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When one tugs at a single thing in nature,
he finds it attached to the rest of the world.
-John Muir-



I am here to give your piece,
*Right*Planet Earth*Left*
a review for the "Earth Day Challenge"!!



"Vast Blue Seas & Oceans" (Strong Points)

Wow!! I mean, really... shocking. First thing I liked about this piece was the pleasant, visual presentation you've written it in. *Smile*

Then of course, the flow of the words you used, the pattern and choice of words were all noteworthy. *Thumbsup*

You didn't use any punctuation at all in here... Normally, I would be put off with the lack of 'dramatical pauses' (as I call it) that punctuations give... But I thought it worked quite well to the advantage of this piece. *Delight*

The sadness, the guilt, the dark emotions circling around this piece is very powerful... The way you ended it was a perfect close to such a negative, heart-breaking message. With all the things we've done, perhaps, there really is no other way to repent aside from the answer you have given-- Death! *Cry*


"Convenient, Comforting Technology" (Weak Points)

Nothing at all. *Wink*


"Supposed-To-Be Caretaker- Man" (Suggestions)

Don't change anything, it was beautiful. *Heart*


"Wide, Warm Land Forms" (Additional Chatter)

I truly enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing this to all of us. *Cool*



*Exclaim*"KEEP WRITING & INSPIRING"*Exclaim*
~mARi~
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