Hello! I am impressed by this haiku poem. The whole stanza can be read as a complete sentence while fitting the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. I believe adding a period at the end of the poem would be the cherry on top. It would complete the poem the same way it would a story.
When I first read this haiku, I immediately related to your feelings when writing poetry. It can be extremely difficult to fit syllable and rhyming patterns together while trying to convey a clear message. That I can tell you from experience. Again, well done on this haiku! Good luck on your future writing projects.
I'm interested in looking at this group, but upon seeing the age range I froze. I'm sixteen and I have plenty of ideas for animations, comics, the whole shebang. Do I really need to be eighteen and over to join the group?
This story has potential, but there are a lot of things that need to be fixed. Break apart most of the sentences into smaller ones and leave out the parts that appear more than once. Also tell the reader why Ka:u set Kamin on fire and sent the villagers and Utin running. Give the 'Rocky' near the end of the third paragraph a lower case 'r', that is unless it is the name of the stream. There are countless grammar errors, but with a little proofreading and editing it can be fixed.
This item has a great story to tell. With the editing it can be made better.
I hope you found this review helpful in this and your future items. Keep writing and have fun at WDC!
I love the story behind this poem. However there is a problem with the fact that there is no punctuation. It was difficult to tell which part began and which ended. You should try to find out how to properly punctuate in poetry such as this.
I still love the story depicted in this poem. I also admire how you use pattern in this too. Keep writing and learning from mistakes. These are the best strategies used to improve your writing. Therefore keep up the great work!