The Never-Ending Ramblings...

My Nano Novel

I finally worked on my novel this past weekend. I tightened up one small scene. i'll post in here for you now.

Dressed in dark clothing, the three of them moved quickly, weaving through the labyrinth of the unlit third floor office building.

"You DO have the flash drive...don't you?" the words hissed over Stephanie's shoulder. She could feel her heart thump hard and fast against her chest. Clandestine illegal break-ins weren't part of her normal everyday activity.

"Of course I do." Kerry's murmured response held what a the heck do you think I am, an idiot? tone. The trio had sixty minutes to check three, maybe four, computers located on two different floors --before they could sneak back downstairs, walk a block to where the car was parked, and head for home.

"Here we go," Steph said pulling off into a cubical. All three collapsed into chairs. Kerry's finger poked the power button to boot up Brad's computer. Nervous shallow breathing replaced speech. Every eye glued itself on Kerry, the computer hacker.

Steph heard the hum, before they saw...the overhead lights pop on, illuminating the entire floor. Her flesh crawled with fear. Everyone froze. Stephanie's mother cursed softly.

"Hide!" Kerry whispered. The women dove underneath nearby desks and pulled office chairs in front of them. Kerry remained seated, the pads of his fingers tapping on Brad's keyboard.

Scrunched beneath her hiding spot, Stephanie had a perfect view of Kerry's leg. She saw his hand fling an object in her direction.

The flash drive! She cupped her mouth to stifle a gasp and watched the drive skid across the floor. It ricocheted against the leg of the desk in front of her with a "clunk". Then, it changed directions. Now it headed toward her, spinning like a merry-go-round, before stopping its forward movement...inches out of her reach. Helpless, her eyes transfixed on the spinning drive, she heard a voice.

"What's going on here, Mister?" the security guard asked, voice filled with stern authority.

The sound of keyboard clicking never stopped. "I'm updating the system." Kerry's voice matched the security's authoritative tone.


I know there are still typos and changes i want to make. but i think, I'll tighten up all the scenes i like. Not sure if this approach is the right one, but it's the one i want to take...the one that leads forward on the path of learning...so, even if it's the long way around, i'm on it.

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