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 Genre(s):  Drama • Holiday • Comedy
 Type:  Chapter
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Any and all feedback welcome - Thank you in advance

Glitter, Glam, and Gutter Games  (E) Glittering chaos erupts as secrets, schemes, and comedy collides in a wild glamorous saga! #2333274 by betsie

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 Genre(s):  Family • Transportation • LGBTQ+
 Type:  Poetry
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Trying to get this poem ship-shape for potential submission to publications. Thanks in advance, happy to reward helpful reviews!

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Changing Scenery  (E) Thoughts on a train ride from Boston to Georgia (Writer's Cramp winner) #2331370 by Andrew

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Technology • Fantasy
 Type:  Short Story
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Hello, folks! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'd love to know if it flows well, if it's believable (if Bridgetta is believable, according to the context), and if some descriptions are lacking (like, should I describe Bridgetta and others more?).

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A Day at the Market  (E) Bridgetta is back at the market again. Except she noticed weird things she hadn't before. #2332716 by Cat Carroll

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 Genre(s):  Community • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review.

Serpent lies...  (E) How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering? #2110735 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Friendship • LGBTQ+
 Type:  Fiction
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This is a story I have written to go along my world building. The main character uses they/them pronouns and I'm wondering how it effects the flow for the reader. Any and all feedback is welcomed.

Kroon and the Minfur  (E) A short story of how Professor Kroon got their sight. #2332372 by Euri

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Chapter
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Looking for gentle, relevant critique. This was meant to be a one-shot that allowed me some practice writing dialogue. Looking for feedback on how well it flowed and the ease of reading, as well as any additional comments on the story. Thank you!

Rose and Steel  (13+) The vicious seduction of magic and madness. #2332170 by Raeanne Lynn

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Nature • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello! I'm just looking for some feedback...happy to exchange for a review of your own item of comparable length. Reviews are auto-rewarded 200 GPs as well.(if I did it right). Thank you!

Forever If I Have To  (13+) When it’s true love, you do what you have to 😉😊 #2331614 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Death • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello! I'm just looking for some feedback...happy to exchange for a review of your own item of comparable length. Reviews are auto-rewarded 200 GPs as well.(if I did it right). Thank you!

Epitaph  (13+) Wrote this a while back for the Cramp one day. We were supposed to write about an epitaph. #2331388 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Mystery • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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Taffane has been dismissed from her Cargo Controller position. She has been thinking about leaving this position for another one. Now, she knows what this position will be. Taffane wants to know what is really happening on their spaceship.

Finding the Truth  (18+) Taffane is about to lose her job for something she hasn’t done. So, why is she smiling? #2331744 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Dark • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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Got annoyed by the response of my earlier work being "too long", so I wrote a short story. Or I guess a shorter story. More experimental though, made up card game rules. Probably sucks though, even though I like it.

Game Over Cards  (E) High-stakes game, where every gamble turns far greater than just the cards over the table. #2331235 by WriterDudette

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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I need serious criticism of my prose, form, and the general quality of this story. I wished to create a mysterious modern fantasy based on an Arabic-Islamic gothic setting.

The Great Old Black Book  (GC) Ibrahim is a man on a mission in the desert. #2331099 by The Black Pasha

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Fantasy • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Short Story
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Is this really horror? It didn't place in the horror contest it was written for. Any thoughts appreciated!

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A Dangerous Gift  (13+) What do you do when you are a Fire Bearer? #2325662 by Amethyst Snow Angel

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Looking for overall reviews! Would love feedback on characters, worldbuilding, and the writing style in particular. Thanks in advance!

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The Eyes of the Goddess  (13+) "The Vessel of the South must burn away and burn anew. Let one fire dim, a new one burn!" #2330656 by Andrew

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 Genre(s):  Personal • Writing • Death
 Type:  Poetry
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Seeking honest and constructive feedback.

November Blues  (E) What I think and how I feel about this month every year. #2330262 by Imogen Elliott

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Nonsense • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Hey, I'm looking for reviews on this short story I wrote after staying up too late. Thank you.

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Glerald and the galactic dumpster  (ASR) Glerald Glert's diary #2330209 by fayebed

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Honest and helpful feedback please

Where Life Leads  (18+) Sample - please give me feedback #2329210 by Emily Whrights

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Experience • Romance/Love
 Type:  Novel
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an unfinished novel made up of diary entry of a boy in the 60s as he comes to fall in love with his best friend
and a bunch of sad,dark,and messed up stuff happens

Abby Lane  (18+) diary entries from a poorly raised boy as he falls in love #2328702 by ElytBlank

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 Genre(s):  Writing • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Looking for an honest critique.

A Doctor's Hope for Housing  (E) A Case-Study #2328615 by Eloi Serre

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Mystery • Romance/Love
 Type:  Novel
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A complete romance/mystery seeking reviews. There is an Auto-Reward of 1,000 GPs for reviews and comments per chapter (39 plus an epilogue). I always reward more for useful and in-depth reviews. Thanks in advance.

