This is so beautiful. I think you have briliantly described the writer within. I love how your poem doesn't rhyme...how it's just beautiful words describing what it is like to be a writer, to lock yourself away, in the safety of your own mind, your thoughts, where no one else can interefere. It's just you. I love this poem. I especially like it when you state near the end, "even when filled with doubt, ... I find the end of a rainbow." In fact, your whole last stanza is just lovely. Thank you for sharing something truly beautiful. -River Mckenna
A good example of those lives given to the service of other's. This is deep! It makes you stop and think. It reminds me of a poem I wrote called "The Peacemaker". These sort of people live on, giving so much, but much is left unfulfilled within themselves... and yet much IS fulfilled, because of the service rendered. It's kind of ironic, or two-fold. I really like how you relayed this message. Well done! This is wonderful writing... I enjoy your insight, and have made a note to read more of your stuff! -River Mckenna
You are an excellent writer... probably from years of experience. I enjoy poetry. My stuff isn't great like this though. This one is awesome! I love your humor and you have excellent rythym going on. I struggle with humor. I can't do it. Feel free to stop by my port and give me your thoughts on my work. I just try to write about stuff that matters to me. Thanks for sharing a great poem. I see that this already has 84 people who have rated it... not like you need another! But you're getting one anyway. See you around! -River Mckenna
This is good! I like your stab at sarcasm. It has such truth to it and is interesting to the reader, for the right audience anyway. I like how you painted the typical business man father on the telephone, ignoring his son. There is such truth to it, from the child learning reality from a stranger and how you liken government spending to death. This is fantastic writing. You say so much in such a short space. Thank you for sharing!
Hello Caroline! And welcome to Writing.com. It is such a pleasure to your work. Please note that the rating scale varies from person to person. To me, a 3.0-3.5 is average and well done, a 4.0 is excellent, a 4.5 is above and beyond excellent, almost perfect, and a 5.0 is perfection, it is deep and really moves me. Please don't take each review personally, as it is just a brief summary of what your work has meant to that person reviewing.
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I found the title to be very insteresting. It grabs the reader's attention because it's a contradiction in a way. I think this poem is deep and full of emotion. I especially love your last lines in each stanza. Take just these four sentences alone and it could be a story/poem in itself! Thank you for sharing a good write and I look forward to seeing more from you!
I get the sense of what you are are trying to say in this one, but there are some breaks in the overall flow. Be careful of wording, and certain phrases that are overused and have become generic in the general public. The depth and emotion are there, just zero in more on what it is you are really trying to say. Maybe take it line by line and examine each phrase. Please don't take this the wrong way, I wouldn't take the time to review if I was not a fan of your work. I just think this has the potential to be truly grand! So I am pushing you a bit. Thanks for sharing! -River
What an awesome topic! I suffer from insomnia, so I can identify with this one. My favorite part is the end, about it being 6am and having to still get up and face the day. Wow, that is the truth, isn't it?? I'm giving this 3 stars because it's good! It has potential. I think you can work more with the words--thesauraus some of these, examine deeper what it is you are really trying to say, focus in on the verbs especially, because they can really be the "meat" of description. Spend more time on it--and it will just ripen and become better. Please don't take this the wrong way. I never review anything that I don't think is good. This is an awesome start, just keep revising, I think you can go deeper. Thanks for sharing! Keep writing! -River
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I can't do it. Feel free to stop by my port and give me your thoughts on my work. I just try to write about stuff that matters to me. Thanks for sharing a great poem. I see that this already has 84 people who have rated it... not like you need another! 
But you're getting one anyway. See you around! -River Mckenna