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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Mystery • Tragedy
 Type:  Fiction
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Quick concept chapter...reworking an old idea for a story that's been in my head for ages. Quick read. Is intriguing enough for you?

Terabytes and Graphene  (E) Opening/chapter 1 with hook...a love story, essentially #2304978 by Wrath.of.Khan

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Contest Entry • Biographical
 Type:  Short Story
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Practicing first person POV/character work in the form of a flash fiction piece, limited to 300 words. How did I do?

The Sunflower Samurai  (E) A flash fiction entry #2304927 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Action/Adventure • Satire
 Type:  Novel
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I've posted the next chapter of my novel.

Reviews and comments are appreciated.

The Confederation: Disunion--Chapter Six  (13+) Chapter Six: Child of Hell JJ Robinson II #2304763 by JJ Robinson II

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Romance/Love • Mystery
 Type:  Novel
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A historical drama with a bit of mystery, a little of the paranormal, and a generous helping of romance. I would love any kind of feedback on this novel, especially anything past chapter ten. Thanks!

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Shadow of the White Woods  (18+) Exiled to a village in medieval Scania, Stígandr struggles to right a wrong. (complete) #2300925 by K Renée

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 Genre(s):  Ghost • Other • Other
 Type:  
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Please review Chapter 2 of the Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge; check syntax, clarity, typos, and reader's enjoyment. GQ

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Chapter 2 The Long Drive to Montana  (13+) Amanda Stewart, with Uncle Jim & Aunt Agatha, begin the long drive to Montana. #2302851 by GaelicQueen

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 Genre(s):  Ghost • Mystery • Other
 Type:  Novella
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Please read Chapter 1 of The Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge, check for syntax, clarity, weakly written sentence and did you find it enjoyable enough to read further. Thank you for your time and comments. GaelicQueen

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The Haunting of Stone Mountain Lodge  (13+) Amanda Stewart inherits a mansion and discovers it is haunted by the original owners. #2304619 by GaelicQueen

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Other • Other
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Folder, contains chapters 1-5 of a complete novel. Need reviews &comments.

"It is written that the road to damnation is broad, and easily negotiated. It was with such ease that a decisive nexus of human history came and passed, almost unnoticed."

The Confederation: Disunion  (13+) The Confederation: Disunion novel #2300733 by JJ Robinson II

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Religious • Cultural
 Type:  Short Story
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Starving author looking for feedback on a piece I believe has merit. Interested in being a better all-around writer. Your critical review, veteran insight, or reader's opinion is greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time and readership.

The Brothers [Complete Short Story]  (E) Two estranged brothers meet to contemplate the meaning of life, religion, and happiness. #2304488 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Regional • Sci-fi • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Since I haven’t gotten any reviews on my SpaceHorrors short stories yet, I was debating whether to ask for a review or not. I figured I might as well. After all, I do have a few weeks until the end of the month. Maybe I will get one or two this month.

The Creators at the Pleasure Paradise  (18+) A new Paradise Land Mass was about to open. Along with its very own DeathBringer. #2304456 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • History • Other
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi there! The prompt for this was "the importance of roots". I've been on a black history kick lately, & I would love some feedback on this one--although I do really like it. I'm happy to exchange a review of your item of comparable length. Thanks!

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We Planted Roots  (13+) I found a prompt somewhere that said to write about "the importance of roots"... #2300982 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Nature • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi! I wrote this for the Cramp. We had to title it "September Storm" & one of the genres had to be nature. The nature part threw me for a whirl but then I decided to go left with it. Would love your thoughts. I'll exchange a review of comparable length.

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September Storm  (13+) They wanted to stop the storm but they couldn't. #2304277 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Nature
 Type:  Novel
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Hi, wanna swap reviews?!

Would love to hear an HONEST opinion about this fantasy novel (chapter 1). I'm trying to write in a quick and nimble fantasy style - not trying to spend two pages describing a mountain range. Don't care about grammar.

Old Magic  (13+) Ayu breathes magic, like all his people do. His story begins with a battle he can't win. #2303991 by JulianBenabides

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 Genre(s):  Comedy • Adult • Inspirational
 Type:  Poetry
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Song that I have been writing and editing on and off since around 2005. First time posted here.
Have the music in my head to go with it, upbeat and fairly fast.

I would really appreciate honest reviews and ratings

Gonna Live until I Die!  (E) Song I have been writing forever, trying to "fine tune" it, forgive the pun. also a poem. #2303976 by Elby Wordsmith

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 Genre(s):  Other • History • Family
 Type:  Chapter
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Any reviews are welcomed and appreciated!!!

A Petulant Life part 2  (E) Violet- Early Life #2303763 by Chasing Grace

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Foreign • History
 Type:  Fiction
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Hi, all. I am looking for a serious, thoughtful review of this work.

