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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Suicidal "thoughts" running through my head
Like a cup overfloating with water. "
Emotion: Nice work
Grammar and Spelling: There were some words which seemed to be omitted by accident. I have fixed up the imagery category for you. Also, some of the wording such as to and too were confused at times. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was quite sad, and it was from the perspective from a girl who has been outcast. I think this was well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Puny bloodshot eyes crinkled with a sly smile, while an adrenaline rush stained his face red with perspiration."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I very much enjoyed how well written this story was. It was well-thought out and the concept was divine. I have never been much of a gambler, but I could sense how a gambler feels through this story. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Joy filled his heart but something else did too, confidence, something that helped him greatly through the rest of his writing career and his life."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was beautiful and I found it to be well-written. I liked the concept and the ending was nice. Good work on this story. ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "My stomach hit the floor
when you told me you may not love me anymore.
My emotions turned off
before I could scoff;
when you told me you may not love me anymore."
Emotion: Nic e emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I have tried to break this poem into stanzas to make it more readable. The rhyme was pretty well done. This was a well-thought out poem. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: “When I look into your eyes, can you see my soul?”
“I see nothing at all.”
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this dialogue! This was very interesting, and I could picturing have this conversation with my own reflection. You did a good job presenting an array of emotions throughout this piece. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The fire alarm sounded and suddenly there were bodies moving everywhere. Blake grabbed Jennifer’s arm and led her into the kitchen."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I very much enjoyed the ending. Nice work on this story. Some of the wording seemed a bit chopped at times "chimed in" and "countered." Overall, nice job! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "At one time the portrait was stolen,an unbelievable crime
Back in the Louvre,restored,her smile is still sublime"
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I very much enjoyed reading this wonderful poem! I especially liked the last stanza and the last sentence, it really put into perspective how special this portrait is. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery!
Emotion: Does not apply
Grammar and Spelling: Does not apply
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this artwork! This is an awesome signature! Nice work Alexia! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "And when you stand before Jesus,
You won't be denied."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was beautiful and I found it to be quite inspiring. The last stanza was my favorite part. Nice work on this! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "But a question by thy dear maiden fair;
“I wish to own a castle in the air.”
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was so lovely. I really enjoyed the ending the best. I could not believe how well-written this was. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "That’s how life should be,
And it starts with you and me."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was very thoughtful and well-written. I liked the ending. This poem reminded me of my husband; I really like poems like that. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Though it is a constant struggle, we must fight ourselves for our own freedom; to escape the box we naturally build for ourselves. Maybe it is in the choice to stop our search - our retreat from life - that we truly find what we once sought."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite intelligently written and I enjoyed the thought which went into writing this. It poses some very interesting questions towards the end. This was very well-thought out and it showed throughout the piece. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "And during my long, long, stay
I ask what did I do for this punishment I pay?"
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was sad and I felt the pain of the poor frightened girl. This was very well-written and well-thought out. The last two sentences were my favorite. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The man, after giving his wife a proper burial, devoted his life and wealth to freeing slaves and abolishing slavery."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story!This was a nice little fairy tale, but the ending was a little sad. Nice moral to go along with it. Nice job on this! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Squeeze the trigger, hear the crack.
The bullet's strength fills his lack."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I did not quite understand what fills his lack meant. Otherwise, I thought the poem was well-written and well-thought out! Nice work overall! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Basking in this timeless place,
My spirit is at rest."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem had a nice flow to it, and I enjoyed the rhythm of it. I liked the last stanza as it was my favorite part. This poem was well-written and well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The glamorous tight rope walker moves swiftly down the ladder in tandem with the triumphant music of the circus band, followed by her handsome husband and young son."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work! ^_^
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed these prose! These were well-written and well-thought out. I found the last prose to be very interesting and so evocative. I have never been to a circus, but after reading this I would like to go! Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " "Ailiena! Aneilia! Come down for breakfast!"
We mumbled our acknowledgment. Today is our 16th birthday."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: I have broken the imagery category up. When there is dialogue, it should be seperate. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! So far, it seems to be off to a great start. I like the concept of how they are twins and they are inseperable. In reality, a lot of twins are like that. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "It took away everything
Now I'm all alone with nothing."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was kind of depressing, but the concept was innovative. I enjoyed the ending as well. I found the ending to be interesting. Nice work on this poem! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Yes, I am unable to interact with humanity… but I am the only person who has ever been turned into peanut brittle and lived to tell about it."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling:
Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I did not quite understand why you had so many spaces in this story. The concept was interesting, although it seemed more like rambling at times. I did, however, like the ending. Nice work! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Silence, the wall is absolute
The mortar is blood."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was well-written and well-thought out. I thought the concept was very true. We all raise walls to protect ourselves. Nice work portraying this facet. ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "One day Lotus stole the blue from Barena's, the god of fire and destruction, purple flame to add more color to her gardens. Leaving it a deep red."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This had an interesting concept. I really liked the ending. Nice work on this story. This was well-written and well-thought out. Nice job again! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "All I know is he is not here
All I know is he is lost to me"
Emotion:
Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was sad, and I longed for the girl to find him again. A true friend who is gone can hurt us deep inside. This was well-written and well-thought out. Nice work on this poem! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Next time you're stuck just remember to calm down and relax and maybe even try one of these exercises."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This really helped me and gave me some ideas for what to do if I encounter writer's block. Nice concept and good job for writing a piece such as this. Nice work again! ^_^
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Left was smoke. Left was sadness. Left were useless thoughts trying to come up with an answer that wasn't there to be found."
Emotion: Nice emotion
Grammar and Spelling: Nice work
Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was fascinating, and I especially liked the ending. Emotions were invoked when reading this story, and the imagery and descriptions were excellent. Nice work so far! ^_^
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