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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Bon jour, Sheila, and happy (belated) 9th ‘birthday’ on here!
This is pretty darn wild, and pretty darn good! I thought it was great!
I wasn’t sure what this was about or even where it was going at first, but it didn’t take long to see that these ducks were observing their human counterparts in preparation for their next generation to hatch, and then beyond. The militaristic style you wrote this in was ingenious, and doing it chronologically worked perfectly! It’s written just like a real ‘report to headquarters’, including many of those terms you used! I think I’ve got a decent vocabulary, but to be honest, I had to look ‘victuals’ up.
And adding those humorous notes about the humans talking about ‘cute’ and going ‘awww’ was an extra treat! *Laugh* Thank you!
But it was that surprise/twisted ending that really made this shine! It never occurred to me WHY you were writing this report, and then to find out it was being used as a tool for human enslavement blew my mind! *Shock2*
That’s just wrong, my friend. WRONG!
Comments and suggestions:
‘...he will patrol(s) the creek when they are nearby.’
‘subletly' should be ‘subtlety’
Great job, ‘Whiskerface’! *Bigsmile*
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there, Pat, and happy (belated) 12th ‘birthday’ on here!
This is pretty good, and I can relate to Pat’s (yours?) physical ‘problems’.
I like how you used the stage as the setting for this, and using those high kicks was a good plot device. The main character (again, I’m assuming it’s you) shows a lot of determination and stamina, even in the face of adversity, but at least she still has faith in her temporary replacement dancer.
Great job with the spelling and grammar, and congratulations on that Grand Prize victory!
Comments and suggestions:
‘You had to grow an extra layer of feathers if you wanted to survive.’ (nice metaphor!)
As for being able to relate to this, I think I was in my early 40s when I first experiencing the physical ‘symptoms’ of getting older (I’m almost 55 now). I did a lot of hard, physical work when I was young, and I was even told by employers that I would end up paying for it a little sooner than later. My lower back get the majority of it, and in my 30’s I pulled my sciatic muscle (longest muscle in the body, from head to toe). There isn’t much the docs can do about that, and for years I woke up in the middle of the night screaming from leg cramps.
Anyway, well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, stay safe and healthy, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-My older sister was scheduled to have a hip replacement just before the world ‘changed’, but they had to postpone it.

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Jack, and happy early 13th ‘birthday’ on here (you ol’ coot! *Laugh*)!
This is neat! It’s not often I see a piece written in dialogue alone (unless it’s for the Dialogue 500 Contest), but it’s even rarer to see one written in the first person and ONLY uses that person’s dialogue! A one way conversation, so to speak, even though we know what the other person’s dialogue is! I actually wrote (a short) one of these years ago if you’d like to check it out: "Knock Knock" .
One thing this deals with is something a lot of father’s probably have to deal with: telling their lazy sons to ‘Get a job!’ Sadly, I have to confess to being one those sons, at least when I first got out of high school. Fortunately that didn’t last long and did get a job, and I didn’t have to have to have my dad tell me that.
I’m not sure who Ibrahim Khayyam is (I’ll google it and see what comes up) or if he’s just fictional character for your story, but his name certainly sounds Persian.
The spelling and grammar was flawless, and the whole piece read smoothly.
Well done, my friend! ‘Fruit of My Loins’? *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jack! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review of Washed Up  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Bon jour, SandraLynn, and happy (belated) 6th ‘birthday’ on here!
This is great! I don’t think I’ve ever written a personification piece, at least that I remember *Headbang*, but you did a cool job with this about a washer!
What I loved most about this was all those puns you used to describe what a poor washer has to through during its lifetime. I had no idea! *Laugh* Well, actually I did, since I worked for a year as an appliance repairman’s assistant, and I worked on quite a few washers!*Laugh*
I also enjoyed how you wrote this in the form a resignation letter, as well as how you signed it. It reminded me of that symbol that was used by ‘The Artist Formerly Known As Prince’ (God rest his soul!).
The spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!), and the whole piece read smoothly.
One tiny typo:
‘Somedays,I feel as if I've been pummelled through a wringer.’ (You need a space there)
Otherwise, great job! I don’t know how this did in the contest, but it looks like a winner to me!
Kee ponw ritin gon, SandraLynn! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, James, and happy early 18th *Shock2* WdC ‘birthday’ on here!
I’m no expert on poetry, but I thought this was pretty good.
It’s a very sad and touching poem, and you wrote it well. You did an excellent job of bringing this tragic event to the forefront, and I can’t imagine what so many mothers have had to through when receiving that letter. I think of all the brave soldiers who were M.I.A. in all the wars, and it literally brings tears to my eyes, Sadder yet is the fact that many of them will NEVER be found.
My father was in the Navy during WWII and I have a ½ brother who fought in Vietnam, but both of them were lucky to return home alive. And I had neighbor who fought in Vietnam and he always had a M.I.A. flag waving underneath the U.S. flag at his house EVERY SINGE DAY!
As I said, this is extremely well written, and that last line really hits home.
Well done, my friend.
Kee ponw riting on, thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Beholden!
This is good. There was a lot of different stories on this prompt, and they all had different takes on it. For only having 500 words to use, you did a nice job of writing something that could (or might have) really happen, even if it was to the extreme (with that much blood), and I can understand why it won! Congratulations!
I don’t know how you came up with this idea, but I thought it was cool! The concept of drowning in blood was rather original, especially if one didn’t know how to swim. But if one did know how to swim, you closed that up by having the dead bodies block your MC’s only way out! I don’t know if you had planned it that way or if it was a last minute spark of inspiration (I get a LOT of those in my stories!), but it worked out perfectly!
Flawless spelling and grammar, and the whole story read smoothly.
‘Sounds of breaking barrels and drinking commenced’ (No! Not the beer! *Laugh*)
‘The soft thump of bodies hitting the floor was a macabre rainfall.’ (great metaphor!)
Well done, Beholden!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and stay safe, my friend!

