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What I love most about this item is the clarity with which your communication is conveyed.
In sending this review, I am supporting your desire to be a writer. Rather than just saying, “you have a lot of typos, go find them,” I try to list them so it’s easier for you to find and correct them. Several parts of my review are subjective, especially the Language (in Form), Style and Poetry sections. If you have any questions about How, Why, What or Whom I review, please read "Invalid Item" .
All flowered and underlined subjects are given a rating out of five s.
5 : I was completely captivated and I felt welcomed into your world.
Outer Wrapping (aka: Cover)
5 : The Static Item Type is appropriate. The Genre is appropriate. The Introduction Content Rating is appropriate. The Body Content Rating is appropriate. The Title sells the piece. The Brief Description sells the piece.
Form (Grammar, Spelling, Typos, Language)
Mastery of language is choosing exactly the word you want to make the phrase you want so the whole thing works as you intend. Too often, we choose words that we think will do the trick, and in fact they don’t do very well. What some authors find the least helpful is a focus on grammar and spelling; they may feel it’s not very helpful in terms of overall writing improvement. However, typos take a reader’s attention away from the writing’s purpose. Too much repetition counts as a typo. Sometimes rules can be broken, but only if it’s right for the story or context in which the broken rule occurs.
4.5 : I found nothing to distract me! However, I feel the statement, “Like a knight, on he mounted; Down he counts: Coming o’ splendid morrow!” is punctuation-heavy. How do you feel about it?
Style (Theme, Plot, Layout, Character Development)
Good structure keeps the piece clean and easy to read. Sentences flow, paragraphs tell miniature stories (they have a beginning, a middle and an end); and the flow of paragraphs actively moves toward an end.
5 : I found your work original and I wanted to keep reading. Surprisingly for such a short poem, characters grow as the writing unfolds smoothly and leave me with no questions. If I’m meant to interact, I can do so with confidence.
Content (The quality of information disseminated)
Does your work move its type ~ poetry that captures the present moment ~ to a new level? If not, how close does it get?
5 : I would recommend this to others with confidence. Whether fiction or non-fiction, I was left with no questions and feeling that I gained in understanding without much effort on my part. Your writing carried me.
Writing poetry can be very cathartic. However, it’s important to remember that the reader wants to share an emotional experience with you. It’s important to let the reader in, and to let the reader remember their own emotions in response to their own similar experiences.
4.5 : Your poem is true to life experience and is deeply moving. Visually, it is clean, offering few distractions (apart from aforementioned punctuation) from the experience of your poem; I felt like I was there. Your choice of words was perfect for carrying me through this experience.
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Star Total: 5 + 5 + 4.5 + 5 + 5 + 4.5 = 29
Averaged: 29 / 6 = 4.83
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