This is a very good free verse poem. I like the story that it tells to the reader. You have one line that is longer than all the rest.... maybe you meant it ot be this way though.
Second stanza, second line. Just my opinion, take it for what it is worth, but only my opinion
If you could find a way to tighten up that one line this would be a perfect poem
Overall: It's a great poem, except for what I mentioned, no grammical errors,
good rhythm, rhyme and decent flow.
Keep writing!!! WTG
Cissy
I wish you all ... Peace of mind, calmness of your spirit, joy over flowing, happiness in your heart, abundance of health and strength, and Love for the rest of your days.
Be Well my family and friends here at WDC.
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Oh MY !!!! Shi, This is something else... and the image fit with this poem perfectly! Tell ya what,
the next signature is free! I shouldn't have charged you a thing for this one and I want to make up for it.
Would you let me do that?
A very emotional free verse heart felt poem. And you told it so well.
Be Well my new friend
WOW! what an idiot! The dumb butt!!! That person really didn't think. And I for one do not expect to recieve
anything for free, but I do from ALL of you.. for this I am grateful. Your site saved my life in every sence
of the word. I thank you as humble as I know how. Wishing you, the StoryMistress and baby Jack, along
with all of your family, much happiness, good health and love the rest of yur lives.
Be Well my new little family, with much love and appreciation,
Cissy
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I could feel the motorcycle that you were talking about and the wind in my face as you road down the highway. What a wonderful feel that must be, a feeling of a flight to be free. Thank you for sharing.
Cissy
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I loved how you brought this story to life right before my eyes. Keep writing!!!
Cissy
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I just had to tell you that this gave me chill bumps !!!!! WOW! What an awesome poem of the
heavenly kingdom, what awates for us and God. Excellent!!!
No errors, for how could there be errors when you've got perfection. Great writing!!! Write on!
Cissy
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Oh Judy, I really do like this one... man have I ever been there, and sometimes still am.
I'm a recluse you see... I never go out of my apartment door except when I absolutely
have too once a month. No one ever visits, but once in a while a not-so-close friend
comes by to see if I'm still alive. I just smile an tell them I'm fine and send them on their way. Maybe one day I'll trust people again to be around them, who knows.
I'm so glad you shared this with us all... some of us (me) needed to read it.
Great writing! write on! No errors lady from what I can see.
Cissy
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If these were from your adolescence, then your writing today must outshine them
all!!! I really loved the " Button " I laughed, it made my day ! But I loved them all !
I'm off to read more... I love your writings, okay ... so you got me hooked okay? LOL
Damn girl !!! I wish I had've said this to my ex LOL, it sure would have made ME feel better!
I appaude you on a fantastic letter to your ex that didn't get delivered. This is one I wish he would have seen. But you know what? He just ain't worth it ! and you're better off without him. It'll take time but you will heal. It's been 10 years for me and I've finally gotten over
how shitty he did when he dumped me. Know what I got to say about these shit for brains
men? Their loss, because we are great women ! One day... there will be this fantastic guy
who will come along, and he will not be a shit for brains, he'll be good and treat you good.
Don't give up like I did on men okay? I'll be 50 in 6 months and let me tell ya... life can get
very lonesome. Don't let this shit keep you down on men okay?
Excellent !!! I love the two part poem. This is great, honest. I like the fact that you covered
both sides. Keep writing! You did send me some poems earlier but I was away for a few days... sorry about that. I love your writing
Your friend,
Cissy
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Couldn't have said it better myself ! Isn't it funny how two people can be thinking the same thought? I've had this experience myself. It's a great feeling to have such a sister.
Very good poem, I liked this a lot. It expresses true sisters of the soul.
Keep writing!
Oh MY !!!! This sounds like it is from experience. And if it is, my heart goes out to you.
What an aweful way to come into the world and experience as a child. This should happen to no one. This poem has emotion, easy flow, good rhyme, rythem and perfect meter.
My thoughts on this piece? Perfect!!!! my favorite part? " now things are better- her son has a mother! She fought for that title- she fought like no other."