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Review of Room  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, there, Odessa!
This is kind of different, but different in a good kind of way. I like the reverse chronological way you told it as the seconds of your life ticked down, and it’s definitely an original way of showing fear, not to mention horror.
You did a good job with the descriptions. There was a little more telling than showing, but with a 500 word limit, that’s totally understandable; you don’t have a lot of room to use a bunch of similes and metaphors, so I can’t fault you for that!
As for your ending (both literal and figuratively), I didn’t see that coming. At least not for that reason. But then again, I don’t think most people would have thought that bomb disposal dude was the one who locked you in there and told you to cut the wrong wire!
Comments and suggestions:
‘Maybe I could improvise, hopefully I wouldn't have to.’ (sounds like a job for McGyver! *Laugh*)
Flawless spelling and grammar, and the whole piece flowed smoothly!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Odessa! It’s good to see you entering the contest again, and have a great day!

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Review of Brief Moments  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hi there, Maycee P!
For one of your first pieces on here, I thought it was interesting. I like how you pass through this area (or town) and see the different sights on your voyage to the unknown.
From what I gather, you’re using this trip on that road as an analogy of traveling through life: of what you’ve seen so far and what you have yet to see. And I’m guessing that a ‘frozen’ image, as you mentioned the gas prices never changing. If only it could be that way! *Bigsmile*
I also enjoyed how you used the man wearing the bicycle helmet and waving the sign, the storefronts, and the unknown drivers in the familiar cars as examples.
It’s kind of a nostalgic piece, and it made me think of some of my own memories, and hopefully some the memories I’ll create in the future.
Flawless spelling and grammar (thank you!), the sentence structure was great, and that ending was the perfect way to tie it all together.
Well done, Maycee!
Kee ponw ritin gon, have a great day, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you’re going to love it here!
PS- I noticed you don’t have any Merit Badges yet. Click on My Account (on the left hand side) > Achievements, and then go back and check your email. You should have a few surprises waiting for you there! *Bigsmile* You only need to do this when you’ve reached certain ‘achievements’ or ‘milestones’.
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jace!
I'm no expert on poetry, mainly because I don't understand it most of the time, but I do enjoy free-verse (because I usually CAN understand them!), and I thought this was pretty good.
I like the descriptions you used; the one about the parents sighing as their kids dragged them from rides to games particularly stood out to me, and it brought back a lot fond memories of my own visits.
I also like how you ended it: it's one of the more pleasurable moments we get to enjoy through this journey called life!
And it does indeed beckon all of us! *Bigsmile*
Well done, my friend! And very deserving of that ribbon!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jace! Thanks for sharing this (and the memories), and have a wonderful evening/tomorrow/year!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello there, Mia.
This is a sad piece, but I'm so happy you said it's not real. I've read a lot of Newbies on here who've written this same kind of thing, only to never hear from them again! Scares me to death!
Unfortunately, this kind of thing really happens where young kids don't think anybody is listening or caring about them. I was one of those kids a long time, ago, but I wish they knew people DO care and they WILL listen!
