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 Genre(s):  Educational • Business • Parenting
 Type:  Short Story
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I'm entering this in the Official Contest. Does it meet the prompt? (Given in the dropnote). Does it flow, is it interesting? Are there any typos or discrepancies I may have missed? Any feedback most welcome. Thanks!

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His Mother Cried  (13+) For no fault of his #2349503 by THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping!

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Detective • Crime/Gangster
 Type:  Novel
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The Whate estate in Innsmouth. The story is about an estate in Innsmouth which has had some murders in it. The police are investigating the case, the police have found that there was a journalist whose body was found on the grounds in a thunder storm.

THE WHATE HOUSE in Innsmouth c1 & C2  (18+) The house was where a murder had occured. I am an investigator of the police in Innsmouth. #2348537 by PATRICK EDWARDS

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • Family • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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This is a short story, less than 2000 words. I appreciate any reviews. How did the story and/or characters make you feel? Did you want to read to the end? Writing craft suggestions also welcome.

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No One Was Looking at Me  (E) An award-winning author, a young boy's masterpiece, and a lesson learned. #2348448 by David C

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • War • Technology
 Type:  Sample
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Hey I wrote the first two pages of this sci fi script here I would like an honest review don't hold back please od like to better my writing skills and that means honest critisms

I write just for fun and am a total newbie

Thanks and enjoy

Intergalactic peacekeepers INTRO   (E) Born for service, trained for war — today, you become a peacekeeper of the Empire. #2347969 by Samuel E

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 Genre(s):  War • None • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi, i was trying a writing prompt about villain's last line. i just need your thoughts on this. this is my very first poem.

A villain's last line   (E) Stumbled upon a writing prompt about villain's last lines, so decided to give it a try. #2347372 by N.R.Nora

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Horror/Scary • None
 Type:  Draft
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I struggled to push this one down to a thousand words for a contest. Might end up expanding on it later. In the current draft, I'd like feedback on the overall vibe and suggestions to improve clarity and flow. Thanks!

Echoes Across the Stars  (ASR) Explorers investigate an odd Earth-like planet on the other side of the galaxy #2347123 by Corin Merek

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 Genre(s):  Opinion • Religious • None
 Type:  Poetry
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I haven't written anything for ages and wondered what you may think of this verse.

Hip Hip Hurrah  (E) A Celebration Of This Great Festival #2346937 by willy

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • None • None
 Type:  Novel
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This is 2 chapters of my current novel WIP, "Danica #1687 in Elysium." Although it would be ideal to read prt. 1 & 2 in my portfolio 1st, I am looking for 1 specific thing about Ch. 3: did I do a good job introducing the 7 siblings? Or are they too flat?

Danica #1687 in Elysium; Part 3  (E) This is Ch. C and Ch. 3 of my WIP. It's 4794 words #2346863 by DelusionsofDying

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Psychology • Emotional
 Type:  Poetry
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Poetry: is it clear, relatable, meaningful, universal, memorable? Or trite, cliched, predictable? Any feedback welcome!

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Dual Duel  (ASR) Facing down demons, rising above quicksand, overcoming obstacles and improving my outlook #2346826 by Amethyst Autumn Angel

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hi. Just seeking any and all comments on a recent piece of my writing. Thank you.

A Day in the Park  (13+) Started from a prompt. #2346759 by Skurpio

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Folklore • Paranormal
 Type:  Short Story
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Just looking for honest reviews and thoughts. Thank you.

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Lone Ole Cowboy  (13+) All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. #2336480 by Dan Hiestand

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Action/Adventure • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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This is the first installment of "The Galactic Hopping Adventures of Bahb and Errl, Exploration/Survey Team Zero-Alpha". Please let me know if you would like to see more.

