Lyrically Speaking

Well, I just found this forum and thought I would jump in. I write lyrics only for the novel I am currently working on. It revolves around a band that writes their own music, so...

Here's one I think might be usable. I'd love to have some honest feedback on it


Within You

Hold on Love - your body moves me
Hold tight Love - you go right through me
This is real, this thing I feel grows deeper every moment
I'm with you, I'm in you
There is no me - I'm lost when I'm found, within you

Hold on Love - the night is long, time is just beginning
The world moves on but I stand still
And wait for your breath to stir me
I feel your approach like thunder in my blood
The earth shakes the wind howls and you are by my side
Knock me down with your soft touch
Our love is justified

Hold tight Love - there is no end, we're wrapped in eternity
Your heart is mine - our skin's entwined
The hunger rushes through me
I see the passion, the light in your eyes
Your voice is soft the words are strong there's fire within you
Lie still now Love in my arms
My soul to you is true

This is real - this thing I feel grows deeper every moment
Your body moves me - you go through me
Within you I am found
Your warm scent lingers intoxicating like wine
The magic flickers the flame burns bright my world belongs to you
Keep me close in your dreams
Our time begins anew

Within you, I am found, within you


LK Hunsaker 2000


"Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?" HD Thoreau