Thanks in advance!

What dreams are made on...  (13+) Hannah learns something new #2266682 by Averren

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Other • Other
 Type:  Chapter
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Monica's stalker tries to get close.

Ch 2 Monica.  (18+) A narrow escape. #2294765 by Bruce.

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Folklore • Inspirational
 Type:  Poetry
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I have completeda set of 21 short poems (8 lines each) and illustrations for a childrens picture book. The complete project review is worth 10,500 points. Review of individual poems are worth 250 points per item Details in linked project introduction,

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A Children's Book of Tarot  (E) A children's book of timeless wisdom #2301783 by Shepard

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Death • Other
 Type:  Sample
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Scarlett reads the mind of a man she is stalking and learns as much about her own history as about Brannon.

Genesis of an Engineered Agent  (13+) The supporting heroine discovers that she has always been the real hero #2301440 by Joto-Kai

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Chapter
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New writer, wanted some criticism since I wanted to get into writing stories!

Arcane Ascension: Prologue   (13+) Young heroes unite, wielding magic against a dark force to save their world, Nova Zora. #2300244 by Zachary Wright

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Fantasy • Teen
 Type:  Short Story
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This is an almost 8,000 word story about a girl visiting the most quiet and relaxing town that anyone could ever visit. But there's much more than that.

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Tingle Town  (ASR) Welcome to Tingle Town! Where you can relax! Or will you? #2273275 by Leslie Loo

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • Friendship • Experience
 Type:  Short Story
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Character development, flow, transitions, hitting all elements of a strong short story. Thank you. tracker

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The Wallet  (E) Victoria stops for lunch 800 miles from home. #2299337 by tracker

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Relationship • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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I am looking to improve the visual nature and completeness of a metaphor within my poems, trying to not hang too many new ideas off a single structure. Any criticism would be valuable to me.

Beholder's Bloom  (E) A problem--a beautiful one #2299166 by Slight

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Horror/Scary • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Novella
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A little Gothic True Crime HORROR, that has a couple spots of gore. It's novela length, but I don't capture you in the first page then it doesn't really matter HOW short or long it is, now does it. I look forward to your review, and ENJOY.

LUCKIEST DAY OF MY LIFE  (GC) Racists kidnap a man intent on making an example.WARNING: Physical injury &use of N-word. #2298867 by John Yossarian

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 Genre(s):  Animal • Career • Personal
 Type:  Non-fiction
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This is a nonfiction piece about my daily life on the job. Please tell me what needs to be fixed as I'm looking to do more with this piece in the future.

For The [Supposed] Love of Dogs  (13+) A typical day at a chaotic, laborious job. #2298831 by Artful Flower

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Comedy • Writing.Com
 Type:  Short Story
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Please take a look at an idea for the beginning of a short story, and let me know if it seems like something worth continuing. Cheers!

Work in Progress  (E) Playing around with an idea for the beginning of a short story. #2298202 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Adult • Thriller/Suspense • Business
 Type:  Sample
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Hi! Long-time member though have been off-line for over 10 years. This is the first I've written in a very long time and I'm looking for honest reviews and feedback to get me back on-track. This is a short introduction to a new character.

Jackson:Chronicles of an Executive Coach  (ASR) Jackson, international executive coach and corporate spy. Will he meet his match? #2298003 by adamthe_uh_writer

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Children's • Family
 Type:  Other
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This is a children's book meant to have full color illustrations. I would like honest reviews of the story.

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Lilly's pig  (E) A children's book describing my daughter's hospital stay through they eyes of her pig. #1910439 by kat

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Experience • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Hi!

I hope that you will take a chance to review my true story. I used quite a great amount of symbolism.
Thanks in advance!

The Holocaust Piano  (E) A forgotten piano comes to life. #2277661 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Personal • Experience
 Type:  Novella
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This is a memoir of the difficult times I experienced in my youth and their knock-on effects on my adult life. I'd appreciate feedback on any aspect of this work.

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My Girdle Is Killing Me!  (18+) Memoir. A quiet teenage boy struggles to cope when school bullying takes a sadistic turn. #2294117 by Dave Ryan

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Scientific • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello, today is my first day on this site. I just recently decided to put more effort into my writing, and to maintain it as one of the critical elements of my life, until I die. I am not sure what to expect from this site, yet. Please be very critical.

"Consciousness" (Circa 2023)  (E) In the future, we know better. #2296425 by Slight

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Adult • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Please review this intro to a short story I have in mind. I'm looking to expand on it in the future.

The Monster Inside The Bottle  (18+) A son ponders whether people will discover his father's dark past. #2296222 by Artful Flower

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 Genre(s):  Satire • Other • Other
 Type:  Article
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I wasn't happy with the first draft so I rewrote it.

