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  |  | Speak soft my name  [13+] Can Earth be given a voice? Not a children's poem.  |
| (5.0)| ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** When one tugs at a single thing in nature, he finds it attached to the rest of the world. -John Muir- I am here to give your piece,  "Speak Soft My Name" a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!! "Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points) It was lovely, absolutely!!  The lines, I thought flowed well. Although, I'm a big fan of rhymes... I thought not having it rhyme was great. Because the words might sound forced and tight if you used rhymes here. Grammar/Punctuation-- Good Job!!  The emotions packaed here were wonderfully expressed, the sadness and grief ringing with each word... "Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points) Didnt find any weakness.  "Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions) I've got only one thing to suggest, you can choose to ignore it though...  "Whisper soft my name:"I thought it would sound better if you used the adverb 'softly' instead.  "Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter) I thought this piece was a 'beautiful disaster'... 'beauty' corresponding with the way it was written, and the 'disaster' corresponding with the message within.    "KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING"~mARi~
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