Hallo und guten morgen. Ich bin Jessica and I'll be reviewing Poetry Submission on behalf of .

First Impressions:
Interesting poem; you tell a good story, especially why we inhabitants should care about the Earth. You have great imagery and I like the rhyme scheme, though in places it runs a little long.

Mechanics:
To me this read almost like prose. I think you should break up the lines. Just remember this is MY opinion and you should do as you see fit.


I feel tired, I feel old. (I would add something here to make it long, but keep old at the end)
What they are doing to me is for the benefit of mankind I am told.

Things like Global warming and pollution just to name a few.

This didn't happen when I was young,
why does this happen now that I'm old?

Do you not realize the pain born is not fine
especially from your indecision is not only mine?

It affects all creatures that hunger, the young and the old in time.
(Add something here for time... maybe I hope this is a helpful rhyme.)


Look after me, remember I am frail,
don't lie to the People, we have had enough of the talltake out tall tales.

Don't let the Japanese hunt my beautiful whales.

You can all live in harmony, is that so hard to do?

Will you continue to kill each other until
all that is left of the Human is only a few?


Maybe it's all for the better that you all are lost,
why should the rest of my creatures bear all the cost?

So keep in mind what you do with your deeds,
you are not the only creature with needs.

Don't forget the creatures you and
your so called knowledge caused to perish.

You helped to destroy the world they did cherish.

Celebrate my day, enjoy all the cheers,
but please try to remember.

When you are gone, I still will be here for a few million years.

Other than that, I'd proofread to make sure everything else flows right.

Rating:
***

Final Thoughts:
Good luck and write on!

Guten tag!