I am reading and reviewing your poem written for the Writing 4 Kid's contest because I am one of the judges this month.
What a fun, fast-paced poem about waiting for the sun to shine. I really like your colorful presentation. You kept your poem clean and simple and I think any child would be prone to chant your poem while waiting for the rain to clear up.
I am reading and reviewing your poem written for the Writing 4 Kids contest because I am one of the judges for the month of April.
I love the presentation of this poem! Use of large font, color, and you even added an adorable bee to it, clearly, any child would be drawn to it like a bee to flowers. So simple but so fun and easy to understand. It is vivid, bright, and short, which is great for a child's attention span.
I really enjoyed your word search! It put me in the mood for gardening and being outside in the warm sunshine getting my hands dirty. Your word search was challenging, the word "fresh" illuded me and I had to finally click the solve button. You picked some very good words for this puzzle. Thank you for creating it and I look forward to the next one.
You are very, very welcome! I just love making new friends and getting to know them and you are so sweet and I just love how you jumped in and started getting involved with so much. I'm glad to call you a friend and can't wait to see what you achieve here! The sky is the limit.
I just completed your wonderful word search and enjoyed it very much. You have some of my very favorite authors listed as well as one or two I've not heard of, which means I've got some research to do!
God's word is the only thing you can take to the bank and count on it. God's word is the ONLY constant in this universe. It never changes, for He is the Alpha and Omega and so is his Word, because in the beginning was the Word and the Word was with God and the Word WAS God. Every single word can be trusted and depended upon. Since day one, we've been gifted with free will. We ALWAYS have a choice. It is not always an easy choice but the choice is always there if we seek it and ask for it. We must choose it. Many times tho, we are like sheep and allow others to make those choices for us, then we blame them for the results.
This brought a chill to me as I read it. Such truth in every word! It speaks like a hammer to those who read it, pricks the soul, and hopefully, makes the reader really think about what is being said. This should be printed out and handed out in mass distribution so everyone has a chance to read it.
I read and am reviewing this as a result of doing your Christmas Quiz. Much of what you wrote about I already knew, but the information about the star was new to me. You make some very good points and what you say makes a lot of sense, but I never thought of it that way. Right before Christmas this last year I read a book called Bethlehem at the time of Jesus' birth. It really picks apart the Christmas story and goes in-depth of the reality of it. Of what was really going on at that time and puts a lot of new perspective to the story. My favorite part was reading about the shepherds. How these were not the type of men to be dazzled or impressed by a baby. They were barbarians. They lived outside the city walls. They had to fight against wild animals, thieves, murderers, sleep and live in all kinds of weather..they were hard, fierce men. And those were the men who God sent Angels to tell of the birth of Jesus and when they saw and heard, they left their flocks! Left their posts and went to see...and they are the ones who fell on their knees and worshiped the baby. That really touched my heart because when I think of the disciples, the ones Jesus picked to follow him, he picked fierce fishermen who were strong and used to fighting the sea, weather, and such. Not polished, gentle, meek men. Tho some were doctors and tax collectors but the majority were not. Then, I think of Saul who killed Christians and actually LIKED it...he was a notorious killer and tormenter of Christians...and wait. I'm getting all excited and going way off point. Point is, I enjoyed what you wrote and I learned something new. Great work!
This was a fun quiz and several of the questions really made me stop and think. I am very surprised that it says the Devil is the one who made the star appear. I've never heard that before. Can you share where that is found? I'd be very interested. This is a great quiz for any time, not just the Christmas season.
Hello Bari,
Again, welcome to WDC, and thank you for asking me to read your wonderful scene. I enjoyed the strong descriptive words and vivid imagery. You used lots of detail, yet kept the pace nice and even and didn't bog the story down. I didn't spot any technical issues, but that is not my strongest skill, so perhaps don't rely fully on just my opinion of that. You hook me, as a reader with within the first few sentences and I can't help but keep reading. I just HAVE to know what happens next!
If I were to make any suggestions at all, I would suggest re-thinking the presentation. As it is, it is all kinda squished together into one huge chunk of text. I'd encourage you to maybe double space your paragraphs, use a larger font for easier reading. You have a wide range of options above the box you type in. You can bold, or add italics or underline. You can add colors, change the spacing of sentences and paragraphs, change the size of the font, choose a different font, and many other features to enhance your writing.
Please let me know when you've added to this story as I would love to know what happens!
I read your piece through the read & Review page. While your piece is not something I would normally read, your's grabbed my attention and I must say, I enjoyed it. I really enjoyed the vivid imagery you use. You made it very easy for my mind's eye to envision what you were saying and to visualize the whole thing. The interaction between granddaughter and grandmother was intriguing! You seem very skilled at writing dialog. I also really liked that you took the time to add some format to your page and broke it up a bit. It was easy on my eyes and made the whole thing look very well put together.
By the time I finished reading this I was grinning from ear to ear. What writer has not fought that demon which is editing? What writer has not wilted at the mere thought of editing something? In writing, it is a necessary evil that helps us put the spit and polish on our carefully arranged words.
What you wrote easily resonates with many writers and I'm pretty sure a good number of them have had this same or similar rant more than once. Thank you for sharing!
I am reading and reviewing your poem entry for the writing 4 kids contest because I am one of the judges for the month of December.
Your use of the prompt is delightful! Snowflake is a bovine with a giant heart and a passion for giving gifts. Your poem is simple and easy for school-age children to read and comprehend. I think you did a wonderful job with the prompt.
