I’ve also read the theory that God, Jesus and all spiritual beings, are actually extra-terrestrials from an infinitely advanced society. I don’t know what your actual religious beliefs are; but as a committed Christian, I’d say that the theory in this story is blasphemous. It limits God, when He is infinitely greater than what the theory says.
If you’re interested, I’ve posted a number of stories in my portfoliio in which God, as revealed in the Bible, interacts with people.
Another thing. The reason I gave this work only a 3 star rating, is the formatting. It's much too small. People with vision problems might have trouble reading it. I suggest you change the text size to 3.5. You should also put single spaces between your paragraphs.
This is an intriguing introduction into what is apparently a tale of spiritual conflict, throughout one woman's life, beginning at early childhood. This prologue is interesting enough to make me want to continue reading.
A very good chapter one. Good enough to make me curious enough to read chapter two.
This starts out as a seemingly routine story about a typical high school girl, who's trying to deal with conflicting feelings, about her classmates; her maybe future boyfriend; her twin sister, teacher, mother, etc. In the middle of this, she learns that she is someone with magical powers, and that she has to be careful using them.
This means that she's going to be dealing with very dangerous temptations. That alone is enough to make this reader curious enough to continue reading any continuing chapters, and find out how she deals with them.
If you're not writing fiction, and you really feel as bad as you say, this may be helpful.
Ephesians 6:10-20:
"Finally, be strong in the Lord and in the strength of his power. Put on the whole armor of God, so that you may be able to stand against the wiles of the devil. For our struggle is not against enemies of blood and flesh, but against the rulers, against the authorities, against the cosmic powers of this present darkness, against the spiritual forces of evil in the heavenly places. Therefore take up the whole armor of God, so that you may be able to withstand on that evil day, and having done everything, to stand firm. Stand therefore, and fasten the belt of truth around your waist, and put on the breastplate of righteousness. As shoes for your feet put on whatever will make you ready to proclaim the gospel of peace. With all of these, take the shield of faith, with which you will be able to quench all the flaming arrows of the evil one. Take the helmet of salvation, and the sword of the Spirit, which is the word of God.
Pray in the Spirit at all times in every prayer and supplication. To that end keep alert and always persevere in supplication for all the saints. Pray also for me, so that when I speak, a message may be given to me to make known with boldness the mystery of the gospel,for which I am an ambassador in chains. Pray that I may declare it boldly, as I must speak.
I have apparently made a posting error. Right now, at the top of the contest listing, I see my short story "E-Mails in a Vampire Town". That was intended to be an entry into the "Para Normal Romance Short Story Contest".
I just joined this website about one week ago, and I'm finding it very confusing to work with.
Will someone please explain to me exactly what I should do to correct this error?
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