Crosstimbers Review Forum

Thanks, Max. I'll look for "I saw..." or "I heard..." and passive verbs.

Before I sent this to you, I checked for adverbs and removed eight, none of which will be missed.

I think you're right about the need for the MCs to face more ethical choices. The flat tone was deliberate, but it left me feeling that the story is lacking. This story is probably slated for A E Wilcox's Into the Darkness contest and I know that she's a stickler for plots with antagonists.... I like your idea of finding a child. And a dog, stories with dogs are always good.

Rejection is the stone on which a writer hones his craft.