Brilliant how you've twisted this around to say the exact opposite of what you truly mean. Subtle yet profound (does that make any sense at all? Hope you know what I mean by that.) . No suggestions for improvement. I'm no expert or editor. Great work. Carry on.
Wondeful little poem! You definately have a clear understanding of ironic humor. As I've mentioned before, if ever you have the chance and/are so inclined, read a bit of Roald Dahl's poetry. Very tongue-in-cheek, as well.
Once again, Brian, excellent work. You needn't feel so unsure of yourself. You know how popular the Transformers were. :::smiles::: Kids love the idea of inatimate objects coming to life and you've phrased the incantation quite well. Good luck with it.