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Rated: E · Fiction · Action/Adventure · #2188271
First book I ever wrote, all errors are intentional, let me know what you think
Along time ago there was a tale that was told by all of the old folks. They would all tell it the exact same way...



2:00pm, just got out of church, on my way to my friends house while eating chocolate lizards and playing my DSI XL. I finally arrive after a thousand hour car ride actually it only took half an hour. We decide that we got bored after hours of gaming so we went to get our girlfriends and our friends and we head out to the woods to hunt down a random animal.

We decide on hunting some quail. Everyone else stayed behind trees while I crept up and scared the quail out of a bush then all the others shot at them while they flew away. In all we had wounded and/or killed 15 quail so that was a pretty good dinner for all of us.


/This was beforehand. The story will now advance to inside a cave... meanwhile before the cave Shelby, the main characters girlfriend, is kidnapped by a slenderman creature called a unordinarion. When they enter the cave they see a lot of unordinarions roaming around preparing for something. But for what? Read on to find out./

We see all of them doing there preparing and can’t help but wonder what they are preparing for. I was looking around for any clues when the others told me they saw Shelby. I looked to where they were pointing and I saw Shelby laying limp on a pile of dirt. I went to check for a pulse with the fright of her, my lover, dead before me. When I put my fingers on her neck I froze with disbelief.
I see James approaching me “is she alive Quincy? Is she going to be alright?” I told him to feel for himself and for him to take a closer look. “Quincy I am so sorry for you. She loved you the same as you love her and I know that if you had a choice that you wouldn’t of brought her into this. If you need anyone to talk to I am here for you and so are the rest of the group.”


“Thanks James but I will be spending all of my time with her in the hospital. I will not leave her side until she can walk out of the hospital feeling new again.” “Ok man I will be up there with you in my free time but just saying I am here for you and I want you to know that but we have to do something about all of these creatures.”


We went back to where we left the group. Listen up guys we are going to find a way to see what they are preparing for. “What about Shelby? Is she alright Quincy?” My sister always asks questions about others before herself. “Yes Jasmine, Shelby is ok but she needs to get to a hospital soon. We have about two hours until she absolutely needs to be on her way to a hospital.” She didn’t say anything else because she knew I was hurting bad from what happened to Shelby.


I told everyone how we are going to do this so that they were all prepared. Jasmine is a certified emergency paramedic so she is staying back helping Shelby stay with us. I read up on some on these creatures and the books said there weakness was the tie. If the tie got damaged or pierced then the creatures would die instantly but while they go down they scream in a high pitched voice for others to come.


I told the others that we are going to have to seal the mouths of any we have to kill. Most of the creatures seemed to be going behind this big thing in the middle of the room and coming back out so we decided that we would sneak back there. Everyone watched as Trevor and I snuck around and saw they were piling food.


The sun shown through a big hole in the mountain and that was when we saw it. We were looking at a creature the size of a big hill and it looked just like these other creatures. Trevor and I decided to call the smaller one unordinarions. The big creature looked liked a bigger, more meaner, unordinarion.


We called it the unordinarion king so we could stop calling it creature. We went back to the group and we got them and lead them to where we were and told them all the names of the creatures and what they were preparing for. If we take out the big one while it is still asleep then all of the others will die. We need people to take out the big one while the rest of the group holds off the unordinarions.


James, Trevor, Rose and I will take out the big one while the rest of you cover our backs. We were headed back to where Jasmine and Shelby where at when we heard a loud ear piercing sound. We all turned around and saw it awaken. We ran back to the girls and defended them while we all shot at the unordinarions and the unordinarion king. We fired and threw all of our explosives a the king when the cave started to collapse. I grabbed Shelby carefully and we all rushed out of there. When we reached the exit we saw a bunch of different flashing lights and sirens coming into the mouth of the cave. We reached the outside and saw the emergency vehicles all over the place.


The paramedics came to look at us first. They helped the group until they came to me. They tried to bandage me up but I shooed them off me and showed them Shelby. They said that she needed to get to the hospital soon. They brought the medical bed and I laid her down gently. They tried to bandage me up again I finally let them only because it was on the way to the hospital.
While Shelby was taken to the ER where I couldn’t go the police came to question me. They didn’t get anything because I wouldn’t say anything until I saw Shelby again. They even had my parents try to get information from me, still no luck. They called the group to the hospital and questioned all of us but they wouldn’t say anything because they were all scared with me for Shelby’s sake.
Days went by, school break was over. The others went back to school but I stayed at the hospital waiting to see my love again. I haven’t heard anything from the doctors except that she was in good hands. At about 10:00pm one of the doctors came out and asked me how long I have been there. I told them the truth, ever since Shelby went into the ER.


The doctor told me to follow her. I followed her back to where Shelby was. She had her right leg broken by the unordinarion so she has a cast. She also had a fractured knuckle with a broken hand. She lost a 4th of her blood but she now has gained it back. She hasn’t woken up yet so they are hoping she will come out of her come


The paramedics came to look at us first. They helped the group until they came to me. They tried to bandage me up but I shooed them off me and showed them Shelby. They said that she needed to get to the hospital soon. They brought the medical bed and I laid her down gently. They tried to bandage me up again I finally let them only because it was on the way to the hospital.
While Shelby was taken to the ER where I couldn’t go the police came to question me. They didn’t get anything because I wouldn’t say anything until I saw Shelby again. They even had my parents try to get information from me, still no luck. They called the group to the hospital and questioned all of us but they wouldn’t say anything because they where all scared with me for Shelby’s sake.
Days went by, school break was over. The others went back to school but I stayed at the hospital waiting to see my love again. I haven’t heard anything from the doctors except that she was in good hands. At about 10:00pm one of the doctors came out and asked me how long I have been there. I told them the truth, ever since Shelby went into the ER.


The doctor told me to follow her. I followed her back to where Shelby was. She had her right leg broken by the unordinarion so she has a cast. She also had a fractured knuckle with a broken hand. She lost a 4th of her blood but she now has gained it back.


She hasn’t woken up yet so they are hoping she will come out of her coma. As soon as I walked in the room all I heard was “it’s about time you come back for me” I smile and walk over to the bed. I leaned over to kiss her forehead when I felt lips come in contact with mine. While I was kissing her the doctors were shocked at how she came out of her coma when I came into the room. I closed my eyes and enjoyed the moment.




To be continued...

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