This is brilliantly exciting! What a fun, creative way for children to understand punctuation. I think any child would be delighted to read this story. Not only could teachers and parents use this as is, but there are so many ways it could be incorporated into other lessons as well. Not only do I give this 5 stars, but I will also be sending you a merit badge as well! Keep watch on your emails!
It is clear to see you have a wonderful way with words. How could I resist a story about teenagers and chocolate coffee cake? This is the second review that you won as a raffle prize at the Haunted Hotel. And now, I have the tantalizing image of a chocolate coffee cake haunting my brain and tastebuds!
All throughout your story you use vivid imagery and details I never would have thought to add to stories of my own. You make the dialog between the two girls sound so effortless and natural, which is an amazing skill. It is easy to see these two have a close, special friendship and you injected plenty of humor in your story to keep it lively and fun. In all, you baked up a one of a kind, special story.
I am reviewing your entry for the Writing 4 Kids contest entry because I am one of the judges for the month of October. This was a delightful "thriller" just for children. You added just enough creepiness to hook young readers and coax most to keep reading to find out what was happening. There was never any REAL danger, cos the child had her parents right there with her, and she ended up with her family who was able to explain why she was seeing the same jack-o-lantern face at each house. This is just the kind of story children love reading and telling.
I am reviewing your story for the Writing 4 Kids contest because I am one of October's judges. Your story is very creative and followed all the guidelines and prompt very well. I especially like that you used a larger font and a font that is easy to see and read. Harold, Miriam, and Jack's characters are very well developed and I loved each of them and their individual personalities. The conversation between characters sounded so natural and I liked the injected humor you added. With a few words, you brought the whole story to life and used wonderful imagery that made it easy to see everything play out. In the end, they were all back together and no one was made into a pie! I think most children would be entertained by your vibrant story.
Thank you for entering the Writing 4 Kids contest!
This is a deeply emotional story that conveys a wide range of feelings and makes it easy for the reader to relate to the writer. At some point, most everyone faces these or very similar questions and I love how you describe each person being a locked room that had a hidden key required to open them up. That was brilliant! I hope everyone finds their personal key.
wow, that turned creepy rather quickly! I sure hope you won first place because it sure deserves it! I'm so impressed with the number of visual details you added and kept the word count so low, that is a skill I've yet to come anywhere close to learning. Your story hooked me right away and kept me hooked right to the very end and I like that it left the reader wondering what might happen next?
Thank you for signing up for the Deadly Deceptions Competition and submitting this audition entry. I must say, it is a fabulously creepy and disturbing creation and I loved every nail-biting moment of it. Plus, I learned a new, cool word, and torture method!
Based on what you submitted and after exploring your portfolio, I'd be thrilled to offer you one of the 25 spots for the Deadly Deception Competition. Due to a lack of sign-ups, and my not knowing about Nano prep...I am considering strongly moving my competition to perhaps January. This way folks won't have to choose between NaNo or my competition as both demand a certain amount of commitment on time and effort. I will keep you well informed of the developments.
Thank you for entering and I really look forward to seeing your killer entries in the competition!
Happy belated Labor Day. I found your item on the Read & Review list and today I will be giving you a review in association with Positive Heart's Review Group.
I found your story to be humorous and lite but I especially liked that you based your story on factual tidbits. You filled your story with vivid details that made the story come alive and pop from the pages, all while keeping the pace at a steady clip. Never underestimate a groundhog! Thank you for an amusing and adventurous read.
Even without being a part of a review group, your portfolio is always one of my favorite places to visit. To spend time in and read. Also, I am not doing this for a merit badge, though your offer is very generous. Thank you for taking the time to read the letter I posted and to respond.
The Joy that passeth all understanding is indeed a wonderful place to be. I believe, its because when we are in that particular place, we are in the presence of Jesus and HE is our source of unimaginable peace. Well, makes sense since he is our Prince of Peace.
You point out and bring to focus on something very vital. Like many of our emotions, WE do have the capability to CHOOSE them. It is a discipline most have just never taken the time to develop and they allow their emotions to control THEM and they allow outside influences to control their emotions, rather than keeping control over them. No, controlling them is not easy and as I said, it is a discipline that must be learned and practiced. But, it IS within our capability if we choose to harness it. I'm still learning and have a long way to go yet.
You hit the nail on the head when you said, "Almost every time I shared this idea with someone, a storm hit in my own life and the time had come to make a choice and, thankfully, I consistently chose joy." Oh yes, that is because that ol devil loves nothing more than to steal the peace Jesus wants to give us! He dances with glee when our emotions run amuck and cause is turmoil, confusion and all kinds of upheaval. That's when he knows he has us firmly in HIS control. HE hates when we override him and make the CHOICE to keep our JOY and we let nothing stand between us and our Joy that GOD gives us. Why? Cos a peaceful heart filled with joy is also a heart unwilling to listen to his whispers.
I loved your article and how you expressed yourself. You write very well, and always with the touch of love that comes only from a person who is shining their light for Jesus. In all you write, you lift HIM up and for that, you are one of my favorite writers here.
You took the time to read and give me a wonderfully detailed review the other day. Since then, I've joined a review group and I decided I would return the favor you blessed me with. You pointed out some very strong grammar errors of mine and I was thankful. You put me on the path to really learn more about sentence structure and your topic of the semicolon was "discovered" at the perfect time.
Unlike my story, your essay got my attention right away. You made something that would have been kinda dull, interesting by sharing your personal story and sharing about your discovery about your own writing. To be honest, I never considered the length of my sentences and I am thankful your essay shines a light on that and gives me a reason to consider this. Now, I wonder how many times in my own stories could I break up some of my longer sentences and use a semicolon? I think you would have made a great teacher basied on this essay.
With all Sincerity,
Tina
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