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Review of Raindrops  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

I have to say this: I can't believe that this poem got a 3 and 1/2 stars. It's so unfair, in my personal opinion. I think you did an excellent job with it. It's beautiful and it's full of love, and it's also a little sad! Easy to understand from beginning to an end, and also that ending is beautiful. I transported myself to that same moment in time, with all the rain falling down, and it's just beautiful! Great job! *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. The title is Perfect! Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

This are just suggestions for improvement. I suggets that you should add the commas and periods where they are needed. Just to gave it a little more strength when we read it, and feeling. Just my personal opinion. *Wink*

Take care and keep on writing, and don't let those low stars put you down. Your work is good!

Winnie *Smile*
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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a beautiful poem, full of love, and also very sad. I really liked what you did, and the ending is good. Well done!

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, and here are some suggestions:

You wrote at the end:

god well be with you

It should be:

God will be with you. Just a suggestions, for improvement.

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them. They relate with what you wrote, and capture the eye of the reader.

Take care and keep on writing.
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of My Despair  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, and hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

This is beautiful, it's full of pain and love at the same time, because that person is so in love with the other, that is capable of waiting, and doing all for him/her. It's beautiful, and it's very true, but you can feel that pain, and feel the desperation that she/he has for that happiness to come. Beautiful! *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. I hope everything is well now. Never lose faith. *Wink*

*Note1* Suggestions

You should make it a little longer. It will be nice to see where it takes you to. Beautiful work!

Keep on writing from the heart! You've done a great job!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! Hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

This is a good poem. Love the strength in it, it's like moving, because the reader can feel the strength of your words, can feel what you are saying. Great job. Is your main language Latin, or it's English? It's a little hard to write in another language. I'm From Puerto Rico, and I'm Spanish Speaker, and sometimes for me it's a little hard to write in English, I have a problem with verbs, and the s, when to use it and when not to, and with dialogues, because I don't speak the language, I just write, and I can understand it perfectly, and I prefer movies in English etc, but I don't speak it, *Blush* I think it's because I'm afraid to, lol. But it's a little difficult sometimes to write dialogues, and rhyme.
You've done an excellent job! Great work!

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them, they relate with what you wrote about.

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. Well done!

Keep on writing, and take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of Photos of Shame  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! Hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

This is a great poem. Great mood, and message. You really did a great job with what you wrote. It's easy to understand and the end is my favorite line. Great job! *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them. They capture the eye of the reader easily. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

You've done a great job. The only suggestions for improvement that I have is for you to use the period, and commas, and capital letters where they are needed. Don't always use the capital letters, and don't take out the periods and commas where they are needed. It will give the poem strength and more emotion, when we read it out loud. Well done!

Keep on writing, and take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of Whispers  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine and welcome to w.com

*Note1* Overall

This is a good poem. Love all the words you used through all the poem, and the picture you painted. You've done a great job! *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Love them both. They capture the eyes of the reader easily. Great job!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. Maybe just, for you to make it a little longer. It would be nice to see where it leads you to. Great job!

Take care and have a great day!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of I Love You  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi! And Welcome to W.com. *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

You have a good message on this poem. You can feel that love that you want to paint in the poem, in every single line that you wrote. I think that you have to work a little on some of the sentences, to make it a little easier to understand, there are some spelling errros, that I'll point out, and I'll add a little suggestion about the ending for improvement. You did a good job! Keep on writing, and again, Welcome to Writing.com *Smile*

*Note1* Spelling

Ok, I'll add here the spelling errors that I found.

You wrote: Not In many words

You should say: Not in many words, the in is suppost to be: in, not capital letter.


You wrote: but couples after each other.

I think that it would sound better this way:
just a couple of them - something like that, because the line you added is a little confusing, and it's easier to understand and to read if you write, a couple of them. Just a suggestion. *Smile*

You wrote: If I look in to my heart

It should be: into my heart, the space is not needed.