Even though you said this isn't real, if you ever feel like this, please email somebody on here! There's ALWAYS someone here that will give a shoulder to lean on or an ear to listen!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of The Storm  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Carly, and happy early7th 'birthday' on here!
For a short story, I thought you did a good job with this. I like the descriptions you used to show not just your fear, but also the beast with its 'putrid stench of death'. *Smirk2*
Writing it in the first person was a good choice, and the sentence structure was well done. And you certainly got those prompt words out of the way quickly! *Bigsmile*
Comments and suggestions (sorry to be so picky):
'Stillness fal(l)s before the tumultuous dance...'
'...barely able to make see my steps'
'lightening' should be 'lightning'
'scrapping' should be 'scraping'
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of The Night  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings, JesterDev!
This is pretty good. I like dark stories (I write horror), and you did a nice job with descriptions of the ‘un-rested’ rising from their tombs’. I also like the haunting flavor of it, but what stood out to me was how you changed from 3rd person voice to 1st person voice as you discover that YOU are now one of the ones who have been (or are soon to be) dancing with the dead!
Very well done, my friend! That surprise ending was perfect, and having this unnamed female and her hounds leading them all was a nice touch!
The spelling and grammar was great, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
‘...and every night no soul knows(,) nor dare they ask’
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and I hope to see you back here soon!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Bon jour, krichmond86!
I know this just one little story from your past, but it’s also a good, albeit brief glimpse into your childhood and where you grew up.
We all have stories from our past that stick with us through our lives, and not just the extraordinary ones, but even little mundane ones that we should have forgotten completely.
From what I gather, you grew up in a semi-rough neighborhood, but at least your folks were smart enough to tell you how to how to handle yourself in that kind of environment. I was born and lived in Anchorage, Alaska (a good-sized city, even in back then) for 11 years, so I know what that’s like. But after that we moved to Northern California (the REAL northern California up by the Oregon border, not San Fran or Sacramento!) and settled in a small town of 3,000 people. Weed, CA, to be exact, in Siskiyou County, where cows outnumber people 10 to 1. It was a good thing, too, because if I’d stayed in Anchorage, I probably would have been dead by the time I was 20 because of the all the gangs and crime up there!
Sorry, I digress.
You didn't say how old you were when this older brother fell out of the truck, but I guess it was either that, or how he changed afterward, or a combination of the two that made you remember this. Maybe something 'clicked' in him and he felt he should treat people better?
Regardless, nice job.
On a side note, I read your bio, and I think it's great that you want to share these memories with other people! Not only are sharing them, but they'll be good nostalgic reminder (in written form) for you in later years!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Krichmond! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful week!
PS-I have a memory of trying to jump my bicycle over a ditch and crashing really bad in front of my friends. They all came running up to me and could see I was pretty beat up. I was crying and they asked me if I was OK. Suddenly I just turned off the waterworks and said in a straight face, "Oh, yeah. I'm fine. Why do you ask?" They were puzzled for a moment and the we all started cracking up. I don't know why, but that memory has always stuck in my mind!
Weird, huh?

