I have no love of wrestling but I believed you captured the heart and soul of this man. I thought your farewell was honest and heart felt. It made even a non-fan like myself understand and appreciate the character of this man.
I found it interesting that Michelle's spirit wanted her to join it in her grave. Was she dead and not realizing it for some reason? Or was the spirit pretending to be her spirit. Of course she could have been sleepwalking and had that terrible dream :). There is a lot of questions that aren't answered but for a short piece, it is pretty good.
I enjoyed the beginning of this piece. I thought your descriptions were good when you were describing Angelo and the scenery he was walking through on his way to the Fixer's shop. There was one sentence in the beginning that confused me it begins 'Dusk: like a fire along the distant horizon...'. Where you trying to say it was evening?
Even though I enjoyed the beginning, I have to say you lost me when Francis entered the picture. I couldn't tell what was happening. The action didn't flow like it did in the beginning.
Even though I feel this needs work, I still think it is good. Keep on writing !
I really enjoyed this story. At first I find it hard to get into but I plowed on through and it got better as I continued on. What I liked about it was the mystery, who or what was killing those people. At the ending, I thought it could have been James in some sort of hideous alter-ego. I have to admit I didn't like it when he died. But that is just because I don't like bad endings. I am the type that wants to see evil destroyed in a story but I know that isn't the way things work sometimes. Overall, good job
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