You wrote: and compare it apart with someone else

It should be: and compare it with someone else, or even "share it with someone else." You don't need that apart word there. And the some one should be like this: someone

You wrote: ..... of the one that I love (take out the make me, and use the I.

You can write: of the one I love, no need to add the that. It sounds better, and it's easier to read.

You wrote: that's you
You can write: "You" it sounds better and gave it a flow.

You wrote: and together we are lucky and happy
You can take that and out, and it's better, keeps the flow, and also it's easier to read and understand.

You wrote: Darling what I want it to say is
It should be: what I wanted to say, not want it.

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choice for title, and the description is great also, but you had on it another spelling error. The chenge it's suppost to be change. Good job!

*Note1* Suggestions

I have a suggestion for the ending, about the love part. You can take out one of the I love you, to not repeat them in the sentence, and then, just add, in anyway, instead of anyway. It's just a little suggestion for improvement.

*Note1* Example of how it would look with all the corrections. Remember is your poem, your work, this are just suggestions for improvement, nothing more. I just think this way it can have a better rating, and you can improve your writings if you correct some of the errors on your future writings. *Smile*

When I saw you yesterday,
I wondered
if I might say something to you.
Not in many words,
just in a couple of them.
If I look into my heart
and compare/share it with someone else
immediately I think of the one I love;
"You"
Together we are lucky and happy.
Darling, what I wanted to say is
that I Love You
in anyway.

Hope you like my suggestions, and that they help you improve your writings.

Take care and have a great day!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of Grieving Solitary  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

Great job! This is a great poem. Really like this line: My own existence .. fading in the blink of an eye. Love that line, and that ending is great. Love the words you used through all the poem, and the mood you created! Well done!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling erros. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. Short and to the point. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. Good job!
Keep on writing, and take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

WOW! I have to say that this poem is Beautiful. I love all the colors, the way you created that tree using the words, the message, and that ending. Wow, you did an awesom job. *Smile* *Thumbsup* My favorite part is: the smell is more than pine, it's more like fresh snow, covered woods. Beautiful! I've never been on a snow covered woods before, I've never seen the snow (I'm from Puerto Rico) but your poem made me feel that I was there, that I could feel the smell of the covered wooods. Beautiful!

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them! *Smile* Love that title!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all! Great work. Keep on writing, and have a great night, and what's left from the week!

Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again!

*Note1* Overall

This is another very funny and original item. I really liked it, and it kept me reading from begining to an end. I specially liked all the beautiful colors you used to separate each part. It brightens the whole piece! Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

Again I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them! *Smile* Short and to the point!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all, I think you did a great job!

Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Jingle Smells  
Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

WOW! I have to say this. I really loved this item! It's VERY FUNNY! You made me laugh from begining to end. *Laugh* Very original, and fun to read. Great job! *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them, and I have a little suggestion for the description, you can also add a little more of what the item is all about to capture the eye of the reader more easily. You did a great job!

*Note1* Suggestions

No more suggestion, just the description. *Smile*

Keep on writing *Thumbsup* You did an excellent job with it. Good luck in the contest!

Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of As Never Before  
Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile*
And thanks for such a great entry for my contest "Invalid Item"  *Thumbsup*

*Note1* Overall

Great use of the prompt! You gave life to it, meaning, and you described it perfectly. I really love what you did. Easy to understand. Love the ending. Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choice for title, and about the description, maybe you can add a little more to spice it, and to capture the eye of the reader easily. Just a little suggestion for improvement.

*Note1* Suggestion

Nothing more. Great job!

Keep on writing, and a new round is Open. Feel free to enter. *Wink*

Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Review of The Plunge  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! *Smile*

Hope you are doing fine!

*Note1* Overall

Wow! I have to say this! This is my favorite poem from your port. I think this is the best poem you have written, my personal opinion. Love all the words you used. It was easy to understand, and I LOVE that ending. WOW! will you catch me? Very strong ending. I also love this line: "into the icy shimmer of your eyes" The beginning of the poem is great. It captures the eye of the reader instantly. I really love it. You've done an exellent job!