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello, Lola!
For one of your first pieces on here, if not THE first piece, I thought this was good. I've never done yoga, but I've heard it does wonders for some people, according to my sister. I could be wrong, but I think it kind of goes hand in hand with meditation somewhat.
I'm glad you're getting back into it and making time to get reacquainted with your 'old chum', not to mention how it's helping you heal since your health changed. I hope you're doing better! *Smile*
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot a couple of niggles (sorry to be so picky!):
'...I remember the positive experience i felt' (I)
'...I found great healing in this experience which isn(')t something'
Kee ponw ritin gon, Lola! Thanks for sharing this, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write (and according to your port intro, you do!), then you're going to love it here!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, Rhyssa!
I like this, and I think it pertains to not just poetry writers, but writers of all kind!
I know the feeling of WANTING to write something, but sometimes the words don't just come. Your idea of taking a nice hot shower seems like a good remedy, but I guess it didn't work this time. But I can't tell you how many times I've laid in bed, so close to sleep, and then...WHAM! Like you, I know they'll be forgotten my morning, so I jump out of bed and quickly get them down! Fortunately I've learned to keep a pen and notepad by my bed now!
I'm no poetry expert, but I thought the meter and rhyming was great in this, and you did a nice job of using the prompt words (I'm assuming they were prompt words since they were bolded).
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a great weekend!
PS-The very first piece I ever had published was because of nine simple words that came to me one night when I was on the verge of going to sleep: 'Close your eyes. Can you see it? It's coming.' *Bigsmile*

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Review of Beautiful Lady  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Chenincook!
As a lover, reader, writer, and judge of horror ("SCREAMS!!!" ), I thought this was really good.
You did a nice job of describing what this 'visitor' was doing to you, how she was 'playing you', and urging you to do things you normally wouldn't do. And giving us that bit of backstory of moving into that older house (which 'Mom' claimed was the cause of your worries) was good too.
But 'twas that ending that made this shine! Belladonna. Also known as Devil's Berries and Deadly Nightshade!
And to have said spirit kill your mother cuz she didn't believe you was perfect!
BTW, I also like how you brought the story full circle with 'Belladonna'! *ThumbsUpL*
Flawless spelling and grammar, and considering how short it is, I thought it was excellent!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Chenincook! Welcome to WdC, and if you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Achoo!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Howdy, Odessa!
First off, I've been a fan of yours for some time, so happy to see entering this contest! We need more contestants like you!
I thought this was great! Especially for only using 357 words! The imagery you used was perfect, but it was that professional dialogue and atmosphere you used that stood out the most. Having the soldiers going through all those channels and using those code phrases like 'code Xray Zulu Three Four' to get to the 3rd floor (which makes perfect sense, btw!) was perfect, and gave it a very realistic feel. The reader can picture the package being transferred from one soldier to the next as makes its way to our filthy and brain-dead lunatic-in-chief.*
But it was that surprise ending that really made this shine. OK. I knew it was coming, but I wasn't expecting it to be something as simple as some a bundle of used tissues!
BRAVO, my friend!
The spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!), and the whole piece read smoothly! I just hope that German Shephard made it out alive!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Odessa! It was pleasure to read, good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful weekend!
*I rarely speak my mind when it comes to politics on here, but I couldn't resist after reading this piece. As you can tell, I'm no fan of tiny little donna rump, and I have a sneaking suspicion you're not either since you wrote this! *Smirk2*

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Review of L'aura del Campo  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Howdy, Kåre!
This is great. I know it might not be in good taste for some folks, but we can't hide from the facts. This pandemic is out there and it's only going to get worse, so maybe adding a little jocularity to this situation might help ease it a bit. Some of the late night talk show hosts are doing it, so why not?
This is song I knew well from my youth, and it's probably one of Neil's most popular songs. Heck, I think some major sports team even used as one of their own songs!
This coronavirus isn't going away anytime soon, so you're parody of this song isn't just good advice, but a good warning too!
*Music1* No touching me,
no touching you... *Music2*
Well done, my friend.
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and have a great weekend!

