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You pull the reader into a feeling of being a stranger inside her own body. Silence is both peaceful at times and yet can be maddening at other times. The good thing is, it may reinforce better things in our character and personality, just as one meditates much of the time in silence. 
My review has been submitted for consideration in "
Seriously, catching minnows sounds like a wonderful NC pastime for youngsters. Plus, they can be bait for larger fish. 
lMy experience when I first started fishing, which was relatively not very long ago, was at a pier in Sebastian State Park, Florida. So, I dealt with learning how to cast, get a feel for a fish nibbling and fight the surf at the same time. It was exhilarating! 
I became pretty good at it because I caught supper pretty much each time we went to the pier. Sometime I'll have to talk about the 6 foot Mako I caught one evening, by moonlight. 
I really enjoyed the story about your youth and catching minnows. I never know about the wasp-nest finagling for minnow bait -- but I do know now. I have been strictly a sea water fisher-woman. One day I'll do the fresh water fishing. I was told it can be quite memorable. I wondered if it could be as memorable as catching a shark as a newbie fisher? 
If something sounds too good to be true -- well you know the rest of it.
I enjoyed the story and the mysterious woman who seduced poor Bob with a promise of a Great Dane bitch's litter-pick. Bob is easy prey. 
Nice twist at the end of the story! 
I enjoyed this one because it gave me a chuckle. Thus, I am highlighting it in tomorrow's 
I see this as part of a series, however, this is the part that popped-up on the Read & Review selector. It works out fine, as the story could stand alone and the reader could fill-in any blanks by checking out the other parts of the series.
The story is written with a noticeable tension and sense of emergency. The reader is curious about what the husband got himself mixed-up with and what happened to the father.
could be used.
Oh, my, the heartbreak of a friendship torn apart is woven throughout this poem. It definitely appeared to be a one-sided trust-relationship between your two. That's a pretty tough thing to realize. I belive one would feel used and betrayed in that situation.
You do not end on a bitter note, though. Instead, you think of something about that friend that you really miss --humor. Humor is one of those things that make a bond between people.
Your poem itself is written as a free verse, thus no particular rhyming scheme or certain meter is used.
Well, I can totally commiserate with having to drive the snow-ladened roads. However, my experience is in New England, not D.C. That place is a nightmare to drive anywhere near it, any type of weather. 
I loved the smooth flow, the imagery you painted in my mind with your words and the fact that I no longer with winters as I am a snowbird. So that alone made me appreciate your poem more.
Your article is well written, easy to understand, plus, I learned there is a special NaNo tool -- the Counter. I understand this would be a fantastic help to those participants.
You are clear, concise and give the reader visuals to go along with it. Hey, I may join in just to get to use one of these tools. 
Oh, yeah, fine -- blame it on Webbie, and Ken. We are the WDC instigators of "dare you to enter" whatever contest happens to be of interest. 
The translation worked perfectly into the lines. The song has a sense of urgency as time is involved. It also had the sensation of time standing still, as when one is bored, it seems the hourglass gets clogged-up and doesn't drop a grain of sand. 
You always maange to take 
This is a catchy tune for the mind to imagine. I placed myself in the midst of the mist, the cobblestone pathways, personable pubs, and a cozy inn. Ahh, the scents and sounds do jump out at me. 
Fine rhythm and rhyme within each verse.
Beautiful way to describe the winds, "laughing." The sounds made by breezes can indeed sound like laughing when pushing through blades of grass, leaves of trees, hills or echoing valleys. The imagination runs wild with fertility for an awakening muse. May is the awakening of so much of nature, at least here in the Northern Hemisphere. Albeit a delayed spring in New England. 
I swear, you two guys are a fencing match of fun and humor. I think it's wonderful you took a comedic look at your friendship with Ken. Yes, everything you say about him is true. 
Then, can't we all just Ken-along? 
Thank you for sharing this heart-felt poem, and thank you for your service! You bring the reader into the mind and heart of a soldier being deployed, missing his family and describing all that he misses while away.
The reader can feel the loneliness, the heartbreak of leaving loved ones behind and not knowing if or when you'll all be together again.
The poem itself, did not appear to have a particular rhyming form, although there was some rhyme woven within. I see this poem as a free verse. I am quite the fan of free verse, myself.
I want to thank you so much for your service to our country. You are not thanked enough for the sacrifices made. Thank God that missile fell in a way which did not detonate it. 
It's lovely to dream and try to see ahead into the future. It is also wise to live in the present and enjoy each moment before it becomes the past. Your poem makes me think about. 
There are a few places where a different choice of word would work better within this poem. These are merely my thoughts and suggestions. 
The future may be uncertain, but living life the best way one can to help make those dreams come true is the best way to the future hoped for.
You know something? I was pulled right into this prose-like poem. It is food for thought indeed. I love the philosophical voice given to it and the outcome of events should one part of individualism be lost.
It is true that we have gifts given to us from God and may choose to use them, advance our positions in life, our views and most importantly be able to think for ourselves. We are not one huge blob of communal thoughts, acts and words, we are unique and bring our own ideas to the table to be considered. 
Otherwise, this poem hit home with so many events taking place now and how each individual must learn to think for himself or herself. There is not just one formulated plan for all in this world, but rather unique individuals who must find the knowledge needed to succeed. 
I used to live close to a Sees candy store. Thankfully, I do not crave sweets. However, every once and a while, I do partake of a piece of very dark chocolate.
Formatting issues in regards to spacing between paragraphs. Choose to either indent for a new paragraph, or use the easier to read method on WDC, double space between new paragraphs. It breaks-up the wall of words and is easier on the eyes. 
I love the romantic twinings and youthful hopes and dreams -- such a melody of the young at heart. I envisioned a young man beckoned by the lass, to travel across the Irish sea to be with her, a promise made. His heart led before his mind as he would eventually realized.
The sonnet's flow: Magnificent! Nothing mechanically wrong that I could tell.In fact, the beauty of it was rich, the moral of the story ever present, a lesson earned and learned. I see no lines out of place or anywhere that disappoints. Strong words are woven through adding emphasis exactly where needed. In my opinion it is perfection. 
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That aside, you rocked it with the last two lines. Great way to wrap it up nice and tight with good impact!
You brought your characters to life as I pictured a young man and Ol' Yellow, his trusty dog who could maneuver through the wooded areas with ease while his human followed, so as not to trip over rough and ragged pathways.
There are some grammatical errors here. I don't know if you were using a computer keyboard or created this story via smartphone, but it appears that the space following the punctuation marks is missing. 
The story could also use a couple clicks of the "enter" key, so there is a break in the thoughts. Otherwise it looks like one wall of words, which tends to be off-putting for potential readers/reviewers. 
There needs to be more development of characters and plot. 
I liked the mystery surrounding this woman.
I like that it made me curious and wondering what was in store for this character.
This is a fine start, kind of an outline of where to go with your characters.