I am awe struck actually. Your writing is excellent. You have expressed in a very profound way concepts that are often not easy for others to understand.
Sometimes when they read the Holy Scriptures the person reading is not certain of what certain passages mean. Your clarification of the intent is beautiful. The interpretation you present to your readers almost makes the characters come alive, I think. You have given the characters in these Bible stories voices and personalities.
You are a talented story teller. I am struggling to find any suggestions for you. Your use of descriptive language to paint a word picture of various events is incredible. I feel like I am right there looking at what is happening.
My advice to you is get this published as soon as you can because what you have created is a masterpiece.
This review is meant to be humorous because the writer is entering a contest. This is a poor example of a good review.
Wow! What a poem. I am not sure it can be even called a poem. The images and feelings that your story bring to my mind are astounding. I am not sure how to review this however I will try.
Being one who loves anything associated with Christmas and having a special place in my heart for Valentines Day I was shocked. The words you used were definitely not appropriate and surely not meaningful to me in any way shape or form.
Elves engaging in clean up work is one thing yet doing what you said they were doing is totally disturbing and all it all the whole scenario you discribed is disturbing. I am actually disturbed about how disturbing it is. Santa Claus and his wife should as I see it be held in very high esteem for all the good work they do and not put in fictional and very confusing positions as you clearly have put them into.
I sincerely hope that your writing gets the attention it needs and I look forward to possibly helping you with this if you chose to rewrite it. We may be able to salvage a few words here so that it may be an encouragement to someone somewhere.
Let me just leave you with a few words of wisdom and I am not certain who first coined the phrase. " You can't catch as many bees with vinegar as you can with honey". Maybe that little phrase will inspire you to write about bees or honey. I think there is always hope for writers here and I am confident that you will be able to get a better review soon
This review is a response to a poem that was suppose to be bad . This review is suppose to be funny. It is an example of the silly side of me.
You have challenged me with displaying the 3 characteristics of a good review. I may not be displaying three of them and just displaying two. I would give this a minus rating if I could. I just have to give this monstrosity a one.
I know you were having fun when you created your poetry and gave this message and said what you said. I think though you must have certainly encountered a blow to your head.
I believe your poem could never be cell abrated and wonder if it should be possibly just be x rated. Some of the words you used are very bad. Are those the only words you had?
Well, this Valentines day as you call Cupid horrid names other people are playing loving games with Valentines. The only good thing I can say about the poem I read of yours today is it certainly rhymes.
I honestly, respectfully, encourage you to please put this poem in a drawer and never let it see the light of day. How can you treat an historical icon like Cupid this way! Cupid may hit you again in your derriere with a dart. Be assured that I will be praying for a miracle to happen in your heart.
This review is not meant to be unkind. The writer is attempting to win a contest and needs a good bad review.
The way you described cupid was like you were comparing him to some monster and that description is so far from the transitional affection Valentine lovers show. You remind me of Simon Cowell giving a review for a talent show.
I would like to know why you find it necessary to demean such a beautiful creature who signifies love? The words you used are indicative of hatred.
You could not find one nice thing to say and you have now sealed you fate of having a review that is less than stellar.
I hope that this behavior will change after the Bard contest so that you can redeem yourself with some good writing. Until then though I have to be honest and rate you on the content of what I see and what I see is someone who despises the romance and affection that sweet cupid stands for at this time of year.
I really like this. The words bring lovely images to my mind.The idea of a clouds speaking to one another intrigues me. The birds watching is a beautiful concept. You even described how the birds felt.
This message is very sweet and I am glad you wrote about nature in this way. If you could tell the reader more about what you see happening by using your imagination it would be great.
I am giving you a high mark on this because I hope that you will realize that you are a gifted writer and that you will be encouraged to be even more creative.
What you have written seems to be the start of something wonderful. It is difficult and almost impossible for me to do an adequate review of your feelings and thoughts so far.
I am going to attempt to do so. Trees are usually seen by me as stable and not moving much at all so it is fascinating to see how you described them. You also say they have patterns.
Perhaps you could elaborate about these two feelings and concepts telling those who are reading what you wrote about and what more you see in trees.
I would be glad to review any further efforts you make. I am giving you this rating to encourage you to write more and I am looking forward to reading more of what you create.
This is an intriguing story. Your description of the little boy and the place where he has gone is incredible. I really like your style of writing.
I have two suggestions. As often happens to writers you created a complete thought in your mind and forgot to punctuate the sentence in your story. I think after reading this slowly you will see exactly what I mean. Look at the words Jeanne Green.
Also if this is the end of the story can you explain what the little boy means by life points.
I am fascinated to know more about these characters and hope you will continue to write about them. I am looking forward to reading more of your writing. You have good imagination.
Your poem is wonderful. I like it and I will tell you why. Through the use of well chosen words, rhythm and persuasive sentences you have reminded us that we are fortunate.
Your title speaks volumes and your words are describing beautiful people in life who care.
I do have a few suggestions perhaps you could change some of the words that are repetitive. The last phrase where you use the word compassion might be changed to love or another synonym. Take a look at your poem and see if you could change some of the words you have already used.
I am giving you a higher mark on this than you would probably give yourself to encourage you to write more inspiring poems and to show you that you truly are a gifted writer.
The last two poems were not difficult for me read or to understand. The first poem was not at all easy for me to read and I think you might think about making it into 2 poems or write it as one poem for review and I will attempt to assist you by reviewing just those changes.
My advice for the first poem is that you might just have to go back and read it out loud to get an idea of the best way to write your thoughts and feelings in a way that others can relate to yet keep a rhythmic balance.
The second poem was sad yet hopeful. I liked the ending and how you use the words to express the deep feelings you have.
The last poem was somewhat baffling to me. I really liked the ending though. I did not see how what you were describing could be binding or beneficial.
I am a Poetry lover actually. I like most types of poetry. When I understand what a poet is expressing I have a meeting of minds I suppose you could call it. Poetry is art and not everyone enjoys the same art just like not everyone enjoys the same poetry.
You show tremendous creativity in your poetry. I have no wish to stifle that yet as a reviewer of of the 3 poems I have to rate in such a way that I encourage you to reach a higher level of understanding of your readers potential reaction. In your words readers can then find that moment when they comprehend your reason for writing what you did.
I am giving you a rating that I hope you think is a fair one. I encouraging you to continue writing.
I really liked this poem. I want you to know that the images in brought to my mind were lovely. You took a big challenge and created a sweet sonnet about love. I am giving you a very high rating since you worked within the confines of tradition to write a truely uplifting poem. That is not something that all poets are skillful enough to accomplish.
The feelings of affection that you have for the one who you are writing the sonnet to are expressed in a beautiful way.
This is a delightful story and it kept me interested. Your choice of words and sentence structure made it easy to read. I like your descriptions and the comparisons you made about a smile being "almost as the sunshine".
I gave you a high rating for all those reasons and I am looking forward to reading more of what you have written. I think you have a talent to be able to describe to the reader what is happening so that we can feel like we are actually there with you.
Your story showed characteristics of good writing. I was compelled to keep reading and even read it again so that I could find something I might have missed. You painted a picture with words about the man and the place where he was. My heart kept asking how did he get there, why was he even there in the first place and where was he going.
A good artist creates with paint what you created with your words. The descriptions were amazing. Your sentence structure was chosen well though you may consider varying the size of a few sentences. The first though was as effective as the last in keeping me in a state of curiousity and surprise.
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