*Note1* Spelling

Well, as you know my main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Love the title! Perfect! About the description, it's a good choice, but maybe you can add a little more, about the poem, to catch a little better the eye of the reader, like for example, "A cold night with a stranger - will you catch me?" or something like that. *Smile*

*Note1* Suggestion

No suggestions at all. Only that one of the description. You did a great job!

Keep on writing my friend! This is an exellent poem. I love it! I'll include it on your page for the book of the group. I have to edit that book and update it.

Take care!
Your friend!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Blood Red Roses  
Review by Winnie
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
HI! *Smile*

Thanks for your entry for the "Invalid Item"  The contest is back, and a new round will began soon.

*Note1* Overall

This is a good acrostic. I like the flow, and you did a good job with the prompt given. I like the words that you used through the poem, and I really like that ending. Well done!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good title, and description, but you can also add to the description a little more about what the acrostic is all about to catch the eye of the reader.

*Note1* Suggestions

The only suggestion that I have for improvement is that maybe you can add a little of color to the letters that forms the acrostic, for others to understand it easily, and also to gave it kind of a touch. Just a little suggestion, nothing more. You did a good job!

*Note1* Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of The Sentinel  
Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a great flash fiction story. You did a great job. It's a real challenge to create a story with only 200 words. You did a great job. Love the ending, and it kept me reading from begining to an end. Good story! Great descriptions!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. The title relates well with the story. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. Great job!

Keep on writing. You are a great horror writer. Take care and have a great week.
HUGS!
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good poem. You did a good job with all the words you used. Great ending. Good use of the periods, commas, etc. Well done!

*Note1* Spelling

Here are some spelling errors that I found:

You wrote:

Looking,finding nothing...
you need a space after the comma

family,friends...
you need a space after the comma

the world,your world is over.
you need a space after the comma

to tell evrything to evryone.
it shoud be everything to everyone.

That's all! *Smile*

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for title and description. They relate with what you wrote about. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

The only suggestions that I have is for you to edit the little spelling errors that I found, so it can increase the rating. Keep an eye on those space that are needed after each (,) That's all. You did a good job!

Take care and keep on writing.
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Destiny? Doom!!!  
Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good poem. I really like all the words you used through all the poem. I noticed that all the lines start with the letter d. I've done that before, and it's really a challenge. Not easy at all! *Smile* Good rhyme! Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. I think you did a great job!

Take care and keep on writing.
Have a great weekend.
Winnie *Smile*

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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

Ok, the idea you had with this item is good. I like the words you used, and the way you are describing what's happening. What it's a little confusing about the narration is that ending, that leaves you in the air. Why? Because as a reader, we are receiving the message that something is getting closer, and it will bring joy etc. We are expecting that as readers. And almost at the end, you added that joy, that peace etc. and we can feel all the things that you are describing, but suddently, you let us down, by telling us, "...prepare, He is coming this way." All that you made us feel, is gone, because that was what we as readers were waiting for, and you kind of let us down with that ending. We are like: what happened? If that's what you wanted to do with the item, to leave the reader feeling that way, then you did it. If not, maybe this is why you are getting that kind of rating. You can work with it, and try to leave the reader know what you want them to expect from it.

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, and I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choice for title. About the description, it's kind of confusing, because when you read the item, you can't understand if it's either of life, or death. So maybe you have to work a little more on the body of the item, so we can judge, and think about that question you added on the description.

*Note1* Suggestions

The only suggestions that I have for improvement is, that maybe you don't have to be so repetitive about the part that says that He's coming... you can try to work with it, and let us know, without telling us all the time. Another thing is, that you can try to make it a little longer, and try to explain a little more about those messengers, and about what they are doing, try to add a little more, so we can understand better, and then we can judge if it's about life or death. This are just some suggestions for improvement. Nothing more. If you work on it, let me know, I'll be happy to read it again. Good luck! *Smile*

Keep on writing, and take care!
Have a great weekend!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review by Winnie
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good item. Great descriptions and comparisons. Love the begining and the ending. You did a good job!