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World Was  (E) The Galactic Hopping Adventures of Bahb & Errl. Exploration/Survey Team Zero-Alpha #1153591 by ♫♪JazzTbones

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 Genre(s):  Inspirational • Emotional • Romance/Love
 Type:  Short Story
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Reworked one of my first short stories and looking for honest critique

Strong man and the woman  (E) A story of admiration #2309913 by Port Lariat

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 Genre(s):  Inspirational • Psychology • Philosophy
 Type:  Poetry
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This post was inspired by some stunning yet very fragile and personal posts here. It’s for anyone, anywhere— a bluesy blanket to remind us no one is alone. Grateful for this community where we can share freely, and for those who encourage and inspire.

In The Beginning Was The Word  (E) It is an ode to the power of words! Please do read and drop a line or two. Thanks! #2345955 by Ra M

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Animal • None
 Type:  Novel
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I'm feeling a little encouraged after the first chapter got a good review as a static item, so I've added the next chapter to the book. I'm really just wondering if anyone finds this interesting. (YA anthropomorphic fantasy story)

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Prone To Wander (rough draft)  (ASR) When his family is taken captive "Ruben" sets out to find and rescue them. #2345548 by Brittany L. Engels

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 Genre(s):  Psychology • Spiritual • Relationship
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi, I am a newbie. I'd love an honest review. I am interested in flourishing as a writer. Thanks!

Alchemy  (E) A love story. Please read it and do drop a line or two. Thanks! #2345610 by Ra M

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 Genre(s):  Young Adult • Thriller/Suspense • None
 Type:  Chapter
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I am back after a long break. I edited this chapter and any reviews would be greatly appreciated

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Wisdom ~ Chapter 4  (13+) A typewriter given to Kaitlin by her grandmother is more than what it seems. #1981660 by Norswede

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 Genre(s):  Animal • Fantasy • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Fiction
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I've been working on this story, off and on, for several years. I keep trying to convince myself to write something else, but always come back to this. I've enjoyed working on it, and want to know if anyone would enjoy reading it.

Prone To Wander (Chapter One)  (ASR) When his family is taken captive "Ruben" sets out to find and rescue them. (Rough draft) #2345560 by Brittany L. Engels

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 Genre(s):  Satire • Experience • Comedy
 Type:  Novel
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Hi, Could you please take a look at this and let me know what you think? I know it is longer and has 3 chapters so far but I'm hoping it will grab the reader. I'd truly appreciate your comments.

Horrors of a Schoolhouse Asylum  (18+) In progress----Chapter 1,2,3 (The insanity of public housing!) Satirical humor... #2298869 by JoshingU

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • LGBTQ+ • Teen
 Type:  Fiction
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This isn't a new chapter. Sorry! Just an update, but a lot has been added and removed. It's worth a second read if you've looked at it before. Be harsh!

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Airplanes V2  (13+) Here's the long awaited... update? Not another chapter. Sorry. But there's new stuff! #2345238 by Ethan Wolverton

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Emotional • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Just tell me what you think, what's good, what's not so good, what you enjoyed, what turned you off... and anything else you want to say. I will, in return, review something from your port. Thank you.

The Sound of Plowed Earth  (E) Coming of age, first love #2345013 by Prier

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Action/Adventure • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Sample
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These are the first two chapters of a gritty sci-fi novel I've been working on in my head for quite some time. The full book is 80,000 words. I consider myself more of a storyteller who writes.

The Saurath Connection, ch 1-6  (18+) A mercenary is hired by a secretive client to help a detective find missing children. #2344934 by J. M. Grey

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Dark • Ghost
 Type:  Short Story
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I plan to submit this for publication in a magazine. Please share your honest opinion, even if it's difficult to hear. At the end of your critique, please let me know if you think this is ready for publication. If not, what needs to be fixed?

Lucas  (GC) Lucas didn’t believe in ghosts...until one refused to let him die. #2321393 by Shawn Odette

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hi, This is a short science fiction story about a quiet alien invasion. I'm looking for feedback on everything but particularly interested to know if it leaves you with a lasting impression.

Thanks in advance.

