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Review of The Enigma  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Chuck,

I love this story, and thank you for your service to the country.

I love the flow and description.

Transitional Words Score*: 69
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 89
Vocabulary Word Count: 32
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.68%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): energizes, academic, battalion, philology, historical, linguistics, converted, arrogance, counterparts, rue

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 91* -> A
*based on college grading scale

NOTE: The grade above is NOT complete! We do not actually use a crystal ball to generate your grade. Instead, this grade takes into account spelling, grammar, word choice, style, vocabulary, and more; but it does NOT examine the meaning of your words, how your ideas are structured, or how well your arguments are supported. We should also mention that our automated grader doesn't always get things right (then again, neither does your teacher). So, please consider this grade to be one facet of your paper's overall grade.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved the story. THe dialog is smooth, and I was brought into your item by your good descriptions.


Stephen followed her through the side streets of Paris as they hurried down a back alley between an already-closed hat shop and a brasserie

should be

Stephen followed her through the side streets of Paris as they hurried down a back alley between an already-closed hat shop and a brassiere

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 3.235 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.

Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 98
Vocabulary Word Count: 35
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.87%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): concert, confidence, stumble, entrance, unique, clandestine, illuminate, meters, traversed, glow

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 92* -> A
*based on high school grading scale

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Ida


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Review of Desolate  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very well written story. I enjoyed the read and found no mistakes. I have found a new site that proof reads Items, and I really use it to try to give a more indepth review.

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 2.195 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.

Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Review of The Sword of Elam  
for entry "The Challenge" 
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have found a site that I have decided to put this chapter in to get your money's worth for your review.

First I want to tell you that I think that this is another well written chapter, and flows with the rest of the story that I have read so far.

Here is the proof read results.

Grammar Suggestions
No grammar errors detected

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 1.842 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.


Sentence Length
sentence info:
10469 characters
2227 words, average length 4.70 characters = 1.36 syllables
175 sentences, average length 12.7 words
38% (67) short sentences (at most 8 words)
9% (16) long sentences (at least 23 words)
52 paragraphs, average length 3.4 sentences
2% (5) questions
27% (48) passive sentences
longest sent 40 wds at sent 124; shortest sent 1 wds at sent 55

Transitional Phrases
Transitional Words Score*: 39
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range! Nevertheless, you may still benefit from reading the info below.
One sign of an excellent writer is the use of transitional phrases. Transitional words and phrases (e.g. therefore, consequently, furthermore) contribute to the cohesiveness of a text and allow the sentences to flow smoothly. Without transitional phrases, a text will often seem disorganized and will most likely be difficult to understand. When these special words are used, they provide organization within a text and lead to greater understanding and enjoyment on the part of the reader.


These words and phrases fall under a few grammatical categories:

• Conjunctions: but, provided, and, although

• Prepositional phrases: in addition to, in conclusion

• Adverbs: also, however, nevertheless



Transitional phrases may be used in various places in a text:

• between paragraphs

• between sentences

• between sentence parts

• within sentence parts



For example, you could write:

Form and function are central themes in Biology. However, knowing the structure of something does not necessarily reveal its function.

The word 'however' contributes to greater unity or cohesion between sentences.

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 88
Vocabulary Word Count: 41
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.31%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): entranced, reverie, champion, entrance, visage, growled, bode, animated, forward, poised

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 94* -> A
*based on high school grading scale

NOTE: The grade above is NOT complete! We do not actually use a crystal ball to generate your grade. Instead, this grade takes into account spelling, grammar, word choice, style, vocabulary, and more; but it does NOT examine the meaning of your words, how your ideas are structured, or how well your arguments are supported. We should also mention that our automated grader doesn't always get things right (then again, neither does your teacher). So, please consider this grade to be one facet of your paper's overall grade.

Sorry for the length, but it looks like the proof reader agrees with me. It is well written.

Thank you again for sharing this with us.

Ida


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The title caught my attention. I had to find out who this statement was being addressed to.

I love the story. The spacing is good on the eyes. THis is as great message. I could feel the emotions in this story. I really think that I really found this one story that I could relate to. The testemoney with in your words are touching.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Review of A Scarlet Ribbon  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

I like this story. The dialog is smooth. This is a skill that is not one of my best so I notice those who write conversations well. This one is easy to follow. The spacing between the paragraphs allows my eyes to read without the uncomfrontable squinting.


I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Romance/Love Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Review of Angel's Heart  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The dialog is great, and I am surprised with how well this is written. The descriptions are vivid.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Romance/Love Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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Review of The Debt  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Romance/Love Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
Ida

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for becoming a member of our writing.com family. I hope that you find this to be as much of a help and a home that I have since 2007.

I loved this story. I found it twisted my thoughts of relationships in the dark side of life. The spacing between sentences created a comfrontable read for my tired eyes.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


"Noticing Newbies Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 



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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
First welcome to the writing.com family. I have found so much support in my writing and in my life's struggles. I hope that you enjoy and find this a home.

THis is a great story behind the words. I truly enjoyed the smile behind this. I love that you have used space between paragraphs is something that I do not see often in a lot of newbies. This makes it so much easier for my eyes.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


"Noticing Newbies Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 



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Review of Moments  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the message behind the poetry. The flow was smooth.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


"Mystery Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 


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Review of Flying Fool  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


"Mystery Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great dialog. I loved the story and the flow kept my attention.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Horror/Scary Newsletter (March 27, 2013)" 

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Ida

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In affiliation with Blogging Circle of Friends  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a great story. I could see the events unfold before my eyes. The words are well chosen. I can relate to the nightmares and hoping that you wake up from one.

The chairs are hard plastic with a hole in the bottom cut out for our soilings to fall through.

The chairs are hard plastic with a hole in the bottom cut out for our soiling to fall through.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Horror/Scary Newsletter (March 27, 2013)" 

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Horror/Scary Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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Review of Adriana's Tale  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved this story, and I found that it is a great tale with strong emotions. I found it entertaining, and found few flaws. The site that I have been using found a couple mispellings, but without it I found no mistakes.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Horror/Scary Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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Review of Just $29.95  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This was an interesting story and I found the descriptions of the dismemberment on the word of the television was excellent. I am really happy with the way this is written.


I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Horror/Scary Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem. The rhyme was excellent, and the flow was great. I have a son that loves the heros. I cannot wait for him to read this.


I dont think this line needs the word wet. When he found it was wet.

I found this in the news letter

"For Authors Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved the raw emotions. I could see the events as you describe them to the reader. The character was well developed.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Drama Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well written, and the prompt is followed. I enjoyed the differnce in the way the characters spoke. This is a story that I would recommend.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Drama Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Review of Atlantis  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love the story. The flow is easy, and the dialog is well written throughout the item. The one thing that I really like is that the spacing and font creates a good read.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Drama Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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Review of To Shenandoah  
In affiliation with  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really think this is a well written and informative item. I enjoyed the story.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Drama Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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Review of Just Look at You!  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a sweet story that made me smile. The dialog was smooth and the read was interesting.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Comedy Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was cute. I loved the difference and it really made me smile.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Comedy Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Review of Weighing it Up  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
THis is a wonderfull and relatable story in a poem form mat. I really enjoyed the read. I am so happy that I have found it. July I will will be forty five in July, so I can really can relate.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Comedy Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" 

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Ida

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