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I try to find the WOW factor in the writings of my choice. #19 on the Public Reviewers list June 2016. #29 Public Reviewer July 2016. #10 Public Reviewer August 2016. Newbies Academy Reviewing Classroom, Winner in June 2016. First Place The Newbie Academy Review Contest June 2016. Second Place in "The Newbie Academy Review Contest " July and Aug 2016. #9 Public Reviewer Sept 2016.#20 Public Reviewer Oct 2016. First place in "The Newbie Academy Review Contest" November 2016.#22 Public Reviewer Nov 2016.#36 Public Reviewer Feb 2017.#67 Public Reviewer March 2017.#56 Public Reviewer July 2017.#41 Public Reviewer Aug 2017. #77 Public Reviewer Oct 2017. #53 Public Reviewer Nov 2017. #53 Public Reviewer Dec 2017.#96 Public Reviewer Sept 2018
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Review of The FPDAFHC2054  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Hi Whitemorn ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Intriguing title, I guessed some device from the future. Byline left me guessing indeed. But I wanted to read on.

General impressions
A funny little tale with a twist. Very well told, good structure, descriptions, and flow. Appealing writing style.

Favorite Parts
After reading the quick start guide, Butch carefully unzipped the long black bag which had been placed in specially made foam shipping supports. His eyes lit up like a child's on Christmas morning as he looked down on his lovely new product. He had ordered the Cameron Diaz face because he loved her gigantic smile. There were a variety of faces available and voice packs to match or modify if a person wanted. I mean you could order Katie Perry's face and have Edith Bunker's voice if you wanted to.

Funny!

Suggestions
If you look at the write again you should notice some commas are missing. Corny perhaps, but it takes the reader out of the flow of the story. Perhaps you could download Grammarly, this program does that sort of thing for you. Very convenient. And it's free!

There is no need for that last line at the end, you could easily end the story with the android's words.

Final thoughts
Great story with a good feel to it. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of Potato Queen  
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Hi Tina Stone , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Funny title for a funny story. I only am in the loop to what you mean by "in the spirit of the month". I know nothing about farming or potatoes, perhaps August is Potato Month? Anyway, I wanted to read on.

General impressions
What a nice little anecdote this is. Super funny. You have an appealing writing style and your descriptions are vivid and well taken care of.

Favorite Parts
Then he tilts his head and says, "It's in the back of the truck, where do you want me to unload it?"

Unload it? I thought. I didn't even remember seeing anything in the truck. But then, the truck was taller than I was and I couldn't really see into it very well. I really wasn't sure how I was supposed to say to that. But he was looking at me expectantly, so I told him, "Anywhere that you want." I felt like it was a trick question of sorts.


It's the heart of the story.

Suggestions
No suggestions whatsoever. Grammar is fluent, style is very good. The pun is well developed. But whatever happened to the cowboy? Perhaps you could finish with the answer to that question? Just the one line in addition?

Final thoughts
A lovely story that actually happened. Non-fiction can be as far-fetched as fiction can be. Loved the story, thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Rated: E | (3.5)



Hi ribrookens1,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Nice title and since I am from the Netherlands myself, it caught my eye and I wanted to read further. You probably meant "find herself" in the byline?

General impressions
I like the story. Plot and character are well defined. But your writing style is somewhat chunky. It doesn't flow because of the structure of the sentences. Maybe you can have another look at that? I looked up that EmmaLane and it is 4 kilometers from the Anne Frank House, not three blocks. Perhaps you can change that?

Favorite Parts
I'm star(r)ing up at the ceiling trying to breathe. I actually took that plane. I actually used the passport that I have had locked in a safe for five years waiting to be used, whispering of the desire (to) travel but challenging the fear of traveling by myself.

Suggestions
Your sentences are somewhat difficult to read. It's the structure of the sentences that makes it flawed now and again. Perhaps if you look at the story again you can perhaps make shorter sentences with a better flow to the story? But hey, it's your first piece so there are lots of opportunities to adjust your writing.

Final thoughts
The content of the story is very admirable, but the way you structured your sentences can flourish with a closer look. Welcome to Writing.com, I hope you will enjoy everything on this site. *Bigsmile*

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Hi Odessa Molinari smiling , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Title and byline were okay, I thought nothing of it and began to read this flash fiction.


General impressions
Wow, what a lovely little tale this is. Taking care of my 86-year old stepmom at the moment in Corona time left me sympathizing with both your characters. It is a short and sweet tale and the ending was a great surprise. It nearly left me with tears in my eyes.