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Shadow of the White Woods  (18+) Exiled to a village in medieval Denmark, Stígandr struggles to right a wrong. (complete) #2300925 by K Renée

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 Genre(s):  Erotica • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Preface
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This is intended to be a prologue or preface to my novel. I wanted it to have some erotica in the story's theme but more on the romantic side with emotional closeness and involvement.

This moment is supposed to be a highlighted moment between them.

A Sentimental Affair  (GC) He is married, She's been through trauma. Holding on by a thread, yet only he can see it. #2325340 by Barbara Williams

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Detective • Drama
 Type:  Chapter
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Chapter one of a murder case.

Murder Of A Woman Chapter One  (18+) A murder case #2326916 by Sunny

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Horror/Scary • Occult
 Type:  Fiction
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Finally finished. Added section 15 and 16. Scenes aren't in Chrono order, but as I think explains stuff. Love to hear your impressions.

Fireberry Fever Dreams  (18+) Everyone is the Chosen; everyone, the villain. Right or wrong, you must decide. #2295918 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Western • Crime/Gangster • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Short Story
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I am 2 and a half chapters into my train robbery story. I would like other's feedback on dialogue, pacing etc. I haven't been writing for long, this is my first attempt, actually. I have had no training. I just read a ton of action-adventure stories.

Blaze of Glory. Chapters 1-5  (18+) A group of outlaws plan to rob the Union Pacific Railroad. It doesn't go well. #2311904 by E. Scott Ieppert

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 Genre(s):  Community • Contest Entry • Writing.Com
 Type:  Non-fiction
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Without Writing.com Life would be impossible. Like a black hole. What if?

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The Black Hole  (E) What if WdC did not exist? #2326306 by WakeUpAndLive

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Horror/Scary • Paranormal
 Type:  Short Story
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hello! i wrote this recently a few months ago after a bout of writer's block, so parts of this may be a tad stilted, but honest reviews will be majorly appreciated! i want to get back into writing more seriously :)

a haunted house, a picket fence  (18+) you can run away from home, but you can't run away from who you are. #2326466 by cherub

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 Genre(s):  Mythology • Inspirational • Community
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review, will be worth your time!

Insert title here  (E) Free your mind #2105379 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Nature • Spiritual • Romance/Love
 Type:  Poetry
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His floral devotion to Mother lives on.

Her crooked smile hung upside down.
Mother couldn't right her happy frown.

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Her Crooked Smile  (E) His floral devotion to Mother lives on. #2085712 by Brian K Compton

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • None • None
 Type:  Chapter
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Anything goes critique! I'm looking to improve my writing style, and I believe this was a good second step to take.

Aegis 2 - Heist  (E) Catalina and Mira go on a little heist for Avery. #2325287 by R.S.V.R

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Inspirational • Death
 Type:  Prose
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In a battle-hardened lost colony named Larrikesh, Caleb meets an urban legend on a mission from the Stars.

In the few days he has left, can he help Scarlett learn the lesson she thinks she is sent to teach?

Never So Alone (c. 11,000 words)  (18+) As time runs out, a woman out of myth stalks Caleb across the ruined world of Larrikesh. #2325371 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • Relationship • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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This is a entry for a Prompt Contest based on "What If?" Looking for some suggestions and helpful remarks. I made this with a writing style I've been recently using. I don't know if it's any good or if my previous writing style was better.

Throne of Lies  (ASR) Contest Entry for 'What If' Prompt #2325254 by Korosu

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 Genre(s):  Writing • Experience • How-To/Advice
 Type:  Poetry
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Please be as thorough and honest as you can. I am not afraid of constructive criticism.

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The Poet's Challenge  (E) a challenge to just write #2325121 by JMariah

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Animal • Satire
 Type:  Non-fiction
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Would you mind reviewing my newest item?

Hot Pursuit.   (E) It happened at the library. #2324904 by SilverMoon♡Cupid

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Action/Adventure • Detective
 Type:  Novel
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Liam is a new comer to the island , he finds himself in a bind with a missing child case. In the process he finds love that he never could have imagined. This is first try for me at writing romance. I just need an honest review.

Sun Kissed Love  (18+) Liam an out of work plant manager moves to the islands finds love and a whole lot more. #2324229 by Dark Sniper

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 Genre(s):  Business • Technology • History
 Type:  Other
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I want critique on the article I'm trying to write that may be going in a public newsletter. It may be "out of chronological order" already. I labeled this a "private for my eyes only" so if it doesn't appear to you, I will need to change it to what???

