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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote an interesting essay about the challenges and gifts of living with dyslexia.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I really liked this essay. You are lucky that your mathematical talent turned on at the beginning of university. Mathematical talent turns on in young people at some time, and then the C to Fs turn into surprising As.

Well done writing a great essay.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of red soil in june  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a captivating poem about a family spending the day outside.

Grammar and spelling are good in the style of e.e.cummings and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, especially the ants.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, it's all calm until the end.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, it's very clear.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a beautiful acrostic about your new dog, Allie.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of Allie would be great and really suit your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's a story of joy after sadness, rather than conflict.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a nice, heart-lifting poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a lecture on metaphysics that was hard reading. The gist is we can create our own paths, opportunities, in life.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a road would be great and really suit your writing.

I found your essay hard to read because of the writing style. There are many groups of oppressed people who don't feel they have equal liberty to create their own futures. Many people of all walks of life have had the experience of no opportunities.

Well done writing an encouraging essay.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Moving On  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem and prose about it being time to let go. You wrote from the heart and that communicates really well.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found one phrase that isn't a sentence,
- A painful, yet meaningful.

Well done writing a cathartic piece.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Rule Seven  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a compelling short story adventure set in our community.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, a surprising one.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a perfectly good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The All Seeing  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

You wrote a cool free verse poem about a mysterious thing.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I needed to read the prompt to correctly guess what the poem is about. I'm glad you included the prompt or else this mysterious topic would have been tough to review.

Well done writing an interesting puzzle in a poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

You wrote a beautifully colorful scene.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing although some of the colors in it aren't vermilion and lemon yellow.

I found vermilion is the spelling you want to use.

Well done writing a great scene. It would be great to do something with it.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of THRENODY  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a funeral poem for the beloved.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

The message is confusing, for example,
- For I will be a companion when my leaves get dried.
Leaves? Body?

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Well done writing a heartfelt poem full of sorrow.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a free verse poem about depression and its sometimes final ending.
I liked the fairy tale you included as that's how the light feels when in the dark.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, contemplating something big like the cosmos makes the poem interesting.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

I always struggle with free verse poetry because it doesn't sound natural to me.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The well  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a good hallowe'en story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found " within the waters flow" needs an apostrophe: waters'.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

The narrative sounds natural.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Excellence  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote about excellence you see in various life situations.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found you didn't touch on excellence in school work. It's different from the life of service that strikes you as excellent, and it's different from the workplace excellence you reject.

Well done writing your opinion clearly and concisely. You make readers think about the word.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Unmasked  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a flash fiction story about a thief.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

I found the ending surprising.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, and the punctuation is good.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story in so few words.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Tenari  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a definition of an obscure word, possibly a word you invented.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but the joke is private.
A cover image of a canary would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I had to read your sample sentence twice to be convinced of its believability.

Well done writing a definition. It would be nice to know the purpose or context while reading the piece.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a date.

Grammar and spelling are mostly okay and distract me a little.
Genres are mostly well-chosen, but erotica would suit more than writing.com.

I found several mistakes, here are a few:
- less glamour short red dress - glamourous
- the brunt cake - burnt
- it's ok,it's might a too well done - space after the comma, and, it might be too well done.
Read your story aloud to catch these kinds of mistakes.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

They're predictable.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

It's okay.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Dialogue should be punctuated correctly.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote an interesting sonnet about living in the present.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem didn't take into account the natural grieving process that causes people to live with memories intruding.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Mere Luck  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a fun poem about luck and fate.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

They're a little shallow but it's meant to be a funny piece, so it's okay.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the monologue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No, but that's okay.

Well done writing a fun play with words.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Cross Words  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fun poem about almost solving a crossword puzzle.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes, I thought it was a couple's fight at first, but it was a struggle with a puzzle.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Clear enough.


Well done writing a fun poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of True or False  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)

You wrote a free verse poem of truths / opinions.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wondered why you chose these opinions to share. Nothing ties them together.

Well done writing an interesting monologue.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Shattered Ice  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a great free verse poem about overcoming old age.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of snow would be great and really suit your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, I was mesmerized.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, it's a story about being rejuvenated by snow and ice.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a poem with great visuals.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a short story with some unbelievable actions.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great but doesn't really suit your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

The characters were putting me to sleep, which I think was your intent. If so, well done.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No, it seems to drag on and the magic scene is too fanciful.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, a surprising one.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a surprising ending.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (1.0)

You wrote a few sentences to use while practicing Writing ML.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are not well-chosen because this is not action/adventure.

I found your writing could have been fun for you but the fun doesn't extend to the reader.

Well done writing an ML exercize.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote an important letter that expresses your perspective of your choices.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found "its own opinion on my choices" should be of my choices.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

You told a compelling story in your letter.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, but I would delete the phrase "on and on" to make it clean and tight.

Well done writing a good letter that I hope succeeds.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Indulgence  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a nice, short story with a surprising ending.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found you need a paragraph break after "you can see that didn't end well."

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, although the foreshadowing lets us guess what the ending is.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a nice story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Autumn on Earth  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a poem about autumn.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a pumpkin would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I liked how you focused on each month.

Well done writing an interesting poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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