationship of the couple could have be left out.


Rules followed:


*BulletP* Quote was used and interpreted through this love story.
*BulletB* Word Count kept within requirement.


Parting Thoughts:

This is a sweet love story in the making. The reader would like to feel a relationship with the characters, but there needs to be more development in that area.

I think with a bit more editing, and without a word count restraint, you could continue the life and times of Sweetie and Donathan's love. *InLove2*


Thanks again for entering the contest.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there Sumojo
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest. Thank you for entering the annual Blog/Journal contest in June. *Bigsmile*

It was good to read that you chose this contest to pick up blogging again outside your regular blog-challenges in the past. We are so happy to see that the blogging muse is awakened during the Bard's annual contest for the month of June. *Proud*

My Thoughts and Comments as I read through your entries...


Life in Perth, Western Australia:


Loved that you, your hubby and dog Lucy stop for coffee an da huge muffin -- which all three of you share. Adorable picture in my mind's eye!

Reading Group Fun with Elephants:


I laughed at the thought of having to find a spot for a huge elephant print. Don't you just love it when others want to decorate our homes? *Elephant* No worries, your secret is safe with me. I've had similar things happen in my life. I sure hope that the gifter of the print doesn't insist on dropping by to see how the elephant's doing.

Seeing Life Through Different Glasses:

It's always difficult adjusting to change. I only wear reading glasses, but must admit the glasses have grown in thickness over the years. I remember when a pair of 125's was all I needed. Hmmm, I think that was six magnification-levels ago! *Laugh* You bring your reader right into focus with your amusing description of the shock of seeing yourself under bright lights with glasses that are higher in magnification. I can't even stand trying on a pair of reading glasses in a drug store with the mirror and cold fluorescent lights overhead. You describe the plight perfectly. But you know what? At least your hubby thinks you look sophisticated --that's as good as it gets. I think we are more super critical of ourselves than we appear to others.

Kindness is Alive and Well:


I really liked this one. I so believe that most of us have an innate kindness. It seems perfectly natural to reach out to someone who is in need. Perhaps a retired veteran or an elderly person who needs something picked up at the grocery store. There are many such occasions that pop-up in one's life. And there lies the opportunity to step forward or turn your back. I'd like to believe I'd be stepping up to the task more often than not.



Let Children be Children:


The entry on sexualizing kids at a younger age is so harmful to their development. I agree that it makes a normal romantic relationship problematic once they have reached adulthood. Sexing-up can wait until the brain has reached a certain maturity. I know it's the "fashionable" thing to do these days under the guise of "education" but what's the rush? What's the fear in just letting children be children and keep their innocence longer? Asking for a friend. *Think*


Congratulations on the great-granchild to be or here already! I hope the baby did arrive on your birthday --happy belated birthday, BTW. *CakeB* Boy or girl? *BabyGirl* *BabyGirl* How exciting it must be!

Keeping Positive Thoughts:

I hope your husband's medical test came out better than expected, and the both of you are enjoying being great-grandparents .

Conclusion:


Your Blog was filled with everyday life and busyness that takes a reader on an adventure -- like a safari with a giant elephant blocking the road! *Laugh* Or in your case, the elephant in the room, on the wall.


Thank you for inviting us into your world in June!

Until next time--blog on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Prosperous Snow Valentine
This is a {bitem:army:review} *Angelic*


I am also reviewing your blog as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the annual Blog/Journal contest in June. *Bigsmile*

There are so many points you make in each entry. I find them to be encouraging, motivating, and educational. You place a high emphasis upon one's faith and trust in God. Also, having faith should elevate our strength in practicing the spiritual goodness everyday of our lives.


Highlighted Points:


*CheckP* Loved the haunted house entry. (Fun story to read)

*CheckO* The Insomnia short story hits a note (Been there, done that!)

*CheckY* The test of faith (You live it rather than preach it. Actions speak louder than words.)

*CheckR* Beautiful poetry woven within. (Very inspiring and lovely rhythm)

*Check* Love the Nightingale entry! (I love birdwatching, and feeding them and listening to their beautiful songs.)

*CheckGr* You did a beautiful job discussing the social issue prompt, entry.


Well done! *Butterfly2Y*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of Dragon Daughter  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Tileira
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our annual Blog/Journal month of June contest! *Bigsmile*

I'm just going to list my likes:

*BulletB* I enjoyed reading through your entries with all the helpful hints and words of wisdom to help others reorganize their own world. You lay out steps for recycling, storage and household cleaning made easier.

