Insight

Requesting Feedback

I spent the whole weekend editing Insight so I could focus on the next item on my too do list.  I accepted the constructive criticism from the first review of Chapter 1 and tried to incorporate as much as possible into my edits.  My only hope is that I did not over do it.  There was some advice given about using "passive" sentences instead of "active" sentences.  This was challenging for me since I'm not an English major; I had no idea what that meant.  I had to spend some time researching and I'm sure there are plenty of times I did not structure the sentence correctly.  Another common problem I have when writing is over using ellipsis.  What can I say... I write the way I talk.  I probably removed a hundred ellipsis throughout the book and replaced with the ordinary comma.  I know stories are supposed to be written in a professional/proper manner, but what's wrong with adding a little personality and deviating from the normal English grammar?  I guess I'll conform as does everyone so I don't give agents any reason to shy away from my story.  I don't have any feedback since I published the edited version.  Not sure if that's good or bad.  Maybe I should stick with my improper writing style.  It got a little more attention.  :)


Just as I was ready to call it an evening and go to sleep, I discovered that someone is actually reading these blogs.  I appreciate the support!  I never imaged anyone paid attention to my daily ramblings about the ups and downs of writing a story and trying to get it published.  What a rush.  That's almost as exciting as hearing that someone read my story.  It's also as nerve racking; worried that my every letter will be evaluated for writing style.  Please forgive me if there are type-o errors, bad grammar, incorrect sentence structure, etc.  Can I just say... Thank you Microsoft for spell check!  Without it; you wouldn't be able to understand a darn thing I write.