Favorite Parts
"Socks," Jason became hopeful, "No more socks." And here we go again. "And no aftershave. That stuff you got me stinks."

Great line, I envisioned Jason and his dad having this conversation in the middle of the livingroom in the nursing home.

Suggestions
No suggestions whatsoever. I find it wonderful how you manage to tell this rich en lovely tale with only 167 words.

Final thoughts
A lovely tale with bittersweet ending in minimum of words. Loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi G. Michael VanTassle ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

Before anything else: Welcome to Writing.com. I hope you find this place instrumental to get creative and to be stimulated in writing and reviewing. Especially during Corona time this is the place to be.

Your first piece here is very good. You are a master at grammar and stuff so that's out of the way. Nothing to add there. You have an appealing writing style, sentences are both short and long and there is definitely a good flow in your writing.

This is the first Covid19 induced piece I've read so far and I can relate very much. Times are awful, we feel confined at locked up and when we leave the house it's mostly for groceries. Everything else is on hold. A terrible situation. Especially in your country where the situation is really bad. But also in the Netherlands, where I am from, things look more and more gloomy. We suspect a second wave after the holidays and watch with horror what lack of responsibility the youth display. Social distancing is something more and more ignored even by adults. Terrible. Your anxiety about the whole situation is deeply felt throughout your writing. Very well done.

A blog-like piece about a writer in Coronatime. I hope this is not your last work and wish you well in your creative endeavors. Keep on writing and enjoy it! Stay safe!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, Ken...this is a great modern fable. I loved the lessons learned, the dynamics of the story, and the naughty twist. Lovely tale. You are a master at this. Fancy a book on fables? Are there more where this came from? I always get greedy when reading one of your tales. I want more, more! *Heart*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Joe , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

First and foremost...Welcome to Writing.com. A site where you can be the writer you want to be and surround yourself with other writers, big and small from all over the world. I hope you will learn to love this site as much as I do and read, review, and write at your heart's content. (At the top of your page is the Get-started link that will help you through some of the possibilities of the site).

I have read your first piece and I want to congratulate you. It's a very clear, heartfelt, and serious piece for yourself and others who are in the same environment as you are. I presume you are still inside, and that's hard. Your third term if I quote correctly. But everything inside yourself knows what direction to go. Out! and starting a new life with a new changed you. I wish you all the luck and strength in the world accomplishing that.

Inside you are a scholar, an expert ...use it to your advantage here. You can write whatever you want and let others judge you by what you have to offer, not by where you are at the moment. This could be a new beginning as a writer, who knows. You can certainly write fluently and you have a persuasive writing style that is appealing in your first work. I would love to see more of it. Fiction or non-fiction.

Anyway, you've taken the first step by coming out as a writer. I hope this is not your last work.

Enjoy writing, take care

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Rated: E | (4.5)



Hi Foxtrot Victor , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
The title is well-chosen and covers its content. A lovely flash fiction about a cat in the portal meadows before entering heaven? Lovely choice.

General impressions
A great little tale, very sweet and innocent. Perfect for children. I think this would do fine in a book with colored drawings: a children's book.

Favorite Parts
“Relax, kitten… We don’t do that here,” Angel says in a soft, calming voice. “In this meadow, there is no hate, suffering, hunger, or thirst. Here, you’ll receive only love from the other pets that await their human spirits before crossing into heaven.”


A lovely sweet twist to the story. This is a good place for animals to be. A message that kids will understand perfectly.

Suggestions
If you are an artist yourself draw those pictures to accompany this tale. It makes a perfect children's book. Big letters, a sentence or paragraph per page...you know the drill. Otherwise, find a friend to do it.

Final thoughts
A sweet and lovely tale of a small kitten with a handicap. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of Vessel  
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Rated: E | (3.0)



Hi rinsoxy , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

On Title/Subject
The title fits its content, the byline is an addition. Because I myself wanted to enter both contests as you did I was intrigued as to what you came up with. I have yet to write my story, but what kind of vessel did you use? I wanted to read.


General impressions
But, alas...I didn't find out. You left me flabbergasted. I have read your story twice and I came up empty. Sorry, dear but I didn't understand your story at all. It's probably because I am an ESL writer and not as familiarized with the English language as a native is, but I didn't understand the Presence inside the singer. Therefore I totally missed out on your story. Leaving me a bit at a loss in this review.

