I loved this love story of a great aging couple on the verge of the death of one of them. It is a very believable story that creates a lot of empathy. The only thing is it is not finished. You have to still write that ending. The way it is now I only want to know how the situation unfolds for Sid and eventually for his wife as well. Please consider adding a few lines or a paragraph more where you take the grim situation Sid has put himself in and develop it further into a real ending.

Your chances of winning the contest would improve significantly, I am sure of it.

greetings, WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024

Welcome to Writing.com. I found this little gem on the Read and Review button and was immediately triggered to review.

A very interesting title, especially while reading the story you avoided the term Religion, instead you called it the Birth of Philosophy. I found that enchanting.

A very good interpretation of a very old and famous story. Not boring, not old but fresh and rejuvenating. I loved it.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

I found this amiable short story at your request.

It's a story about a deep-rooted friendship with your pall Chris, not about a newfound love Amy. Your bi-line put me on the wrong foot there because of mentioning "a date beyond his expectations". I, therefore, assumed the date to be with a spectacular outcome, which it was not.

There are two stories in this one, the one about your friendship with matchmaker Chris and the one with the date he set you up with. They are beautifully intertwined.

Still, I was a bit disappointed about the actual outcome, you use a lot of words to describe the evening in the restaurant and although very agreeable no doubt, it had a disappointing ending. One fine evening talking and then go your separate ways. I would have liked an ending with your discussion on this event with your friend Chris, to round things up. That way the story would have been full circle.

One omission: "because we conceded (...) nothing more to be (than) that night at the Riviera.

There is a really good flow in this story, your pace, character development, and dialogs are very well handled and I liked a sentence like: "Chris and Gabby were the paragon of millennial monogamy." Since I am from abroad, I had to look up the word "paragon" being "model or example". Never too old to learn a new word.

All in all, I loved your writing style.

Thank you for sharing and keep on writing.

Hi, Dr Gonzo ,

I read this extraordinary write at your request. From the get-go, I read this story aloud; for me, the best way to travel inside the story about hunting, pigs, and morals and undergoing the sensations described how to kill pigs, and more importantly, what it means to the pig to be chased and hunted down by people. I never knew, being a city girl who goes to the supermarket to score the meat, come home and prepare the food, never knowing where it comes from and what the history is behind that delicious piece of meat.

This piece was an eye-opener, a story in between the adventures of the piglet Babe and the thrilling story of Watership Down by Adams.

When I finished reading, I wanted to become a vegetarian, if only meat didn't taste that good.

An incredible story, written first hand by a hunter who, after this experience, stopped hunting altogether.

It was a pleasure reading it, you are a great storyteller, and the change halfway of perspective did the trick.

Thanks for sharing, and keep on writing!

As I reviewed you one year ago for the last time, I thought it best to try one of your stories again, and I found one that hasn't been reviewed or rated yet.

It's an older piece which is relevant because you wrote it at the beginning of your Jane Austen addiction. You mentioned that you just discovered Jane Austen and had read only a few stories of her. LOL. As you are known at WdC for your knowledge and admiration of Jane Austen, it's refreshing to read you started liking her work just then.

After sniffing out your port a little bit, I think I will try rereading Jane Austen. I've read Pride and Prejudice, and I tried Emma, but that is as far as it went. I am glad you mentioned a Barnes and Nobles edition with her work in it. I think I am going to look for that one myself.

When I have read more of her, I will come back and review some more of your work. It is essential to have read her, so I'll know what I am talking about.

Till later, keep on writing about Jane Austen. You're the expert.

Kind Regards,