Motes  (18+) A short sci fi Story #2344209 by Dunstan Whitethorn

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 Genre(s):  Spiritual • Philosophy • Self Help
 Type:  Other
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Loneliness is a common curse among creatives, but it animates our art. Reviews of the writing are always respected, but I confess my main motivation is to assist all afflicted by this ailment. I hope this helps.

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The Luster of Loneliness  (E) A letter to the lonely, and a summons to the Soldiers of Solitude. #2342426 by Xenos Pseudonymous

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Hey Everyone,
I believe I'm stumbling into compiling a book of short stories. Please check this one out and let me know of your thoughts!

Four and a Half Minutes of Almost  (E) A moment shared. A silence held. Four and a half minutes that might have meant everything. #2342155 by GreenLion93

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 Genre(s):  Supernatural • Paranormal • Emotional
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my third short story, this time I'm trying my hand at supernatural. Does it work?

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Many Careful Owners  (E) A vintage American car with a deadly past leads to a fatal accident for its new owners. #2341951 by Bill Whyte

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Dark • Technology
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my second short story. After taking on board the issues with my first I'm having another go. Please be kind, unless it's really rotten of course...

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Hey, is that your new phone?  (E) Chilling events tied to a glitching AI phone turns stolen prototypes into a global crisis. #2340617 by Bill Whyte

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 Genre(s):  Relationship • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Prose
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Seeking honest criticism on strengths and weaknesses and wanting to gain a viewpoint on how different people view my work.

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A Guilty Hand  (13+) Perhaps this was truly a test of my love. #2341739 by IV

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Family • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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The Svenson family is on vacation in a foreign country. They are visiting several cities in this country, and the last six have been beautiful. This family thinks the next one may be a paradise, but they are also having some problems getting there.

Paradise Awaits?  (13+) Everyone has a vacation they will never forget. This is that vacation for the Svensons. #2341638 by PureSciFiPlus

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • LGBTQ+ • Teen
 Type:  Fiction
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Please be harsh with your critiques I can take it.

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Airplanes  (13+) Two grounded teens exchange paper planes and fall in love, without ever seeing each other. #2340666 by Ethan Wolverton

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 Genre(s):  Opinion • Personal • Writing.Com
 Type:  Prose
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Trying my hand at some blog-type, non-fiction opinion pieces. Is this entertaining to read? Interesting? Should I do more? Any feedback on writing style is welcome, too! Thanks!

The Problem with Writing  (E) Originally a blog post, now a static item -- wanted an easier way to share it. #2340391 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Thriller/Suspense • Crime/Gangster
 Type:  Short Story
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Ginen is a Taker. He has been Taking things from the planet Zeeon for almost all of his adult life. Lately, he has been Taking the six of the other nineteen SpaceGems on Zeeon he hasn’t taken so far. He still hasn’t Taken the one he wants most of all.

SpaceGems  (18+) Ginen has been looking for a specific SpaceGem. What will he do after he finds it? #2340200 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Fanfiction • Tragedy
 Type:  Fiction
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I'm writing a fanfic for a friend's character, and I'd like some input before sending it to him! I've covered much of his story, and a lot had to be omitted for the sake of the story, so I'm curious to know if it still works as a stand-alone.

Love for rose's thorns  (13+) Can a man who committed countless atrocities love himself? #2339931 by Esion

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 Genre(s):  Writing • Personal • Philosophy
 Type:  Poetry
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I’d love any input on this free verse poem. Please just tell me what you think.

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I’ve lived a thousand lives  (ASR) A free verse poem about immersive narration #2340069 by Christopher Roy Denton

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mythology • Scientific
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello, I wrote this piece, called "Merge." I'd like to know what more serious writers think of it.

I realize the rhymes are a bit weak. but comments about how i could make better schemes from the style I use would help me tremendously.

Merge  (E) This piece is about a different side of nature some humans interact with. #2339518 by asylum

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hello, while this story is incomplete I still would greatly value feedback, thank you!

