|Hi, The Puppet Master ,
I found your story at your own request.
An interesting supernatural story with a twist. I liked it a lot and think it has great potential to be an even better story. Because there were a few things that bothered me while reading this tale about Violet with a crush on Stan, her supervisor. She is killed in a car crash and keeps haunting Stan. With the help of a Pastor the story has a happy ending.
First of all something to do with writing techniques, namely your choice of Point of View. The POVs in this story keep shifting from Violet to Stan, back to Violet, to Stan, to Pastor Quinn and back to Violet. It is kind of muddy and distracting from the content of the story. If you don't choose an omniscent POV but want to shift your point of view during the course of the story perhaps you can make changes in the layout of the story? Either by making different paragraphs, adding blank lines in between or start the new sentence with 4 capital words so the reader is aware there is something shifting. Just a thought!
The other thing that kept distracting me from the content was the psychology of two of the characters, namely Violet's and Pastor Quinn's.
Violet has a crush on Stan, that's what you want me to believe. But the crush has to be bigger and deeper than I can read now in your story. Her passion is so great that she haunts him after death. That's huge. It would be more believable if you added some of that passion before she died so it would be more believable she would haunt him after death.
The other character Pastor Quinn has to be believable so he would do a sort of reversed exorcism, instead of taking the spirit out of a body, putting the spirit into a body (of an animal). Perhaps you can add something more to his thought process that will explain why he believes in ghosts and reversed exorcism?
Anyway, those were the distracting thoughts that kept me from diving into the story. And this story deserves to be told because it is an interesting one.
Although it's only one opinion of one reader I hope you will consider these remarks.
Thanks for sharing, keep on writing,