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Review of Mirrors  
Review by dmack
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Smile* Hello W. D. Wilcox, This is one chilling story, but it left me wanting more. What happens to Ashley on the other side of the glass? Does she ever find her way back? What do her parents do when they can't find her? Will you ever expand this? Please do.

I will be back to your port to read more of your work.
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Review by dmack
Rated: E | (4.0)
         *Smile*Hello dark_angelfly, Welcome to Writing.Com. This is an interesting poem.
These are the things I would recommend:
         1. Upper case letter are for the first letter on the line, proper names and proper nouns.

         2. Some word changes for the sake of rhythm.
The blood on the earth

The fallen have strayed from the path

A dark angel patiently waits
For the awakening of the souls who knew
Who knew of the lies, torture and love

         3. As for a title may I suggest? "Dark Justice"

         Remember these are only suggestions, and there far more skilled poets on this site, who I'm sure will read and review this poem.

         Keep writing and let your voice be heard.
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Review of The Silent Reply  
Review by dmack
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Bakergirl,Well written.I like your style and I liked the way the conversation flowed. A very good lesson for all. Words can hurtso very much and what comes aroun goes around. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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