Favorite Parts
Storywise I am at a loss, not understanding what the Presence is, what it did to the singer, etc. What I can see is that you are an accomplished writer. Your lines are smooth and well developed. You obviously know how to write.

Suggestions
Can you be more specific about that Presence? At the beginning of the story, there must be a way to explain what it is or to be more descriptive.

Final thoughts
My loss and probably my fault, but I couldn't make heads nor tails of this story. But with a few adjustments, it's probably a good entry to both contests. I wish you all the best. And thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of MWA  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Hi Jolanh , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Can you think of another title or byline? Is it the first chapter of a longer story? MWA is of course covering its content but it's not an appealing title. You probably can come up with something better.

General impressions
Very good story. This is a great start to a fantasy of dwarfs, elves, and orcs. It's not childish but has a good vibe to it. You manage to put down great characters by wonderful names and put them in interesting situations. I love your writing style here. There is a combination of short and longer sentences but what's more important it flows in the right direction. No chunky style this time, it's smooth and descriptive. Your dialogs are very real, not more difficult than need be. I loved it.

Favorite Parts
The discussion between Drake and Rip. I saw the two creatures sitting in that parlor drinking ale. Very descriptive and good atmosphere.

Suggestions
Apart from looking again at your title, I feel the end of this chapter is missing. It ends too abruptly for me. Perhaps if you could come up with a line or two to finish this chapter? I am looking forward to reading the sequels. Are you planning on a longer story? I hope so.

Final thoughts
Great story. I loved the introductions of the different characters. It's obviously part of a sequel. Good writing style. *Wink*

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of Silverbolt #1  
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Hi Jolanh , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

On Title/Subject
Good suggestive title for this first chapter of your novel. It is explained on the first page that it's the name of the changed Ethan. An interesting subject for a fantasy.

General impressions
I had to read it twice before I got it right. Especially the part at the beginning where you introduce Ethan and immediately the story begins with his changing into something else or somebody larger than himself. Perhaps you can add a few lines to groom the reader into this changement. Now it is a sudden change and the reader is in it too fast. Slow down the story a bit in the beginning so you as a writer take your reader by the hand.

But, that said I found the story very captivating. You have a writing style that is chunky and not smooth so, I had to adjust to that and learn to like it. At the end of the story, I was familiarized with your style. It grew on me.

Favorite Parts
A closer look at the semi pious and downright bored faces of the assembly will show a young man squirming uncomfortably in his seat.

Very descriptive. I could see the congregation in the service before my mind's eye.

Suggestions
The first word of the story: It was a Sunday, ...

Read your story out loud. Are the sentences working with each other? Are your verbs the right tense? What is the reason some of your paragraphs feel chunky and not smooth? Is it your writing style or can you change some lines for better reading? Just some thoughts.

Final thoughts
An interesting chapter to a larger story. It's captivating enough to want to read more. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of Moving On  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Hi Carly , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Moving on is a very good title for this exquisite short story. The child is moving on in his life and the train is moving on to another destination. Great find.


General impressions
Wow, what a lovely story. Very well written, very vivid images and a good, intelligent flow. Your writing style is very appealing. It is a coming of age story and I loved reading it. Really appealing!


Favorite Parts
Even the hiss as it pulled into the station was a hush.

What a beauty of a sentence.

Suggestions
I know this a personal story where you changed genders for the main character, but if you treat this as fiction it can be part of a longer story. A coming of age story where we follow the boy into adulthood. I would love to read more.

Final thoughts
What a lovely story with good conversations and vivid images and a good tone. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)



Hi hullabaloo22 , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Mort is a good title with a twist. It's the name of the main character but also means 'death'. Since he is a mortuary assistant that made me giggle. Nice!


General impressions
A short but sweet story with a nice ending. The only thing is, it's not thrilling, nor is there any suspense. I am not sure why not since the context suggests otherwise.


Favorite Parts
Boby Parts Wanted!
Good price guaranteed.
All makes, all models,
big or small parts accepted.


It's the pun of the story.


Suggestions
If you look at the story again and would understand the mechanics of the story you probably find out why there is no suspense. Perhaps the story up to the point of the ad is just meandering without any real purpose? I am not sure.

It's very difficult to write a real suspense story or thriller. I find it hard also to just find the right parameters of a thrilling story. Thank you for your effort.