*EggO* liked the recipe you shared,It made me hungry! And I liked the fact that you enjoy cooking--so do I. *Ha*

*Butterfly2P* You have a warm and caring personality. You even worry about your former roommate's ability to handle living on his own. You are dedicated to your sweetie, and try to make better in your little circle.

*CheckR* I even read beyond the 10 entries that were required and was glad I did. The information on taking care of one's own healthy lifestyle choices and to take more responsibility is wonderful advice.

*Jamming* You are definitely a positive message sharer as well as a wonderful organizer. *Bigsmile*

Thanks again for entering the contest.

Until next time--blog on! *Quill*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Jeannie
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your blog as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest. Thank you for entering our annual June blog/journal contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

*InLove* I loved that the Bard's Hall contest got you blogging again. We love it when a journal is started because of our June prompt. {Reading your brief description tells us that we are in for a e:delight}


Further Impressions:


*Bee* You have a lovely variety woven within each of your entries from issues facing our country, to your children and grandchildren. What a difficult time it is to be raising children with all that's going on with the schools, the border and CRT being forced upon the innocent minds of the youth. What innocence there is left with everything else being shoveled into the brains. How about an actual education with reading, cursive writing and computation skills? Anyway, I digress. *RollEyes*

I thoroughly enjoyed your recipes and the little quotes left at the bottom of each entry to further highlight parts of life.

Parting Thoughts:


You blend the need for humor in everyday life. Without humor, we become dull and bitter being bogged down in life's little irritations. Don't sweat the small, stuff, right? *Ha*

Love your gardening experiences. Nothing like the freshness of home-grown veggies! *Eggplant*

Conclusion:

Interesting, engaging and informative blog!

Good job! *SuitDiamond*

Until next time--blog on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*















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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there Elisa the Bunny Stik
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest. Thank you for entering our annual June Blog/Journaling contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:


The brief description just draws a reader in. Fictiitious and delicious! *Cool*

Further Impressions:

You have covered so many topics in your blog, from character development, to stories involving the characters and their concerns over social norms and some injustices which are covered in community meetings.

As mentioned in the brief description, the Spiral Bound Journal is fictitious and not a day in the life of the author.

Observations:

I found the writing to be clear of any grammar/spelling errors.

What I liked:

I liked the thoroughness of Felicia doing a roadmap for better learning. It felt like I was there in "class." Very realistic.

All the characters in the potential book were well-developed over the entries.

What I would have liked Added?

I would have liked some more personal additions following an entry. Something like A day in the life of Stik. Independent of the novel being penned. I guess something outside the fictitious journaling.

Parting Thoughts:


Despite wanting more about the life of Stik, the Spiral Bound Journal was filled with so many interesting looks into the lives of these characters. You have a fine outline going forward as this book develops.

Kudos! *Ha*

Thanks again for entering the contest! You did a unique job of bringing many lives in society to the forefront.

Until next time--blog on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*










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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD
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Initial Thoughts:

Beautifully done tribute to Juneteenth. It has now officially become and American holiday. Your poem is smooth yet it pulls the reader into wake-up mode. We are as a society trapped by consumerism. How many of those toys or appliances are made through slave labor? I'm willing to bet more than we can imagine.

Further Impressions:

Loved the refrain:

"Juneteenth, Juneteenth, we cry
When slavery ended!"


Parting Thoughts:

You took the challenge at "The WDC Angel Army and not only reviewed a Juneteenth poem but wrote on yourself. You have gone above and beyond in the month of June.

Great job! *Clap*

Until next time--write on and Review on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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Review of GYP  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Newbie!

Welcome to WDC. *Wave*
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random REad & Review!

Very interesting voyage through your mind's battle with the darker side of life. Depression can be very draining leaving one feeling hopeless.

Your prose covers the feelings quite clearly.

Observations:


Probably would be better to capitalize your "i's" Won't be so distracting to the reader, plus it is a short work, thus appears more distracting at first glance.

Don't want to lose readers before they even read your item.

Further Thoughts:


The words you use are very powerful. They have impact that a reader will remember long after leaving the page.

Well done!


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of Matters of Heart  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there jaya
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Historical Fiction month in May! *Bigsmile*

My Thoughts:

You did a lovely job bringing the reader right into Lady Elizabeth's manor. The characters were easy to picture, the setting well-described and the love blooming in that setting was believable. The characters were likeable.

My Observations:


Chandlers {[Chandeliers] brightened the hall.

He took her hand led her to the dining hall and together had dinner the waiting for them.

Before retiring for the night, Lady Liz said,... While they were walking in the lawns that evening, she gathered courage and told her plans to Lady Liz. The Lady Liz" sounds too informal since she has been name Lady Elizabeth throughout the story. Also, I believe staff would not address her so casually.