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Review of Perspectives  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Bon jour, Fyn, and happy belated 15th 'birthday' on here!
This is very good poem, and it speaks volumes for what Thanksgiving is really about. We don't need to have a feast to be happy on Turkey Day; that's hardly what it's about. It's a time of getting together with family and friends and showing our appreciation for having them in our lives! And of course, giving thanks for what we have, even if it's just the bare necessities.
I'm no expert on poetry, but the rhyming and meter seemed good, and that last stanza says it all. It reminds me a little of Charlie Brown getting that scrawny tree for Christmas. It might have been ugly, but it still showed its true beauty and spirit, which like Thanksgiving, is what it's really about.
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Fyn! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of The King  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Howdy, Ken!
Caught this on a Read & Review, and glad I did!
For only using 100 words, you did a great job with this. At first I couldn't see how that 'scepter' fit into this. I knew what it was, but it was only after I googled it to see if it had any other meanings-which it didn't-did I see the connection to the blue pills. *Headbang*
Well done, you sly old dog! *Laugh*
Excellent use of the prompt phrase, and that ribbon was well deserved!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and may your days be long and you nights be pleasant! (hopefully without any blue pills! *Rolling*)

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for entry "Cheerleader... Moi? " 
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Kåre!
As for WdC, I have to confess to all of the above. When I first joined here, I wasn't sure what to make of it (mainly because of the overwhelming size of it!), or even if it was for me. But the more I became involved, and the more people I got to know, I soon realized I was becoming addicted. And I still am! There's rarely a day goes by that I don't sign in to see what my fellow WdCers are doing, and it always interests me to see what's happening with everyone else.
WdC is much more than just a community of writers; it's a family, and as such I know if I ever need an ear to listen to or a shoulder to lean on, somebody on here will be here for me, 24/7.
It's been a fantastic (almost) years, and I wouldn't give them up for the world!
Well said, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic day!

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Danshi!
This isn't bad, especially for your first piece on here. It's certainly different, but not bad! *Laugh*
You did a nice job with the setting at the pool, as well as prolonging poor Luca's agony as he stood up there on that platform waiting for his dam to burst! In fact, if I would have had a full bladder while reading this, I probably would have run to the bathroom! *Laugh*
Kind of like reading about some delicious dinner and you hear your stomach start to rumble!
Great spelling and telling, and that ending was perfect! And honestly, who can say they never peed in a pool before? *Wink*
Sorry to be so picky, but I do have a few comments and suggestions:
'Twelve year(s) old Luca'
“Nervous?”(,) his trainer’s voice startled Luca and he jumped.' (don't need commas if you used another punctuatin mark-there's a few other spots in this where a comma isn't needed)
'In his mind, it the kid moved slow as molasses'
'He bend down onto all fours in starting position' (bent)
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Danshi, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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Review of Man of Steel  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ahoy, Richard!
As a fan of DC comics and most of their super-superheroes of the 70's era, I thought this was pretty good. It's sort of a tribute to the Man of Steel, and I like how you included some his history, power, and his love life *Laugh* in this. I had no idea he was born on February 29th! Hell, I didn't even know they had a Leap Year on Krypton!
Ya learn something new everyday!
I don't know if you were/are a collector of comic books, but I had quite a few from the 70s. Still do (somewhere, maybe?). I even had a few 15 centers, but most of them were 25 cents. I was/am a big fan of Spiderman, though.
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, congratulations on the Writer's Cramp victory, and have a really groovy week!

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Review of Moment  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Jogan!
For only being 18 years old — you, not this piece *Laugh* — this is pretty good. It's obviously a way of looking at how we can deal with some of things (or decisions) that come up in our life, and I like how you showed both sides of what the possible repercussions might be if one were to indeed 'take the leap'.
This can actually affect a LOT of things we do in our lives. Strangely enough, the first thing that comes to MY mind is getting married! *Laugh* Isn't that one of the biggest 'leaps' a man has to take in his life?
Sorry, I digress.
Well done, my friend! The spelling and grammar was flawless, and you given some good advice. Just how good of advice it is will probably be judged by the ones who take it, though.
To leap, or not to leap? That is the question! *Rolling*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jogan, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write (and you said you did in your port intro!), then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Howdy, Ken!
'Oh, the places you went...' Doctor Suess. But more importantly, the places you took US!
What a cool little poem to pay tribute to one of the neatest poets to ever put pen to paper!
I thought it was great that you incorporated those different characters into it, and as always, your rhyming was spot on, as was the meter.
It even has the feel of a Dr. Seuss poem/story to it. What do they call those? Storeums? Something like that.
But even though those characters might be 'made up' by the good doctor, Theodor Seuss Geisel, they're still very real in a sense.
And they will live forever in every child's imagination!
Bravo, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a marvelously magnificent week!

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