Final thoughts
A bit of a flat piece of writing with a good pun at the end. It's worth looking into again and add some more lines to pimp up the story.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Review of Lisa  
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Hi Jacky , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
This title didn't satisfy with this short story. It's the main character's name obviously but it didn't resonate as a good title. The content of the story is a short excerpt from the Life of Lisa with her parents.


General impressions
It read like the beginning of a story. I felt it wasn't finished. There's hardly a plot and the ending is dissatisfactory. I understand it's a short Daily Flash, but it has to stand on its own as a story with a beginning, middle, and end. There have to be some mechanics in it, I couldn't find it.


Favorite Parts
She gave it a C. They rated an F when the words really hurt, an A when it was short and they made up quickly.
I thought it was rather funny, Lisa grading the conversations of her parents.


Suggestions
Now the contest is over, perhaps you can use this piece as the first paragraphs of a larger short story where you dig more into the Life of Lisa.


Final thoughts
The beginning of a larger story. I would like to read more because you have an appealing writing style. Thanks for sharing.


Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hi S D Ballentyne , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Very good title and byline. As a critic of the man, I was immediately drawn into the story. I had to read this. Was it a follower of this American President or somebody with genuine doubts? I wanted to read to find out.


General impressions
Wow, what a great, great piece this is. I laughed out loud so many times I nearly forgot to write a review. I almost hear the man speak. You nailed him up to a tee. Very strong indeed. It's so funny!


Favorite Parts
Everything is really good. The tone, the way the intonations are, the repetition, the craziness, the content of his ramblings, I can actually hear him say those things for real, they resonate in my ear with his voice.


Suggestions
There was one thing, as an ESL writer from the Netherlands I didn't know the abbreviation PMT (something sexist I presume?).


Final thoughts
I am no fan of the man, sorry for that. If I see him on television, I turn down the volume or I switch channels. I really think he is very dangerous to the world and to the States. But this speech was so good! I loved reading it. Very well done!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



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Princess Megan Rose Alzheimer's or dementia is an awful disease, I totally agree. I am living for 4 months now during Corona time with my stepmom of 86 years old. She has no dementia, fortunately, but suffers real bad from her short term memory failure. She forgets a lot within minutes. But her core is the same, she is a lovely and positive lady with lots of love in her heart. I mustn't forget that when I find it sometimes difficult to cope with her and her memory loss. Lovely entry! *Bigsmile*

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Review of History For Keeps  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Cama Leigh , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

On Title/Subject
Strong title and subject. In these current times, it's pulling you into the poem. I love it when poets have a sense of history, I think it's their obligation to have an overview of things. Not many have so, this is a pleasant exception.

General impressions
Very strong and sensitive poem. It's in your face, confronting the reader with what's going on these days. I am from abroad (Europe) but this poem is speaking to us all. Very well done.

Favorite Parts
Culture wars burn bridges, as
riots crumble city streets.
Statues our Forefathers erected - in
the present, Mob rejected.


It gives a strong picture of people demonstrating for their rights, for their unlawful deaths, and at the same time riots and mobs who take advantage and turn things ugly. I only saw the footage on television about people all over the world (including in my own country) protesting against racism, the death of Floyd, and many other topics. Due to Corona, I wasn't one of them, but I sympathize deeply.

Suggestions
This topic deserves full footage and if you have inspiration please develop this poem into something bigger.

Final thoughts
A very strong and powerful poem that screams to be even larger in setup. I picture this poem been read out loud during a protest or manifestation.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive

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Review of Dear Me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)




Hi Bryce Kenn , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*

On Title/Subject
Dear Me letters are a great feature of Writing.Com every year. This letter covers 2015 which is 5 years, a long time ago. Can you still remember writing it, executing it?

General impressions
Short but sweet. I liked the way you addressed yourself in this Year of Awareness. What a great goal to be more aware of yourself, your emotions and consequently your writing.


Favorite Parts
The middle part where you describe specifics of your writing goals is interesting. That part where you describe the traps of procrastination I personally can relate to. Goals are easily made, to execute them is quite another matter. How did you do? Can you still remember?

Suggestions
If this letter is still part of your portfolio maybe you can add a line or two describing how you fulfilled these goals of 2015, or not. It would be a nice gesture to both yourself and your reader how you did.

