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When one tugs at a single thing in nature,
he finds it attached to the rest of the world.
-John Muir-



I am here to give your piece,
*Right*"We Are The World"*Left*
a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!!



"Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points)

This was very beautiful. The message rang loud and clear, throughout... We are one with world and the world is one with us... neglecting our planet Earth means neglecting ourselves too. *Smile*

Your use of words, your phrasing... grammar/punctuation/spelling-- All wonderfully done!! *Wink*


"Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points)

I know it's free verse, but still... I thought perhaps you could work on the flow better. The longer lines were sort of 'rough' comapred to the others when I read the piece out loud. *Blush*


"Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions)

None aside from what I said above. (You can choose to ignore those though. *Blush*)


"Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter)

Thank you for sharing this piece to all of us. It is a perfect, tribute to Mother Earth, if you ask me. *Thumbsup*



*Exclaim*"KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING"*Exclaim*
~mARi~
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