Her father believed in her leaving her to make her decisions.

Suggestions:

I'd like for there to have been more time that passed before Elizabeth was back up on her feet. I understand physical therapy works wonders, but even in these days, it's not always so quick to improve. Although, I imagine more visits today means more insurance billing, so what would be the hurry to heal quickly? *Thinker*


Parting Thoughts:

I liked the story and the fact that I felt as if I were there back in an historical era where good manners were ever present and civilized treatment was shown to one who was really an employee of the Lady of the House. She was welcome to dine with her and her son.

Ann showed much strength of character, and, it was no wonder that Christopher fell in love with her.

Afterthought:


"Lounging on a settee was an elderly lady of about sixty."
*Shock2* Perhaps "60" in regular human years is "elderly" but certainly not in "Witch Years." *Ha*






Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review!*Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

It's a reminder of a fateful day during WWI. Lives were lost, there, yet the photo appears to be reverent, serene and surrounded by gleaming beauty as the sun awakens for the day. The pinkish hues of twilight's last gleam as the sun rises.

The peaceful view hides the secret of what happened there. Yet, the memories will never fade.


The Haiku:

Not the traditional 5-7-5 Haiku. Beautiful nevertheless with its strength of remembrance. The symbolism really stands out. It is in one respect a place where the fallen lie, yet they are surrounded by peaceful beauty.

Heartbreaking yet beautiful at the same time. *AwarenessW*

Well done! *Salute*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Review of Leaving  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, PiriPica
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I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*


Photo:

The photo shows the leaf in decay, it's time for spring to take its place with new life as shown with the dandelion. The colors and the decay surrounding the dandelion paint a perfect picture of end of life-cycle for the leaf and the beginning for the brilliant yellow weed.

Beautiful contrast!
The photo tells a complete story. Creative use of a common weed and the leftover leaf from another season.


Haiku:


I'll start with the title. Great teaser to pull the reader into the poem. *LeafBr*

*FlowerY* It works magically with the photo and Haiku. "Leaving." My mind pictures leaf, leaves -- leaving. Clever play on words! It is indeed time for the leaf to make room for the rebirth of nature.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 Haiku


Classy Style:

*Quill* Love the Sibilance: "sigh, supine, shift sublime."

*Target2* Strong word choices [supine, sublime] make this simple 3-lined classic involving nature pop-out for the reader! Big plus!!!

You did a remarkable job with the photo portraying such simplicity and the poetry complementing it brilliantly. It's well-crafted all the way through.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, The Puppet Master
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Your photo brings the action of the sea to life with the dolphins diving in play, or in search of scrambling up some seafood for dinner. *Dolphin*

I loved to watch porpoises following the ferry in Texas, and the dolphins teaching their young ones how to fish in Florida. They'd come so close to the shore. They are amazing to watch and this photo brings me there, right up close and personal. It's well-defined, lighting balances the contrast of colors with the dark grey dolphins, the gorgeous blue sea and the white foam left in their flipper-tracks.

The Haiku:

The poetry paints the story to go along with the picture. It describes the action as well as the mood. Sunny California plays off the ocean with its brilliance making the reader feel surrounded by the sunshine picturing the dolphins at play or hunt whichever it may be when this photo was taken. Words and photo are totally in sync.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 syllable Haiku. *CheckGr*

Suggestion:

If I had one suggestion to make it would be to have some ordinary words used to describe the event and replace with some words that leave an impact with the reader at the end of the verse.

For example: "Jumping through the air," TRY: [Leaping through the surf]
(Puts the reader right into the seascape where the dolphins live.)

Just one little example. Jump is more common, whereas leap has a sense of purpose -- or porpoise. *Laugh*

All-in-all:

*Wave1* Gorgeous photo, perfect nature shot of playful dolphins!

Haiku in true form meshes together neatly with the image *CheckY*

Well done! *ScallopB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Review of Fyn Wave  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, fyn
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


What a great capture of the whale showing itself up close and personal! It presents with the power of nature,a mammal which commands attention with its large size and ability to take on the force of the unpredictable sea. It keeps reminding us that it is a formidable creature indeed!

The Haiku:

You used the traditional syllable count 5-7-5 within the three lines.