*Note1* Spelling

I did my best, and I didn't found spelling errors, just a little thing here:

You wrote:

"cemetary plot,not enough money..."
It's suppost to be:

cemetary plot, not enough money..."
You leaved that space after the comma. Just that.
You did a good job. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great title. It goes well with what you wrote about. About your description, you can add a little more about what the poem is all about to capture the eye of the reader easily. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

The only suggestions for improvement that I have is for you to add the commas, periods, capitol letters etc. where they are needed, to make it easier to read and understand. Nothing more. Well done!

Keep on writing and take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Life  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good item. The message that you are sending is great. The words you used were perfect, and the ones you had to use. Great beginning and great ending! Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and I only found one spelling error.

You wrote:
"But in the end all are loved my somebody...."
I think it's suppost to be:
"But in the end all are loved by somebody..."

Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Great choices for both of them. I really like your description, and all you wrote in your item. Great job!

*Note1* Suggestions

The only suggestion for improvement that I have is to make it longer. It's a little too short. It would be wonderful if you can make it like an essay or even a monologue out of it. It will be very interesting to see all the things that you come up with. Good luck if you decide to make it longer. I'll be happy to read it if you do. Great job!

Take care and keep on writing.
Winnie *Smile*

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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good song. Well written, and it's easy to understand. You used words that we use every day in our rutine of life. Very realistic. Good job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. Easy to understand, and relates to what you wrote about. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

Maybe you can add a little of more poetry to it, more metaphores or maybe symils etc, to make it a little more poetic. It's just a little suggestion for improvement, nothing more. You did a good job!

*Note1* Keep on writing.
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Lament  
Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a great poem. It's difficult to write a poem, with just one letter to start every verse of it. I've done it, and it's not easy at all. So I have to say, that you did a GREAT job with this poem. I like it very much. Love the ending, and how it is like a little story inside of the poem. Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. Great title, and about the description, you can also add a little of what's the poem all about, to capture the eye of the reader.

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions. Well done!

*Note1* Keep on writing. Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review of Red Tears  
Review by Winnie
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

Wow, this is a great poem. Very strong, and the words and mood that you created is perfect for the message that you are sending with this poem. Great job! Love that begining and that ending.

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

The title is great, and it captures the eye of the reader asap. About the description, maybe you can add a little something to that same sentence, not to end it like that, with those ..., because it can capture the eye of the reader more with a little of more added about the poem. About what the poem is all about. This is just a little suggestions for improvement. Nothing more. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

Another suggestions for improvement that I have, my personal opinion, is that you can use capital letters only when they are needed, (after the period) not in every line of the poem. Just a little suggestion for improvement. Your poem is great! Well done!

*Note1* Keep on writing. Great message!

Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review by Winnie
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good song. I really like the message you are sending with it. I like those questions you asked at the beginning, and also Line3. Great job!

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

Good choices for both of them. The title captures the attention of the reader easily. Well done!

*Note1* Suggestions

No suggestions at all. You've done a good job with the lyrics. Well done!

*Note1* Keep on writing. Great message!
Take care!
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! *Smile*

*Note1* Overall

This is a good poem. Love the ending. Those two last verses are my favorites. Well done! *Smile*

*Note1* Spelling

My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!

*Note1* Title/Description

The title is short and to the point, but the description, is a little confusing. The words you used are a little confusing or difficult to understand. Maybe is because I'm Spanish speaker, *Blush* Maybe you can add a little of what the poem is all about, easier to understand, so it can capture the eye of the reader better. Just a little suggestions for improvement, nothing more.

*Note1* Suggestions

No more suggestions, just that about the description. Good job!

*Note1* Keep on writing! Take care!
Winnie

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