This chapter has sparked my curiousity, I hope to read more. One thing that I was confused about; Wasn't Faith supposed to help Illyna in training with her bow? I assume faith forgot when Tah'lon asked her to dance, but did Illnya also forget? Maybe if you can address that in some way it would help complete that particular section? At any rate very awesome writing! Great job!!
I loved this story!! Thank you for writing it!! The only thing that I can say is I wish it were longer! :D Very excellent though, I was caught up in the story from the very beginning, I love stories that start from the end. I wish I could write as well as this!
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