*CheckY* Words chosen are strong -- "whale" "waved." Clever! It keeps the reader focused on the sea and sea creature. The word "wave" applies to the ocean itself with its waves. And the act of a whale waving for the picture -- priceless! *Bigsmile*

*PointRight* And, may I add a little play on words, here? "Fyn -- sounds like "fin" again returning the mind's eye to the sea where fins are in their natural element guiding the fish that wear them! *FishB*

This was a great combination of photo and poem. And well-constructed use of words to play with the reader's imagination. *Whale1*

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall ContestThank you for entering our April Original Photo and Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Whether it be the dawning of a new day or nearing the end, the sweet pastels paint the sky as is seen in this photo. The trees lie within the shadows awaiting more light to bring forth their color. There is such warmth and serenity captured in this photo. *Paintbrush*

The Haiku:

The words describe the handiwork of our Creator. It's a perfection woven into each day that is a gift to all whose eyes behold it.

Style:

This would not be called a "Traditional" Haiku, as it is not the usual 5-7-5 syllable count.

This poem's style is 5-10-6 syllables within the three lines. It is a different/modern Haiku.

Result:

The words and photo blend nicely to produce the imagery in the reader's imagination.

Well done!

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our April, Original Photo and Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Ahh, this one got me! I so enjoy watching nature and the surprises that may result. Here, the moth gets caught between the window and the screen. It seemed quite unbothered by your removing of the screen and using the tape measure to make that moth pop for the viewer's mind's eye. It brings it to life more because both nature and man-made items blend together in an odd, yet serene way. I really like that! *Delight*

The Haiku:

*InLove2* Loved these descriptive words:

Midnight wind
Heart pounding
Trapped


These are strong, well chosen words to fit within the total picture of the scene.

Form:


Traditional 5-7-5 syllabic count Haiku. *CheckY*

*Yinyang* Perfectly complementing the photo. They are companions of the creative juices of the muse brought to life.

Lovely imagery produced by the combination of the two! *Infinity*

Well done! *Butterfly2O*

Until next time--write on!

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

This is too, funny, Jody. I'm really trying to picture you on the route doing the job. Did you watch "Dirty Jobs" years ago? Although I must admit I was quite close to a garbage pickup person many years ago. The hours were great, he stated as the job was completed early enough in the day to head to a bar. *Rolleyes* Ah, youth! That relationship did not last long. Not because of the garbage man stuff but because of the bar stuff. *Laugh*

I read your author's note that this profession did not come true, but rather, it was desired throughout childhood. You were a tomboy, too, I take it? So was I -- I think I still am! *Rolling*

*Rabbit2* Your story was well-written, and filled with imagery. You made it real as if it were indeed a non-fiction. I admire your spunk and independent choice of professions from a young age. My daughter wanted to be a mortician. Hey, some-body has got to do it!


Observation:

I remember them talking to be to me about various jobs--Didn't I want to be a teacher?

This was a fun read, and neither one of us had to get our hands dirty. *Ha*

Good job!*Trash*

Until next time--write on!

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

First Impressions:

*LeafG* Falling drops of water and leaves make a glorious backdrop for poetry. So much can be visualized through this image that it reminiscent of one's life and times.

Further Impressions:

*GemV* The metaphor of the water drop collects into another drop merging as one, and love relationships make it meld beautifully. You brought the reader up close and personal by bringing fond memories of days of youth.

Parting Thoughts:

*PaintBrush* Lovely imagery with well-woven words that fit together perfectly into the tapestry of this poem. It is nature and love, beginning and end. It is life itself.

Well-done! *Leaf2G*

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our dialogue with an invisible entity prompt in March. *Shamrock*

Initial Thoughts:

The plot was set up quickly as the reader is taken to the Irish pub on St. Patrick's day. One patron seeks an empty stool at a table where another patron sat. He was told the seat was saved for a friend. That patron found a seat another spot over and began hearing a dialogue between that patron and , well, nobody visible! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:

The patrons were quite curious about the disembodied voice being heard at a table where only one patron was sitting. It became a full pub curiosity as others wondered if the strange voice was from the seat-saving friend, Dylan, who may have been a ventriloquists. By then the drinks were flowing pretty quickly on this special night.
Annie the barmaid, delivered drinks to that table and heard the disembodied voice speak of her loveliness, and that she'll have men lined up outside the door awaiting a date with her.

Odd Happenings:

Magic happens as what the invisible voice predicted was happening to Annie right at that moment. Annie began to sense he was something quite special, but wondered why he could not be seen if he's so magical.

Mystery Solved:

Annie, is told by his friend Dylan, the story of the beginning of the end of his friend's visibility. *Ghost*

Parting Thoughts:

Humorous!!! I loved the conclusion that wrapped that night up at the Irish pub with fun and a big "Aha!" moment. *Laugh* It only took a hundred years to figure it out. But then, all good things come to those who wait! *Rolling*

Conclusion:


One or two quotation mishaps, but otherwise a fun, quick and very quirky story. You followed the tough prompt easily and made it your own. You added the humor and it fit with the substance of the tale.

