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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem does indeed paint the picture of a glorious Autumn day. I love how you described the leaves as they fell and the ones that were already on the ground ('a few more kaleidoscope pieces for the forest floor.').

My only problem with it is that it doesn't flow as smoothly as I hoped. I recommend that you take out the lines mentioning the tourists. That seems to be the most noticeable disturbance. Another problem I have with it is that it doesn't feel like a poem to me. It seemed more like a monologue.

Other than that, this poem has wonderful descriptions. The words you used are wonderful (especially kaleidoscope), and I don't see any problems with grammar or spelling. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is the most amazing story that I've read all year! I couldn't stop reading it. I didn't see any errors in spelling or grammar, so that makes it even better!

I wish you luck on your future writing projects, and have a happy new year!

~ Howler of the Moon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like the idea for this monologue, but instead of 'ahead' you should write 'a head'. That will make a better hook to attract future readers and it makes more sense with the context. Other than that, this monologue is pretty interesting.
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Review of The Kiss of Life  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am really impressed by this monologue. This actually seems like something an insomniac would do whenever they're wake. Being an occasional insomniac myself (especially when I was in elementary school) I've had my experiences and I can completely relate. I don't see any errors that need to be corrected, so this is an extremely good piece. I hope you enjoyed writing it and that you continue to enjoy writing in the future.

~ Howler of the Moon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm interested in looking at this group, but upon seeing the age range I froze. I'm sixteen and I have plenty of ideas for animations, comics, the whole shebang. Do I really need to be eighteen and over to join the group?
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Rated: E | (1.0)
This story has potential, but there are a lot of things that need to be fixed. Break apart most of the sentences into smaller ones and leave out the parts that appear more than once. Also tell the reader why Ka:u set Kamin on fire and sent the villagers and Utin running. Give the 'Rocky' near the end of the third paragraph a lower case 'r', that is unless it is the name of the stream. There are countless grammar errors, but with a little proofreading and editing it can be fixed.

This item has a great story to tell. With the editing it can be made better.

I hope you found this review helpful in this and your future items. Keep writing and have fun at WDC!

~ Howler of the Moon
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Review of Guardian Angel  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an amazing poem. I love how you describe the presence of your guardian angel and I don't see any spelling problems. Well done! Good luck with your future writing projects!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a really good story. You did very well of writing the plot, but there are a few punctuation errors. However everything else is perfect. Keep up the good work and have fun at Writing.com.
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Review of Bedpost.  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the story behind this poem. However there is a problem with the fact that there is no punctuation. It was difficult to tell which part began and which ended. You should try to find out how to properly punctuate in poetry such as this.

I still love the story depicted in this poem. I also admire how you use pattern in this too. Keep writing and learning from mistakes. These are the best strategies used to improve your writing. Therefore keep up the great work!
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Review of Significant.  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like how this poem is constructed. It has a strong hook and theme. The spelling is perfect! It makes it easy to read. Keep up the good work and keep writing! *BigSmile*
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Review of Fairy  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very good preface. I like how you describe the narrator's experience of turning into a fairy. I can see it in my head as I read it. Great job.
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Review of Sakura  
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a lovely poem. I like how the narrator addresses his love of his loved ones in the end. However I would like to see how people show their love for him after his death.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an amazing story. I like the gloomy beginning and the ending. Eva got to be with her father again!
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Review of Alaska2004  
Rated: E | (4.5)
These pictures look like they have been taken by professionals. Good job!
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Review of Black Box  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Interesting! I wounder what's in the box. :)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an impressive opening to this novel. Good job.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
This is a really great story! I liked the part when the narrator met Jared. I feel sad for Freddy though. :(
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This was is a really awsome story! I especially love the twist between the two lovers.
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Review of I Am  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a really cool poem.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a very interesting story! I'm a really big fan of the paranormal and this is so far one of the best ghost stories I've read.
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Review of What It's Worth  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This poem really touched me. My heart sank as I kept reading this.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is one of the best stories I have read.
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