Mon Amour

A song about obsession, lust and vulnerability. Will appreciate feedback :)

Mon Amour

Verse 1:
Those thorns
Just a whisper to my soul
Those eyes
Just an ivy crawling slow

Pre-chorus:
Velvet dreams are hanging high
A once-alive butterfly

Chorus:
Amongst the darkest of soul
It's your lantern I hold, high
Amongst the caged of the hearts
It's your crown that I hold, high
I devour your blood
Caress me in the mud
It's only you that I hold, high
Ta petite fleur,
Mon amour

Verse 2:
Those words,
Make my soul shatter in vain
That voice,
Could make even fire rain

Pre-chorus:
Velvet dreams once hanging high
Just a grave under the sky

Chorus:
Amongst the wounded of the graves
It's your love that I hold, high
If you were to ever burn down
It's your ashes I'll hold, high
I devour your love
I've bled like your dove
It's only you that I hold, high
Juste ta petite fleur
Mon amour

Bridge:
Shatter me once, shatter me twice
I ain't glass, amour, hear my cries
As I bleed, my screams are hushed
But still you're the only one I've loved
Juste ta petite fleur
Mon amour


(I don't hate it, do tell me what to improve and if it's good enough to be an actual song that I could record)