Fine entertainment! *Glass3*

Until next time--write on!

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

I knew I was entering a world, another world, a world where trees glow.

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the slow build-up of the mystery as the trees were being examined by taking a bit of bark scrapings. Nothing could be found out as each new vial was used to gather information. Seth was a fine partner in the paranormal experience as he did his best to control his nervousness while Jim did the bark-scrapings. The trees glowed, but nothing gave them a hint of where the glow was coming from. Until ... *BareTree2*


Observation:

Seth's is simply wondering if the trees are going to suddenly come to life and eat them. [Seth is OR Seth's simply wondering]

Loved this Part!

"And warmth can mean life and the last thing he wanted was to make a tree angry by copping a feel without asking."

*Rolling*! I loved that unexpected bit of humor amid the tense moments.


Parting Thoughts:


Just as the reader felt secure to go back into the forest ... *Shock2*

*Mountains* Yes, this was a cliffhanger. It would have been unexpected had it not been stated in the brief description. But then, nothing says paranormal better than trees all aglow and the picture of Jim's eyes growing wide. Poor Seth, hope he decided the right option.

Well done
, and a fun read! *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

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I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page looking for an amusing piece that would fit within my Comedy Newsletter theme. Since the Newsletter is due out tomorrow, 3/17, I wanted a couple St Paddy's day items to highlight. Yours will be one. *Ha*

Initial Impressions:

Someone is going to explain what St. Patrick's Day is all about to aliens. Now I knew it would be amusing, and anxiously read on! *Shamrock*

Further Thoughts:


O'Sullivan actually blasted off to outer space to land on another planet and bring all of his knowledge about St. Patrick, Christianity, parades, and all things green to the inhabitants. He did a fine job in the explaining department.

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem flowed smoothly and rhymed just right. *Rolling* I enjoyed the transformation of the aliens. They really got the St. Patrick's Day spirit and even began to dance arm in arm while turning from their alien-grey skin color to bright green! *AlienG*

Conclusion:


Well done! And ,lots of fun to picture in my mind's eye. Yup, it will be highlighted on the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

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I'm also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page. *Bigsmile*

*Rolling* Oh, my, this is so funny! I could picture the whole baby delivery drama with a husband who let's just say, has a weak stomach around blood.

Birthing is not without some messy stuff happening. And, yes, years ago the husband always remained outside the delivery room process and anxiously waited in a room with other dads wondering if they would be the dad of a girl or a boy. Yeah, they weren't doing sonograms back then! It truly was a mystery until the actual birth.

I congratulate your hubby for lasting it out and even being convinced to cut the cord. *Laugh*

*BabyGirl* I am highlighting this story in the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. It falls with the theme of deliveries -- although not quite the same type of delivery, but humorous enough to have its spot in the newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

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I am also reviewing your it because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

The Hands of Time:

Your title and brief description made me want to read the poem and see just where time would take me.

Minutes Pass:

You hit an interesting topic about clock watching. I know it's easy to feel like time has seemed to slow down or even stop momentarily. It seems we can drift off into a world totally unrelated to the clock. It's as if the digits turn and we are lost in thoughts and surprised to find that ten minutes have already passed. I get tuned into time when it's close to 11:11. I am always reminded of my mother at that time. She loved 11:11! I try to watch for it and spend a minute talking to her
and remembering beautiful times. Then I realize that 11:09 is now 11:13 and I totally missed her favorite time. It makes me a little upset that I drifted away in my mind rather than spending that special minute with her memory. Then I realize that I was already thinking about her and enjoying fond memories while the minutes rolled on.

Time's Gears:

Gears of time keep moving forward. Your poem brought in the sense of time from a clock watcher's point of view. Your free verse poem moved along as rhythmically as hands on a clock. I found no gear-grinding nor batter hiccup along the way. It is a poem that makes one stop and think and realize others do look at time but sometimes don't see that which is right in the face of the clock. Whatever the reason there is a time loss, time stops for no one.

Wake Up:

In the end, time is infinite. It is both calming and nerve-wracking depending on what is to be done at a certain time. The fact is, whether time is forgotten or set to an alarm, it continues whether we watch it or not.

I'm Off the Clock:


I do enjoy your poetry. Some really make me stop and think. They have a philosophical feel about them. *Thinker*

So all I can say is ... Well done! *Clock*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*





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