Final thoughts
It was a good letter to yourself and I enjoyed reading it.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

Sunglasses and name

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Review by
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, First of all: thanks for sharing this highly personal story. I think it's great, very vivid, full of good descriptions. I love the way you manage to remember in such detail your past experiences. I am very much in love with your writing style, you switch from description to personal and back. Great resonance. It's a sad story, I feel the sadness seeping in every detail. From your subtitle, I now know why. I hope you find a fitting title. Every story needs one to attract more readers.
4 things to take into account:
* ..three whits (white?) steps...
* I didn't understand this sentence: I will hide it so well that I lose it forever...
* There is a double paragraph: "I found hospital bills...ziplock bag." If this is intentional, it doesn't work for me. Please lose it.
* Why is there no end? Although this may be part of a sequel it's important to have a beginning, a middle and an end in every piece. Maybe just the one sentence? It would make the write stronger I think.

All in all, you are an excellent writer. I loved reading it and say Good luck with your further endeavors. Take care.

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Review of The Road Ahead  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, jdarts

I found your plug in the Newsfeed and since you're new and it is your first over 150 word write I thought to take a look. *Bigsmile*

A lovely short but well written story. It's a little bit sad, but I liked reading it. Especially the contemplation on his mistress Smoking hit hard, being a smoker myself. I definately should quit before it's too late. Your wonderful little tale told me that. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing!

Sunglasses and name
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bob retired ,
Thank you so much for writing this poem. My uncle, youngest brother of my late mother, died while serving in 1961 (when my mother was pregnant with me). So, uncle Frits and Papua New Guinea have a special place in my heart. He stepped on a mine on the last day of serving for his country, the Netherlands. Quite ironic. Only 21 years old. Tragic.

You capture the image, smell, and heart ship of war very well.

Thanks again,
WakeUpAndLive‍‍~August⊕
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu ,

A lovely little poem on anger management. Well done! I loved reading it. It has a good rhyme and rhythm, the words were well chosen and told a clear story in 4 stanzas. I think it's your own experience, is it not? In that case, it's even better because you overcame your anger and analyzed it and found an answer to this predicament. Good for you!

Thanks for sharing, write on!
WakeUpAndLive‍‍~August⊕
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Review of The Letter  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Patrick McDonagh ,I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
The title is great, it fits its content. The sub-line lets the reader know what it is all about. Simple but eloquent, I liked it.

General impressions
A great poem, I read it out loud a couple of times and it grabbed me totally. It has a warm feel, it's emotionally sound and it has a very powerful cadence. I loved reading it.

Favorite Parts
I asked him why the long sad face and could I help in any way.
He looked at me with an emptiness that haunts me to this day.


A great and simple part that is the start of the story. You immediately get the feel of suspension that is in this poem.

Suggestions
The first 4 or 5 parts are 19 syllables each, it has a great cadence, then you changed that into more syllables and sometimes less. Perhaps you could try to make it all an even count of syllables. How? Read out loud and count. Maybe it will make it a slightly better poem that way. Just a suggestion, of course.

Final thoughts
A very good poem with a solid story. I loved reading it out loud, it has a great feel. Thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive

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Review of Pleasure Cruise  
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Hi Bob,

Fine story with a good pace and thrilling components. Good read! The dialogs were realistic and the descriptions made the story a wonderful write. Liked it a lot.

Glad to see you are back again!

Greetings, Petra
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Hi Jack Henry , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Great title, that covers its content, partly. The by-line is self-explanatory. Although the main issue is book reviewing. Perhaps you can add this to your title?

General impressions
A good and solid book review. More than that, half of your story is about e-books and self-publishing before you get to the actual book review itself. I liked that because it made the portrayed subject more profound.
Your writing style is very good, factual but not tedious, with humor and wit. The facts came across because of this, which is very difficult because telling about numbers can be difficult. You nailed it because of your refreshing writing style.

Favorite Parts
If you, the aspiring author burdened under the weight of numbers is thinking give-up, throw your hands in the air, and die, well that is an option. Having the gumption, tenacity, and perseverance to complete a book in the first place... possibly not a good one.

A very funny motto for reading on and exploring this book of Jason B. Ladd.

Suggestions
Be careful with links in your writing. Although it gives perfect information, it can decrease the tension of your own piece and take the reader of your writing out of the flow of reading. Sometimes it is better to just add a line or two yourself instead of giving the link. Just a thought.

Final thoughts
A profound and good book review on this Book Review Banzai formula. It is interesting enough to try to lure the reader into reading the book itself.
I loved your last line. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive

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