Land Of The Free  (E) How we may solve our greatest problem and get rid of the super-rich. #2294818 by willy

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 Genre(s):  Family • Holiday • Inspirational
 Type:  Fiction
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This was a prompted story: Write a story about a Mother's Day experience. Maximum 500 words.

A Mother's Love  (E) Everlasting. Unconditional. #2295662 by jamisonbrown

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Friendship • Young Adult
 Type:  
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Howdy! I'm new to the site. Working on my first fiction (Romance Novel). Would love getting a feedback about how I'm doing. Constructive review will be much appreciated! Thanks before :)

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Finding Lika  (18+) Lika was Henry Kingsley's PA & best friend. He messed up & vowed to get her back. ROMANCE #2295091 by Natalie Rushman

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Fantasy • Romance/Love
 Type:  Chapter
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I'm about to start editing the rough draft of a novel I'm working on and would like feedback. I've added a dropnote with additional details for reviewers before the story.

All That Glitters | Prologue  (13+) Jun and Min discuss their investigation into the use of magic by humans. #2294789 by Frosty

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 Genre(s):  Mythology • Inspirational • Community
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review ###$$$$$$$

Insert title here  (E) Free your mind #2105379 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Mystery • Children's • Parenting
 Type:  Short Story
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My entry to the official contest. Is it a 'MYSTERY' story? Is it a fun read? Are there any typos I might have missed? Thank you!

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Detectives  (ASR) It takes skill, patience and hard work to solve a deep mystery. 2nd Place, Journey Genres #2293483 by Thankful Sonali HAPPY 23 WDC!

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 Genre(s):  Community • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review.

Serpent lies...  (E) How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering? #2110735 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Other • Other
 Type:  Fiction
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This is my first foray into flash fiction. I like how I've structured it, but I'm not sure if it tells the story I want it to. Any constructive feedback is welcome, especially unique ideas as to how to make it clearly lgbtq+ w/o being obvious about it.

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The Accident  (13+) Super flash fiction (35 words) #2292941 by Victoria

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Family • Young Adult
 Type:  Short Story
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I’m looking for big picture feedback. Is the story interesting? What works and what doesn’t work?

Adventurer in the Making  (ASR) Rowan wants to help people with her magic, but her parents have other ideas. #2279804 by Allie Gal

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 Genre(s):  Contest Entry • Philosophy • Experience
 Type:  Poetry
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Please provide your honest feedback with constructive criticism.

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #2292605 by Not Available.

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • History • Psychology
 Type:  Essay
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Just a short essay.

D-Day 1944: Could We Do It Again  (E) An examination of masculinity as being necessary to a civilized society. #2292574 by Raygunner

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 Genre(s):  Friendship • LGBTQ+ • Romance/Love
 Type:  Short Story
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I welcome reviews from anyone, but I am specifically looking for an in-depth review from an experienced writer/reviewer. Please don't comment on grammar (I teach English). I'm willing to pay a substantial amount of GP for this good, in-depth review.

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Truth Will Out  (18+) There's been enough death to last a lifetime, and here it lingers like a dark promise. #2292109 by Victoria

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 Genre(s):  Young Adult • Dark • Tragedy
 Type:  Poetry
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My first public poem. I want to get better at the mysterious and beautiful craft of poetry. Please give it a quick review. I am happy to hear any and all feedback on the work. Be as harsh as you want in the review. Thanks-Gus B.

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The Cycle of Sorrow  (E) A poem about the cycle of the world. #2291304 by Gus Beecher

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 Genre(s):  Drama • War • Other
 Type:  Chapter
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Starting a new project.

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The Girl From Mile End. Ch 1.  (18+) The war years. #2290480 by Bruce.

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 Genre(s):  Supernatural • Psychology • Sci-fi
 Type:  Chapter
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Feedback on pacing and character development!

Maniac Act 2  (13+) Beyond Reality #2290808 by Josy

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 Genre(s):  Supernatural • Sci-fi • Mystery
 Type:  Fiction
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New writer, wanted some criticism since I wanted to get into writing stories!

Maniac  (13+) This is just the first chapter, just want some criticism i'm pretty new to writing stories #2290667 by Josy

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Experience • Contest Entry
 Type:  Poetry
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Please provide your honest feedback with constructive criticism.

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #2289925 by Not Available.

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Mystery • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Short Story
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As the Title Description says, a sickness had taken over the planet of Jooflin. Their solution to stopping it was to use Time Travel to stop it from ever happening, and they were using humans to do it.

Time for a Change  (18+) A sickness has taken over the planet of Jooflin. Only Time Travel can save them now. #2289375 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Experience • Women's • Emotional
 Type:  Poetry
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Stream of consciousness/prose style poetry. Any feedback appreciated! :)

wearing my body  (13+) a prose poem on the ownership of my own body #2288920 by Charlie Carrol

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