Another good poem. I write very little poetry and cannot critique it intelligently,i.e. rhyming meter etc. It is a cute poem, and one I'm sure you will treasue.
I write very little poetry, so I struggle to understand the type of poetry you write. Understand I am impressed at anyone who writes any other way but rhyme I guess I keep looking for a story with an ending, and even though I know you have a story in there, I fail to see it. Remember again, I can't write your style I only try try to interpret.
Guess I was almost lost since there was no rhyming to the poem. Your comment about Agatha Christie led me to believe there had been something similar to her writings. I would be interested to know what your grade was on this and how the teacher viewed it. I love poetry, but this lacked something. Keep writing.
Thanks for the information on verb tenses! I have always had trouble in this area (I've been told). For the life of me when I read something I've written, I don't see it. I know what I'm trying to say, so when I write I'm thinking yesterdan and today so the flow back and forth isn't noticable to me. I've copied your letter so I can study it. Many times the comments on my port have been about this very subject with few showing me what they mean. I still need help in this area. Thanks
DATanner
ArkMom
This is a great story. I probably need to read it a second time to find errors, but all in all it does speak volumns for the restless one. I don't know why, but I found myself reading it fast. Maybe the flow of sentences - I'm not sure. I don't usually read as tho I only have a few minutes to get to the end. So I'm sure I can't tell you why I felt like rushing. Something to think about on my part for sure. Others may not see it, - so again "one man's (woman in this case) opinion. Keep up the good work.
This is very difficult to read. You may want to take a better look at your grammer as well as spelling. Maybe it is type errors, but your piece is filled with gramatical errors.
You do have a good idea going, but like I say, needs some work.
I needed this tonight. It is wonderful to be free, and the story that you intertwined is precious. I more than an child, but I can relate to a boy who would look forward to meeting his hero. I'll check out your other links another time. Keep up the good work.
datanner
ARK MOM
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