Very moving... it brought a tear to my eyes.
Keep writing!
Hi Warrior Mom,
I'm your new partner it seems. I have been trying to get this letter to you for two days.
Something always keeps interupting me. So sorry about that. Now let's see if I can catch
up. I love the emotion in this poem that you have written in honor of your brother-n-law. And I think that you have a strong will to be able to write about someone whom you
were close to. I know because I lost my Mother last summer. I've tried to write about her but
what I have written doesn't seem that good to me. that is why I didn't send them to you to
read. But if you get curious and want to poke around my port, be my guest. It's in my poem folder. Excellent poem. Keep writing!
Your friend,
Cissy
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YOU my dear lady are an excellent poet. I just hope one day that I can be also... I love to write poetry more than stories at the moment. Keep writing!
WOW! Judie, If this is any example of your not being able to write poetry, then
I would LOVE to see what is your really bad writings! I got to tell you, this is awesome!!!
I can relate to this perfectly, been there. You're a better person than I though, I will not try again. I just can't seem to get past the ' trust ' part. Great writing!
An excellent write on education. I couldn't agree more. Teacher's should be
more aware of the student that isn't a " topper ". To me they are just as important.
Even more so because they need more guidience and help from the teacher.
This was a well written piece. Very informative, and educational.
Keep writing!
Your friend,
Cissy
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This was awesome!!!! I know it took a lot of guts to write it. I know how hard
it was for me to even try to write about mine. I honestly hope it get easier
with time for you, and the scares heal completely. Bless you dear friend.
I saw no errors that needed to be corrected, a very good write
Write on!
Cissy
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This was excellent. I love how you wrote this piece. A nice change from the
norm, a limerick of a klingon, who would have thought it could have been done?!
I like star-trek myself, but, I'm an old trekkie fan as well. I remember growing up
and watching star trek and loved hearing those words... " beam me up Scotty "...,
WTG I really liked this and I saw no errors. Good rhythm, rhyme, and a great
flow to it to make it an interesting read. Write on !
Cissy
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This is a very powerful poem. Oh my what a lovely way of discribing
contentment of your life and home.
SUGGESTIONS
There is only one small one, and what do I know maybe this is how you
meant it to be... last stanza, first line, first word. ' I'vs ' should it be " I've " ?
Simple typo I think but as I said I could be wrong here cause I'm still learning
so take it for what it is okay?
What I liked ?
The whole poem ! but, if I had to pick one part ? " Home " ...
this word throughout the poem, made this poem. Well done!
I wouldn't change a thing except for the one thing I mentioned
about the typo which is very easy, other than that it is perfect!!! Such an emotional
and beautiful poem of your life and Home! Keep Writing!
your friend and fellow WDC member,
Cissy
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From a cherokee woman's point of view, I honestly liked this.
It touched my heart . For you see my main indian totem
and spirit guide is the white wolf, and I can feel the wolf come to
life in this poem and feel his feelings. This is a very good write.
It seems silly to say this from a no one like me but I will just the
same. Please, Keep writing!!!!
You have a good imagination. I liked this story but, did she doubt Ben? doubt his ability to stay clean from drugs after their ordeal? And what was her Name? I don't think you
gave her one.... or was this a story about you and her name is yours? If this was your
first try at a short story then, you did an excellent job as a new writer
Keep writing!
I'd say that she said it perfectly! And I agree 100%. And anyone who knows you or of you,
would agree too. You dear Sherri are a true gem and a guardian Angel to us all. Thank you
for sharing this with us all.
Reviewing for BSFU & M4M,
I like this a lot. I can read into it so many different ways. And not just in a child like
manner of looking at and hearing a poem. This could stand for many things, and one of the ways I can certainly relate to. This is a very good poem. I honestly don't know why you would say on your port that you aren't a poet, you most definatly are! Write on!
Thank you for sharing, a fellow member of BSFU and M4M.
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I love the emotion in this poem that you have written in honor of your brother-n-law. And I think that you have a strong will to be able to write about someone whom you
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