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I try to give comprehensive reviews.
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I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review of Election Day 2016  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a poem about the election in 2016.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found wind’ll blows isn't grammatically correct. I would drop the 'll, or replace it with it.

Well done writing a good poem expressing election hype.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem asking what the meaning of life is, and finding an answer.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem is free verse with a rhyme scheme you kept to sometimes. Anti-corruption is a big wish. It's interesting that your answer is to spread equality.

Well done writing a poem on a big topic.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a free verse and very abstract poem about a mountain seeing Earth and listening to space.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a mountain would be great and really suit your writing.

I found aplazcement maybe was meant to be aplacement, and silenting was perhaps meant to be silencing.

It is too abstract for me.

Well done writing a poem expressing an unusual perspective.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Memories  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a very long prompt in front of a poem. Your poem matches the prompt given.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the prompt quite long to read. The poem doesn't say whether the son died or grew up and left home.

Well done writing a good description of old age's awareness of the precious memories of youth.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a fun free verse poem about how to make a sheppard's pie.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a sheppard's pie would be great and really suit your writing.

I found repetition of 'of course' in one line doesn't work. I wonder how the pancake mix on the bottom turned out.

Well done writing a free verse poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fable in a poem. Nicely done!

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the description could have a space replace / in mouse/who .
Prevention as the moral of the story makes a lot of sense. But else boom then bust doesn't make sense in the story about a mouse seeking food.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (1.5)

You wrote an essay on Thanksgiving.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could include a cover image that is great and really suits your writing.

I found a few distracting details,
- whats - what's
- Thanksgiving should have a colon in the first and last lines.
- The thankful phrases aren't sentences.
- thankfully, thankful is over the top.

Well done writing your feelings about an important day.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of ROSE AND THORN  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a nice poem about the thorn guardian.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I liked the way the thorn spoke.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, you made the outdoor rose bush clear.

Well done writing a nice poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about cacti.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found one distraction,
- were on cactus that had never - cacti


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes. Extinction is enough.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, it's beautiful.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, and the names are good, too.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a short story that I found a little too short. It would have been nice to see it developed more.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of WHY I LIVE?  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem about the need to find purpose in older ages.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I could really understand the point of view you expressed because I've been there. The lack of purpose we feel as we grow older isn't depression. Hopefully the character you wrote about finds some purpose.

Well done writing a great portrayal of an important insight.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Imaginary Friends  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
General Comments

You wrote a choppy story that has dangling details. For example, what became of the universe Henry was creating?

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. Dialogue isn't in good paragraph form, though.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found there were sudden jumps in your writing. Suddenly Lunar arrived. Suddenly Lunar and Henry, who just had their first dinner with parents, are having a shower. It's too sudden.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No, it moves along too conveniently and without making sense. The family is put off by Lunar's weird eye make up then increases the relationship.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No. Read any fiction book to see how dialogue is punctuated.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fun story about an inheritance.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a story in a poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a short, inspirational piece on how wonderful exercise can be if a person finds a sport they like.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. The yellow/gold color text is hard to read.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself thinking but what about people who find exercise boring, or really difficult? Not everyone can relate to your ideal of how exercise should be.


Well done writing something inspirational!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Nancy Grace  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about an alcoholic. You chose interesting names for your characters.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found a couple of details distracted me.
- + is at the end of paragraph 4.
- The smiley face at the end could be an Author's Note.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, it doesn't flow naturally in some places.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Revenge  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story filled with idoms, per the prompt.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush, isn't quite what the police would say. It doesn't sound natural.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, because of the heavy use of idioms as the prompt required.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.5)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a dying robot in a futuristic society.

Spelling is good and doesn't distract me.
Genres experience doesn't make sense because you aren't the robot and you haven't lived in this futuristic society. Also, the robot probably doesn't need to eat food.

I found many grammar mistakes and some of your sentences aren't really sentences.
- The colour now stained yellow from the prolonged exposure the solar radiation.
- the words then replaced by report to incinerator 451. - put the report in quotes.
- Then a sudden blow to the back of his head.

You type as though you are talking. Written English is very different from verbal English.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

N/A

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a scene from a futuristic society.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a great short story with a surprising ending.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

N/A

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of American Ply  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a fun poem celebrating Americana.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found you made good use of the prompt and I like the way you included the prompt in small font at the bottom.

Well done writing a nice poem. I liked it.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of I Miss...  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a poem with rhyme scheme abcb.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but I'm not sure where the philosophy is in the poem.

Story Comments
It sounds like the writer misses someone who's never been met. That's a little confusing but may be the intended story. If so, it's a neat idea.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Anatomy; a family  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote about family connections. It wasn't clear whether your poem has a religious meaning.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the subject of the poem isn't clear because of the heavy use of pronouns. Only the title gives a suggestion.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Número Seis  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a concise thought and an important insight.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. The genres give important context so we know what you're talking about.
The image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the word count is more visible than the words, which I didn't see until the word count told me to go looking for words. You could develop your insight.

Well done writing!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Tangled Web  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a captivating story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I hope you publish your story because it is better than some published short stories I've read.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes. A little more background would be interesting. What did they do before they were chosen? How were they chosen?

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, well done.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of IF I HAD KNOWN  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a touching poem about rethinking a marriage.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found perhaps doesn't rhyme with steps.

The character is engaging and there is enough conflict that your poem tells a story. The action rises to a climax and the monologue is good.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a free form poem about achieving the goal of being alone in nature. You've captured the mood of being alone with trees in the night.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the last line needs a comma after nothing.

Well done writing a poem that captures the mood you wanted.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Forest Sunset  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem about an amazing photograph.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the 2nd line about trees confusing:
- thus to the sheet of fiery waters,

Well done writing a free verse poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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