Trial by Fairy  (13+) An Orc stands trial for killing a human (Incomplete due to writers block) please be honest #2339155 by Fake Nate

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Part of a cycle of sci-fi stories called The Exiles. Looking for honest opinions and critique. I know I can always do something better: any ideas?

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All the New Gods  (13+) Polides rules the new world, and the path to the old gods is closed. But by whom? #2337539 by Jeffrey Meyer

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Second chapter of a story I'm working on. i'd appreciate a review on it. though please spare us any confusion about the story itself by reading the first chapter. thank you.

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Memories by colours(2)  (E) Chapter 2: Green of a new chance #2338057 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Music • Romance/Love • Relationship
 Type:  Poetry
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They take a deep dive into the emotions I felt after I lost my first love to Alcohol addiction. Not lost in the sense that he passed away, but they he became consumed by the addiction. I would love you to have a read and hear your thoughts :)

Echoes of Us  (E) . A poignant narrative about the lasting impact of a past relationship. #2337706 by Warm_Ri_Gards

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 Genre(s):  Nature • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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my first story in years, so i want to see how the first chapter does. thank your in advance for your patience and review

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Memories by colours(1):Blue of hope  (E) first chapter of many for the first story i wrote in years. this is a work of fiction. #2337817 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Paranormal • Detective • Writing.Com
 Type:  Short Story
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A short story about a private detective. It's a work in progress, and I'm adding chapters as I go. Would love some feedback on how I'm doing so far! Any tips or pointers on how to improve would be incredible. Thanks!

Another Day in Paradise  (E) A work in progress short story about a private detective. Adding chapters as I go. Cheers! #2337333 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Chapter
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I have just written the first chapter of medieval fantasy novel. It involves an emperor who wants to protect his daughter form the e forces who are attacking the kingdom.

Marissa's Return C1  (18+) The emperor is concerned with his daughter being in Cyka, #2336872 by Richard Allen Edwards

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • History • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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Just read and tell me what you think, is it good enough to publish?

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Bacon Biscuits and Fried Pies  (E) A nostalgic piece about ordinary people set in the 1930s and early1940s in USA #2336896 by Prier

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • LGBTQ+ • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Second attempt at putting this story together. Could use some outside opinions to help me see what's working and what isn't. Fair warning, this is about 8 pages long, so definitely not a short story.

A Debt to Darkness - Chapter 1  (13+) Opening chapter at a first novel attempt. Lilith Underhill is trapped in a backwards city. #2336877 by Intoxikatie

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Children's • None
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my first Children's story. I haven't decided if it's publishable, but I'm looking for help to improve.

The Brothers and the Allegory Rose   (E) A short story about not letting your heart harden. Aimed at younger kids #2336672 by GreenLion93

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Death • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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Is the timing, theme, and overall feeling working? Are the small details saying what I want them to say? Saying something else? Saying nothing?
Let me know!
Thanks in advance

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Time  (E) You got another chance in life. To restart knowing what you know today. Would you do it? #2195865 by Mark Diaz

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Drama • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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First draft of a story that I’d like to continue and would like reviews on

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A Love Beyond Pain  (13+) Greg longs to hear the word, "Daddy," but he's given up hope. #2333086 by Charles's Cornucopia 🦃

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Tragedy • Animal
 Type:  Short Story
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This is the first short story submission I've posted to WdC, and twas the second one I've ever written. This is redrafted revised version 3. I am open to any and all feedback.

Are You Sleeping?  (18+) Would-be actor John O'Malley is resigned to his farming life in the Ozarks. #2335900 by Conrad Moriarty

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • None
 Type:  Chapter
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Continuation from the prologue of Blackstone Cove. This is a large chapter; 5265 words. How's the tone, the pacing and the action? Is the voicing enjoyable? Does it hold your interest? Because it's so large, it awards 5000 GPs. Thanks!

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Chapter 1: Call of the Sea  (18+) Chapter 1 of Brightstone Cove #2336286 by J. M. Kraynak

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