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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I think pi was created to repel anti nexus canada bull rats. There are many other theories as well, like it was invented by the glorfing snarfles of garlock trolly shodes."

Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work!

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was quite interesting and creative. I thought the ending was nicely written. I could tell you put time and effort into writing this. You may want to consider breaking this into paragraphs to make it a little more readable. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

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Review of Living nightmare  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "My hands cuffed with all the sadness in this world and severed with all the loneliness that people endure

I still am able to smile knowing that there is hope for this world."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was full of imagery and descriptions. I really li9ked the last sentence, but I think it may sound better if you switch the "still" and "am." So it would read: I "am still" able to smile; knowing that there is hope for this world. Nice work otherwise! ^_^

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Review of Bathroom Floor  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "How long until my vision becomes blurred and the strength I have isn’t enough to carry on. But the cut slowly clots and the blood finally stops."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling:
Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem/short story! This was quite depressing. I hope that you do not cut yourself. This is a serious problem, and may require counseling. I am always here if you need someone to talk too. ^_^ I wish you the best. Nice work again! ^_^

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Review of Loving You  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "We are both cautious and wary of them falling,
but now as we surrender unto each other,
we allow ourselves to fall into that ever-deep, rosy red emotion.


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Run-on sentences. The imagery category is a run-on sentence. You may wish to consider revising. Otherwise, nice work. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was well-written and well-thought out. I found the imagery and descriptions to be amazing, and well versed. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The Lady then took each in hand,
She swore they'd never part.
So Shadowfax and Pegasus
Now pull Diana’s cart."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was beautiful! I found this to be well-written and the concept was so innovative. I have always liked myths and legends. Nice work portraying these in this poem/story. Great job! ^_^

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Review of Memoir  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Corren walked out of the room, content with the knowledge that although he may have gone unnoticed on earth his afterlife was the best gift he had ever gotten and if he could he would thank the boys that had left him to drown."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was well-written, but it was so sad. The ending was beautiful, but I could not believe how sad it was. I realize I have repeated myself, but it almost made me tear reading this story. Nice word usage and this was well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Tomorrow?  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I lowered my head and watched the semi crash into us. My head whipped back, and the last thing I ever heard was Sammie’s scream, the sound of compressing metal, and the bones in my neck shattering."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple of spelling errors in the beginning. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was kind of creepy and had a thriller sense to it. I enjoyed the ending, but it was depressing that she was actually the one who got killed in the accident. Nice work and very innovative. ^_^

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Review of Regret  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " A solemn frown went on my face, and I felt myself falling deeper and deeper into depression as I slammed my head into my desk, and moaned, “Those were the droids I was looking for.”

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was quite amusing, and well-written. I don't know if this is based on a true story, but if it is this is quite interesting. The ending was my favorite part! ^_^ Keep up the excellent work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "As Time’s beard extended ever further to his toes, he, holding the sun and moon in either hand, let the days rise and fall; and the storyteller’s tall tales grew ever longer, and ever more complex."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! I thought this was so innovative. I liked how the words were spoken. It was written nicely, and I can tell you put a lot of thought and energy into this piece. Nice work so far! ^_^

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Nataly del
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Review of I'm Still Me  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Recently I’ve been seeing some mentors who will, hopefully, help me out with some of my goals, which are, to get a job, make friends, and get some of my books published."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story/biography! This was so beautiful. I am giving you a perfect 5 for your courage to share your story. I wish you and your family all the best, and I hope that you achieve all you desire! I hope to see one of your books on the shelf! ^_^

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Nataly del
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Review of Tarot one  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Prosperous under the ten of coins, beneath the

star. The queen of swords cut to chase and said

to the fool "another endless journey, eternal

child, do say what you know. Give us hope to be

open to knowledge, for Innocence is taking

a chance to grow".



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I have also been reading tarot for years and found this poem to be inspiring. This poem was innovative and well thought out. Nice work tying in the tarot cards! ^_^ Nice work again! ^_^

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Review of Catching Air  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "“Are you crazy?” I screamed as the coaster accelerated into the first curve. Between screams, I sobbed as I chanted, “I’m okay. I’m okay.” Fighting panic, I kept my eyes focused on my shoes. As we finally coasted toward the station, I turned to Marty. “I never should have listened to you!” There was nothing there beside me, but air."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This story was quite interesting. I found the concept to be innovative and unique. This story was well-written and well-thought out. Nice job on this story and the creativity that is flowing through this piece. ^_^

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Nataly del
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Review of contradiction  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I don't know who you are, where I've been, what we are
It's not that I don't remember I don't think I ever knew
So tell me, what's my relationship to you?"


