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Review by StephBee
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello's it's StephBee with a review from Gemini Star's Auction.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem paints a vivid picture of a man watching a sunset.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the words picked to paint this picture. In a hikiau you are a little limited, but I thought this was very descriptive and I could easily imagine it.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a Hikiau poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

If anything a case could be made for puctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as noted above. Vivid and rich!

Reviewed by StephB from the Sandbox.

A little girl in the sandbox of life.
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