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Rated: 13+ · Assignment · Emotional · #1515324
Using Freitag's pyramid
L2, Assignment #1

"I'm glad you don't mind taking this stuff off my hands."

Exposition
Eric had come to say goodbye to me and the cat we had shared. He brought with him bottles of liquor and the last contents of his freezer. Things that he could not transport through Canada but did not want to throw away. We unloaded the box in relative silence.

The cat stood in the hallway, watching us the way cats do. She radiated that same mixture of nonchalance, interest and haughty pride that the big cats do depending on whether you are prey or predator. She started licking a paw in anticipation of playtime. He always played with her.

“Cat’s here.” I said.

Rising Action
He turned and walked over to the cat. She rolled over onto her side and began to rumble out a purr. He got down on his knees and began to stroke her body, whispering to her all the while.

“I’m going to miss you Cat. You’ve been a good girl. Good kitty.”

It was a little strange and a bit awkward to hear him say those things to the cat. He had never really said them to me. He stood and turned to me, tears streaming down his face.

“I’m going to miss you, too.”

I took a breath to quiet my building distress. Hold on, hold on. I had promised myself I would not fall apart and so far had kept that promise. I turned, grabbed a tissue and handed it to him. I would not be the one to quell his pain.

“I know."

Climax
Then he rushed me, threw his arms around me and began to bawl in bone racking sobs. Bewildered, I stood there in his embrace a moment before I pushed him away.

Falling Action
“Everything will be fine. You’ll see. I’m only a phone call away.” I hoped it was enough.

“Goodbye, Evie."

He gave me peck on the cheek and bolted for the door. I stood there, rooted in place, the pounding of his footsteps and echo of his sobs reverberating in my ears. I closed the door and felt a tear slide down my cheek. Resolution I never got to say goodbye.




L2, Assignment 2


Resolution
I never got to say goodbye.


Exposition I thought it would be a piece of cake. Eric was coming over to say goodbye to me and the cat we had shared. The doorbell rang and I opened the door to find him there with a box in his arms.

"Come on in."

"I hope you don't mind taking this stuff off my hands. I can't take it with me."

He had brought with him bottles of liquor and the last contents of his freezer. We unloaded the box in relative silence.

"Meow."

The cat sat in the hallway, watching us the way cats do. She radiated that same mixture of nonchalance, interest and haughty pride that the big cats do depending on whether you are prey or predator. She started licking a paw in anticipation of playtime. He always played with her.

“Cat’s here.”

Rising Action
He turned and walked over to the cat. She rolled over onto her side and began to rumble out a purr. He got down on his knees and began to stroke her body, whispering to her all the while.

“I’m going to miss you Cat. You’ve been a good girl. Good kitty.”

It was a little strange and a bit awkward to hear him say those things to the cat. He had never really said them to me. Then he started to rise and the sudden movement startled her. Climax She sprang straight up, landing unsteadily on his shoulder. Scrambling, she sank her back claws into the left side of his face ripping deep, ragged gashes from cheek to chin. She hit the floor and bolted from the room.

Falling Action
He stood and turned to me, blood streaming down his face. I grabbed a kitchen towel and pressed it to his face.

"You need to get to get that looked at right away."

“Goodbye, Evie."

He ran out the door and that was the last time I saw him.


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