How My Small Business VBCT Began  (E) Coming full circle to help others regarding the technology world around us. #2324741 by Vicki Lynne

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Family • Emotional
 Type:  Novella
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I'm looking for someone willing to spare time to give some honest feedback so I can improve this chapter of my novel :)

Glitch - Chapter 1: Numb  (E) Luka, struggling after his father's death, receives a message from a hacker "Nightshade" #2323857 by Kate

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Biographical • Experience
 Type:  Poetry
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An emotional piece for me. Rated XGC, and may not be something you would enjoy reading. It offers a small glimpse into my past

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Seven Years  (XGC) My memories had vanished. I recognized faces, voices, but not the bond I held with them. #2324153 by Allan Charles

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Teen • Supernatural
 Type:  Fiction
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Looking for critiques on how I can improve my writing and storytelling.

Genesis  (E) Genesis tells the story of Seven individuals, whose collective story will impact the world #2324098 by ProtoGen

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Emotional • Entertainment
 Type:  Short Story
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Please review my short story and give me some feedback. Thank you so much!

Core of A Dying Star  (E) This was my 6th grade fantasy short story. #2323960 by ElaraFox101

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 Genre(s):  Psychology • Paranormal • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Jacob extended his arms towards the echoing object, which seemed to be within reach, but he was unable to touch it. His eyes were riveted on his arms, which stretched upwards against the wall. A shiver went down his spine as he noticed how filthy he was.

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Tick...Tick...  (18+) Jacob felt tears forming in the corners of his eyes, not sure what to accept as reality. #2323231 by Allan Charles

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Sports • Other
 Type:  Novel
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This is the first 2 chapters of my novel. Looking for any constructive comments good or bad. Thank you

Run for the Roses (Chapter 1 and 2)  (E) A girl, a trainer, and a jockey defy all odds to win the Kentucky Derby. #2321457 by Zeke

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Writing • Experience
 Type:  Chapter
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Started writing a memoir about my journey to achieving my dreams. It's still rough and this is only 1 segment of it. I want to flesh it out, put it chronologically, at some point. But as a late night musing...I'm wondering if it's any good.

Starlight, starbright: Wishes and Dreams  (E) A memoir of how one girls dream became reality #2322856 by martiangrl

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Friendship • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Collection
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These stories are my first attempt at a fantasy series. I know that they are both long but would love to hear what you think.

Blessings and thank you - Moonie

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The Adventures of Alyson Whitecraft  (13+) Adventures of a young witch, her mother, and her best friend. #2321701 by MoonChilde

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Dark • Ghost
 Type:  Short Story
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It is said that the old man Hoffman's house is haunted, but Lucas doesn't let that stop him from exploring the place. Looking for opinions on plot, dialogue, flow, mood, and whatever catches your eye enough to make a comment about.

Lucas  (13+) The Hoffman house was haunted, they said, but Lucas doesn't believe in that sort of thing #2321393 by Shawn Odette

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mystery • Other
 Type:  Chapter
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The first two chapters in an epic fantasy novel. Bit of a slower starter, but I've tried to pack it full of atmosphere and mystery.
Does it still entertain? How immersed and invested were you?

The Living Fourth: Chapters 1 and 2  (13+) A boy with no memory, in a world with no mercy. #2319667 by Inkly Ascension

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Family • Friendship
 Type:  Fiction
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The latest draft of my manuscript. It has gone through many revisions and edits based on the great feedback I've received here, as well as from other sources. Did I finally get it right?

Thanks in advance!

Roy

Nosedive No More  (E) A young bat has to master the art of landing... Bat Style! #2225657 by Roy

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Writing.Com
 Type:  Fiction
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I wrote a short story. It has a dragon in it. Let me know how I did. All feedback welcome and super appreciated!

OI! DRAGON!  (E) A short story about fate... or something. It has a big dragon in it, at least. #2320689 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Mythology • Adult
 Type:  Novel
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A scary story. Please review and analyse the storyline and how I can improve it (somehow)?

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Jackabus Perfume  (XGC) A game hunter discovers that some beasts are not to be messed with... WIP #2269381 by safire_diaz

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Comedy • Other
 Type:  Draft
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I wrote this and I would like some analysis on the humour and the storyline, since it's supposed to be a comedic short I wrote!

The Supervillain's Cape  (E) A draft I wrote when I had sudden inspiration #2277917 by safire_diaz

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Drama • LGBTQ+
 Type:  Short Story
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Super nervous about this! I've wanted to write it for years, but it's such a delicate subject. Does it work within the word count? Is it impactful, respectful, understandable, trite, predictable? Just in time for Pride. Any feedback greatly appreciated.

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Let's Hurt Tonight  (13+) Don't walk away, don't roll your eyes; if this love is pain... #2320665 by Amethyst Snow Angel

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 Genre(s):  Personal • Emotional • Tribute
 Type:  Other
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I would appreciate it if you reviewed this piece. I was trying to go for an epic that left someone thinking about it for a while afterwards. Hope it's up to standards.

Life  (E) A short epic about life. #2320167 by Monster V.

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