Hi, my name is Jaye and I'm reviewing your piece on behalf of the Simply Positive Review Forum where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

General Impressions: This is a really cute piece that seems to reinforce the old saying, 'If it's not to be . . .".

Grammar & Punctuation:
Specific Suggestions:
In this line, ‘ and says, "Fill Your Hands you Son Of a-" '
Suggest: Using only the capital letters of normal sentence structure.


These comments are only my personal opinion. My suggestions are made in the spirit of making a good piece even better. Keep writing!




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