Force of Nature [ASR] You are at the mercy of the elements. |
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** When one tugs at a single thing in nature, he finds it attached to the rest of the world. -John Muir- I am here to give your piece, "Forces of Nature" a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!! "Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points) Beautiful!! I loved the style you wrote this in... (If I have time, I'd like to try it. ) Your use of words and phrasing were good and helped the flow of the piece. Grammar/Punctuation/Rhyme Pattern -- All Superb and Consistent!! "Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points) I wouldn't really say it's a weakness or anything... but I thought... or felt like there could be another stanza either before or after the last one... to make the ending stronger. (Or I may be just crazy and others or yourself may think differently... *more blush*) "Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions) Nothing aside from what I said above. "Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter) I love the way you wrote this poem... Your words, negative because of the 'destruction' in them... But also loving, comforting... giving everyone a warning-- a warning to treat nature better. "KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING" ~mARi~
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