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem!This poem expressed true contridictions we all try to deny. Nice work portraying a diferent concept. I thought this poem was well-written and well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "They stood and made their way forward through the thick brush, trying to stay as true to the arrow's direction as they could."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was well-written and well-thought out. I found the concept to be quite interesting. The ending was pretty good. Nice work so far! ^_^

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Review of Wedding in White  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "“But I did.” He turned and left her standing in the aisle, a collective gasp swept through the church. Jessie collapsed in a heap of white satin, her heart shattered into pieces again."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This short story was well-written and well-thought out. I loved the ending. It was so sad, I really felt for the girl at the end. Beautiful story! ^_^ Keep up the amazing work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "For 18 days the whole world became amazed by 80 million very simple and very poor yet very generous people. If there is (and I sincerely doubt there is) a person out there who watched anxiously what was going on in Egypt and saw what these magnificent people were doing without as much as wishing he was among them… chances are he never will."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was inspiring and true. I would have to concur with you that Ehypt was on everyone's mind. Nice work on this piece. It was well-written and well-thought out. ^_^

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Review of My Favorite Swing  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I imagined that I was as big as a tree
and growing 88 feet every day.
Until I was so big I could drink from the clouds
and everyone would want to hear what I had to say."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was so cute. I felt so bad reading this. I had what some would call a "wild imagination" as a child. This related to me on a personal level. Beautiful poem! I am giving you a perfect 5 for the innovation and creativity of this poem. Keep up the excellent work! ^_^

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Review of The one  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "A classic brunette with a shining smile
All "petite" and proper
As delicate as a flower, not to be mistreated
Every part of her as beautiful


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I found one spelling error. I fixed it in the imagery category. Otherwise, Nice work. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a nice tribute to the one you adore. I have always found a lot of my inspiration to come from the love I feel for my husband as well. Love can be a great muse. Nice work on this poem. It was well-written and well-thought out. ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Her spirit
full of love towards everyone
who was lucky enough to know her."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was beautiful. This was very touching and I am terribly sorry for your loss. I give my deepest condolences to you and your family. It sounds like your Grandmother was a great woman. Blessings to you. ^_^

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Review of The little girl  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: ""Promise to remember me.
Don't forget!" her little heart spoke
I'm amazed at the memories
that the little girl's words evoked."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was beautifully written, and well-thought out. I found the poem to evoke feelings of the "little girl/boy" who is lost inside of all of us. I struggle to find her daily. Nice work portraying this! ^_^

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Review of War and Sleep  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: ""Remember, my good lady, you have my word," he says. "Please take shelter below and barricade the door. If fortune favors us, you will know my knock."
He closes the door fast and turns to him, and gestures him forward.
"And if it doesn't," Timmy hears Gerard say quietly, "All we will hear is silence."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was interesting, and well-written. I also thought this short story was well-thought out. The construction of this piece was amazing. Nice work on the ending. It was beautiful. ^_^

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Review of White Water Life  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The roar of water beckons me –
its song a soulful tune.
It recalls a lifetime’s symphony
among the boulders strewn."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was well-written and well0thought out. I found this poem to be inspiring and the construction was amazing. Nice work. ^_^

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Review of The Door Is Open  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "walk to the tree of life,
and consume
the food of angels."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I almost feel as though you have accepted death, come as it may kind of attitude. That is a good thing to aspire too. I must admit, I am still scared of the unknown. My writings will often times reflect this. Nice work on this poem! It was beautifully constructed and well-thought out. ^_^

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Review of unwanted  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "To have no friends to depend on
Is to make all hits punted
That is if you're unwanted."



Emotion: Very moving poem

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work. You may want to consider breaking this poem into stanzas. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem!This poem was very moving. FOr the majority of my life, and even now, I did not have friends to depend on. I can relate to this poem on a personal level. You poetry breaths reality; Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Sicily  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: Thank God for this day and the wisdom to meet the trials with grace that occur in my small sphere of influence."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! The ending was spectacular. I found this to be emotional, and beuatiful. This was nicely written and well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^

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